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Review #1, by AngelEyez3954 One Night...

25th August 2009:
Hello, Angeleyez3954 here with your review!

I thought this story was very nicely written. It was sad to see Lily go through what she went through, but I thought that you portrayed her and her situation nicely. I also enjoyed James' role in this story, as it was nice to see him portrayed as something other than an egotistical Quidditch player.

Again, a great story :)

Author's Response: Yah... I love James when he isn't an idjit! He's one of my favorite characters... love to incorporate him a ton in any Marauder story! Thanks for the great review! :O)


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Review #2, by LilyFlower_x One Night...

17th August 2009:
I think it was a sweet ending :)
very nice story, kinda deprssing at the beginning
but very sweet 10/10

Author's Response: Thank u! Thats so nice. I'm glad u like my story! Um. Thanks again! :O)

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Review #3, by Miss_Maurader One Night...

6th August 2009:
It made me tear up a bit, but great, just great!
When my chapter gets validated, u should read my AU story of their deaths, its gunna be good :)
Anyways, Brilliant!


Author's Response: Wow... just wow... that's SOO nice! Thanks! Anywho... I'll ABSOLUTELY look up your story! Thank you sooo much for the review... :O)

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Review #4, by evanlyn One Night...

5th August 2009:
This is quite good! The banne ris amazing and really...forced me to read this. You could not see that banner and not read it!

My suggestions for sonfics is to separate the song lyrics into one phrase at a time and try to make the story fit the song lyrics a bit more. The paragraphs of your story were a tad too long, you could split them up into smaller ones.

Other then that, perfection! You really create a wonderful, chilly atmosphere. I could feel her nightgown whipping around her ankles, you know?

Keep up your writing! I would suggest you try a one-shot because I think you could do a really good one, judging by this story, you don't even need lyrics in there!!

Author's Response: Wow! Thanks... thats realy nice! All banner credits go to the amazing .1smallTREE at TDA! Th ebanner is incredible isn't it?!? Well... thanks for the advice and. THANKS! :O)

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Review #5, by Burnt Cheese One Night...

5th August 2009:
One thing you really shouldn't do is state in your summary that you are bad at summaries. It's like a big fan fiction no-no. When you say you suck at summaries, people just automatically assume that you're bad at writing too, therefore they don't click on your link to read.

It's a pretty good story, as far as I can tell. The ending was sublime, actually :) Couldn't have ended it better. The suicide part is good, and James stopping her, too. The song seems a bit too dark, but I love Evanescence, so whatever :D

Keep writing, you have talent.

The ginormous spaces between your paragraphs are a little distracting, too.

Author's Response: Thanks for the tips... I'll fix that up asap! Sorry bout the paragraph spacings... my computer was freaking out and being all weird... Thanks for reviewing! Glad you liked it! :O)

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