I'm not sure if this could be any more depressing. Cheating always makes me lose hope in relationships, even if it's fictional cheating, haha.
I love the way this is written though. The characters are pretty developed too. Great job!Author's Response: I'm glad you like it anyway! It's going to get even worse, unfortunately. The musical that I've taken the themes from is incredibly depressing (but incredible). Thanks for the review! :) Report Review
my review won't show up. basically i'm happy you're developing it and i love gloriaAuthor's Response: Thank you so much for our supportive reviews! :) Report Review
:O YAY! YOU UPDATED!
holy flaming cow bells.
that was so good.
mad is such an amazing character.
Author's Response: Oh, hooray! I was afraid everyone (all four people, haha) would have given up on me! I'm glad you liked this chapter. It was a new idea that occured to me last night. This was originally only supposed to be three chapters, but there were so many dreaded pot holes that I just had to do something about it. Report Review
Hi, ChellDaBelle1030 here *waves*
Oh my! What a phenomal piece. You've really captured Gloria's pain here without even saying that she was in pain. I feel so bad for her, really. Wow, amazing.
And George! What a shocking and original turn. My word! She is in love with George! Oh and I like the name Arietta, what does it mean?
This is a really promising piece andd I can't wait to see where you take this. Feel free to post in my thread for a requewst when you've updated!Author's Response: Thank you!!
Well, she\\\'s not really in love with George. I suppose it could be love at first sight. It\\\'s more that she\\\'s desperately searching for some kindness or warmth, and she finds it in a stranger\\\'s eyes. ...I think Ariette means ruler of the house? Something like that. I didn\\\'t really pick it for meaning, actually. I just thought it was pretty :)
Thank you so much! I\\\'ll let you know! I appreciate your review, Chell :) Report Review
This is absolutly gorgeous. Its captivating and so vivid! I can't wait to see where it goes; I will definitely be coming back to read. You've also made me very curious about this musical. I love musicals (obsessively) and I've never even heard of this one so I'll definitely have to look it up.
Anyway, I definitely admire you for taking this approach of using song lyric based chapters. And it really works! Song fics aren't usually my favorite but I think you've integrated the lyrics incredibly well.
George!! Adorable. I have a little thing for Blaise fics too so way to go! The contrast between the world she lives in and the much kinder one offered by George is vibrant and I can imagine how intoxicating each one would be for her... I like that you've set up the George relationship to be complex but you're also not ignoring the Blaise marriage. You're not hurrying it up by glazing over the details and just saying that he's now really mean to her. I like the idea of her losing a son and the subsequent effect that would have on Blaise.
The dancing scene is beautiful and so intense! I'm sorry I can't really offer any criticism...I just love where this is going. Your banner is gorgeous and the story is so fast paced. Your image of George is exactly how I see him and I'm so glad he's there!! Your grammar is also superb so no worries there! I'll keep coming back and reading. Hopefully later I'll have some suggestions or something. This is a great intro :-)
Keep it up! If it's not too much trouble could you let me know when the next chapter is up? I really don't want to forget to check.
~LunnahAuthor's Response: Oh, jeez! \\\"Wild Party\\\" is truly fierce in every sense of the word. If you need any other recommendations, I would be happy to give them out :)
I generally learn towards Fred when I write, but I decided I was going to go major canon and write for George. He\\\'s a little bit overlooked, really. And this is the first time I\\\'ve really attempted Blaise, so it was interesting to try something new. It\\\'ll be nice to get advice from a fan of his, too!
Yeah, I really love this banner. I\\\'m going to have chapter images done...soon...
Thank you so much! I really appreciate this. I\\\'m always wary about my songfics.
I\\\'ll definitely let you know! It might be a bit longer, though. I just got back from a lovely weeklong vacation...and now I\\\'m unmotivated... Report Review
this seems promising. i'm really interested in reading more!Author's Response: Thank you so much. I should have the next chapter by the end of next week at the very latest :) Report Review
I love it.
If I'm being honest, I think you should write more because I'm hooked.
I love that you've used characters that are really only mentioned in passing in the books. Blaise only has one scene. Astoria gets a glance from Harry.
I think this would make a good short story rather than a one shot.
The last section was amazing. Mind-blowing. The way she was desperately searching Blaise for some sign that he loved her. I'm going to have to go look up the song because the lyrics are beautiful. Just like your writing style.
: wanders off to add to favourites :Author's Response: Thank you so, so much! I really appreciate your review. I was so worried how this was going to be recieved- or if it was at all. This was a major experiment for me, since I'm not the greatest when it comes to song fics, but the idea just kept nagging at me. Plus, that's what worried me, is that people don't really pay attention to minor character stories. Then again, with my history, it's clear that I'm not just seeking reviews, haha.
This actually IS going to be a short story rather than a one-shot (for once in my life. Jeez, just look at my author page.) There should be about four chapters, each using a song from the show.
Thank you so much! I tried to build it in a similar way to the song. You'll hear it if you do get a chance to listen to it. I actually recommend the entire musical, if you're into it. The music is fantastic.
Thanks again for your fabulous review! I really appreciate it :) Report Review
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