This was so sweet. He totally idolizes her in the beginning, really getting into the flowery language that I suppose she does deserve, but then, as they become friends, he sees her as a person, the kindness and the flaws and quirks that everyone has. I'm glad that you put that in there as I wouldn't have been able to connect otherwise.

The point where she kisses him after he's raging (quietly) about the newest boy was quite adorable. I can totally just see him going off and her watching him steadily and then deciding to kiss him, to take a risk that doesn't seem like her but does all the same.

I didn't see any spelling or grammar errors and this flowed so well and so nicely and was actually really sweet!

xChar

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"I was arrogant, never before rejected, and entirely self-confident, as Malfoy’s generally are." To keep up with the past tense I would put 'were' instead of are. There are a few other shift tenses, I think, but other than that you're fine. I didn't catch any spelling or grammatical errors that were glaringly obvious so kudos!

I absolutely adored this. Not a fan of Keith Urban, but I've always liked a good Rose/Scorpius story and this didn't disappoint. I adore that you told it from his perspective as normally it's from her perspective which is all fine and well, but it's nice to see how Scorpius feels for once.

I love how easily she agreed to be his girlfriend. A bit fluffy and cutesy, but that's how it works out sometimes in life, isn't it? I wouldn't know, I'm one of those coy girls. Ha ha.

Anyway, I loved your characterization of both Scorpius and Rose. It was quite cute to see him as pompous and a bit egotistical, but at the same time he wasn't a womanizer or rude to Rose. That was a nice change from the fics that I'm accustomed to.

The flow and pacing seemed well done. I liked your word choice and plot, too.

Over all, a nice and tender tale! But I don't think it was too soppy or romantic, just about right in my opinion. ^_^ Nice work!

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aww sweet! i liked your writing style, very original. i've never seen it like that. and a very cute story. :)

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