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Review #1, by ti2ger003 A Trail of Embers

23rd December 2010:
Oh, this is lovely. Most everything you read about Sirius' family is from his point of view-- it's refreshing to see a different take on things. I like how Regulus' and Sirius' views of things differ-- in OoTP, didn't Sirius mention that Regulus was the golden boy of the family? And here's Regulus saying the complete opposite. It's very true of siblings in general: everyone's always convinced everyone else is getting the better end of the deal. I also really like Regulus' reaction to Sirius being burned off the family tree; most times people mention it, it seems like Regulus just accepted it, moved on, whatever, but here, it sticks with him, and that's nice. It shows how deep their relationship really went, even if they weren't all that close. Blood is thicker than water, after all. :) And I know you said this was un-betaed, but really, I didn't notice. :) I dunno if it's spell-check or if you're just a conscientious writer or what, but I honestly didn't know it wasn't beated until you mentioned it. :)

Merry Christmas!

Author's Response: I think Sirius was definitely the "golden boy" before he was sorted into Gryffindor, but I have a hard time thinking that it extended beyond that, knowing the Black family. Regulus is always character that I wished I knew more of, and so I decided to write a story about him!

I'm glad you liked this and thanks so much for your review!

Annie


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Review #2, by amandatonks A Trail of Embers

19th December 2010:
I absolutely love the way you depicted Regulus! I think he's such an interesting character; this story depicts everything we know about him and Sirius perfectly. The addition of Audrey is a wonderful way to understand why Regulus decided to betray Voldemort. I felt so bad for Regulus because of the way his family treated him, as well as losing Audrey. But I think Audrey did the right thing. Also, the description of the dying embers throughout really added to the story, in my opinion at least. :) So anyways, enough of my rambling. This was a fantastic little one-shot. I really enjoyed reading it!

Author's Response: Regulus is a character i always wanted to explore, but his motivations in the books are so unclear, I thought he might need some impetus to go through with destroying the horcrux, so I invented Audrey! The embers meant a lot of different things throughout the story, and even though I would do it differently now, it's one of my favorite parts of the story.

I'm glad you enjoyed it and I'm sorry it's taken forever for me to reply to this. I really appreciated your review!

Annie


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Review #3, by PenguinsWillReignSupreme A Trail of Embers

9th April 2010:
I am so, so sorry this took so long, lovely. I really am.

First of all, your focuses:

Characterisation
I thought he was brilliant. He kind of oozed tortured Black family boy. I think he grew and grew throughout the story and by the end, I was completely convinced about his character as Regulus. For someone we've never met, he kind of fit my expectations completely by the ending part - from the last flashback onto the last line.

I won't deny my scepticism when I saw it was Regulus/OC - OCs in one-shots are something I've never been much of a fan of - but you completely upset my expectations with this. Audrey could have become merely a device to push the plot forward but she wasn't. I did feel sorry for both of them as their relationship progressed and it really was quite heartbreaking when Regulus said:
I thought about what she said but by the time I understood what she meant, she was already with someone else.
That line really stood out for me.

Format
I don't really have much to say on this. The flashbacks were integrated really well into the story itself and the plot unravelled really well with them. The story itself is long but it really didn't feel it which is a testament to the way the plot pushes forward.

Concept
Again, this will be short. I've brushed on this but I think it's a wonderful way to demonstrate another force on what made Regulus do what he did. It really is a fantastic idea.


Dialogue, description, all of it was absolutely gorgeous. So natural and the flow was brilliant. I rarely read anything like this and it was so refreshing.

I really do think it's wonderful.

I'm so sorry you had to wait so long for this. I hope it's up to scratch!


xx

P.S. This man hunt you're on is entertaining me greatly!

Author's Response: Gah! I'm sorry I didn't respond to this sooner! Thanks so much for stopping by. I'm happy you liked this. Regulus is one of my favorite minor characters and I always wondered why he did what he did. Audrey was really just going to be an aside when I started this originally, but I ended up really liking her and wanted to put more of her in the story. I know it's a bit long, but I've found that, in general, I really can't tell a short story. I'm working on that, haha.

Again, so glad you liked this and that Regulus lived up to your expectations! Sorry it took me a bit to respond.

lovelovelove,
Annie


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Review #4, by Laugharama_llama A Trail of Embers

4th March 2010:
Hey Ella! It's Katrina with your TGS review :)

This was so incredibly detailed, it's kind of shocking. It all flowed so wonderfully! I don't have any cc, so this is going to be quite the raving review, FYI.

I loved the repetition of this line "No one's ever heard of a cowardly Black." It really fit for the whole theme of the story, and gave the reader a good feel of how Regulus was feeling, aside from all your wonderful description.

I also loved the idea of Audrey. It was nice to see that Regulus had something Sirius didn't, and in the end it was the only thing that mattered.

This whole fic was great in my eyes, because it showed how there are two sides of the story. I got the impression that Sirius didn't know how unloved Regulus felt, and didn't really care to ask, or even try to understand.

The summary was also wonderful. When I read it, I thought, "Oh, this is going to be good." And you didn't let me down! I really enjoyed this :)
Katrina

Author's Response: Katrina! Thanks for popping by. Haha, thanks! I love rave reviews!

That line was one of the ones that really stuck in my head when I started this story. It was strange that Regulus did something so brave when he was a Slytherin. I also had always liked the idea of Audrey choosing Regulus over Sirius and also that she was what made things change for him.

I so happy that you enjoyed this! Thanks for the great review!

Ella


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Review #5, by FannyPrice A Trail of Embers

2nd March 2010:
I adore your Regulus; he's one my favorites to write as well. Both brothers are amazingly complex creatures, but people don't normally try to write Regulus and stick to Sirius, so Regulus hasn't been...ruined yet. Is that a harsh word, but I'm sure you know what I'm talking about, all those Marauder/OCs out there, yeah. You're reasoning behind his selfish behavior was very real, and while not excusing it, made it empathetic to the reader kind of thing...

Anyway, very well done. I like the italicized flashbacks and for the most part I think they flowed very well into the story. There were a few points where I thought the flashbacks were a little two jumpy or maybe just a little to close together. But, no, as a whole they were well done.

I think one of my favorite moments and when he is comparing his parents to each other and how they look so eerily similar and the allusion back to his earlier comments about how and his brother looked related. Eerie is right! Also, the metaphor with the embers and how he always smelled like the burned tapestry, almost like fate calling him to his death--a betrayal of what he used to believe. Very good.

Cheers,
Miranda

Author's Response: Geeek! I'm so glad you liked my characterization of Regulus. I know what you mean about Sirius being 'ruined'. Regulus is the less explored brother, which is one of the reasons I wanted to write a piece about him.

I always did have trouble with the flashbacks. I wrote them independently from the rest of this and sometimes I had a hard time working them in. I actually just started in on a rewrite of this, so I'll see what I can do to make them more cohesive.

Everyone seems to like that part! I've always thought it was really creepy that the parents were so closely related, but no one ever really mentions. And AhHa! "fate calling him to his death", that was exactly what I was going for, I just didn't know how to put it into words.

Thanks for your review Miranda!
Ella


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