i rather have draco and hermione rather then her and ron and please write soon im dieing to know what happens next!!!

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I loved Hermione's dream, first the stranger is all loving and gentle, but then he's angry and posesive. It's so Malfoy! Anyway keep writing and update soon!!!

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This is so mysterious and you wont give any clues. Great story though!

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Hahaha bollocks! That is indeed very interesting. I love this story. Why is everyone mad with Hermione?

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OMG! She lost her virginity to a stranger! Well I hope it was to Malfoy!

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I actually liked the dream sequence. I think it would be interesting if she keeps having the dreams up until the point the dream eventually reveals to her who the father is, or she figures it out from the little details in the dream.

I have a feeling that Draco is being nice because he knows he is the father, but perhaps I'm wrong. Don't want to jump the gun by saying that, but I guess things well.

I think the way you wrote Ron and Hermione is fine, but he's going to be super upset when he finds out about the baby and if it didn't come directly from her.

Again, great chapter, and I hope you update soon because I am totally hooked now.

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I love that you had Ron ask her to the dance. I always felt if they had the opportunity to attend another dance, he might actually pluck up the courage to ask her this time around, after his failed attempts at the Yule Ball.

I'm a bit surprised at how drunk he got though, and how forceful he became. It just irks me to think of Ron doing something like that, even if he was drunk.

I'm glad that Malfoy stepped in, even for his own amused reasons. Again, great chapter and onto the next one.

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I like that you did not skip Hermione's birthday. I think a lot of people totally forget that her birthday is in September, so she is always older than both of the boys.

I like her gifts, although I'm not sure Ginny could afford something like that on her own. Maybe I'm wrong, but with the income the Weasley family gets, and if it is a secret, I just can't see Ginny affording that on her own.

I love that every time Draco opens his mouth to shoot an insult back at Hermione, he shuts his mouth. You know that he just wants to say something about the pregnancy, but he can't. Haha.

I can't wait until the Halloween Ball, and it was a nice touch with Hermione hearing the heartbeat and all.

Again, great chapter and onto the next one.

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Okay, so finally I know why Ron is so upset. I thought he knew about what she did at the dance! Argh, now he is going to be upset once he finds out! I love how they made up though, and the almost kiss. It's going to be awkward once she finds out who the father is because it's like will her feelings for Ron still be there?

Of course, Malfoy can't keep his mouth shut. I'm not surprised he let those students get away with basically no punishment. He seems like the type to do something just to get something in return.

Again, great chapter and onto the next one.

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Oh my! Haha. I laughed when Ginny mentioned something about Pansy being the godmother of the child. What a ridiculous notion that is! I loved that thought though, and how people think irrational when they're afraid someone won't forgive them.

How embarrassing for Hermione though? Poor girl. All the professors know and half of them treat her just darn awful. People make mistakes, and yes, I'm sure they're upset it's due to a student of such high caliber, but come on.

And Draco having to know! That's just bloody awful! Haha. Again, good chapter!

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Oh my! If Ron was mad before, wait until he finds out Hermione's secret! Dang!

I thought Ginny was a little harsh, but I can understand why she would be upset too, especially with how Hermione said she can take care of herself. I just don't think Ginny should have judged her like that.

I love how you described Hermione thinking about having to listen to Draco in class. Haha. I literally cracked up, and also when Harry complained about having Divinations first thing and then complaining about that to Hermione too!

Again, great chapter.

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Okay, I think I understand why Ron is so upset with Hermione. He must know about the dance, and I didn't understand if the dance was in the past, or in the present, and you were jumping around or not. Very interesting, so at least that makes sense now!

I wish I had a room as nice as Hermione and Draco's! Haha. I'm totally jealous she gets to share it with a hot guy too.

Again, great chapter, and I like the little flashback thoughts because that really cleared things up for me!

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To start off with, I just have to say I'm a bit confused by the start of this chapter. Why is Ron so upset? Because Hermione became Head Girl? I don't get why they would be upset about her achieving a goal like that. Perhaps I am reading this wrong?

Still, really good chapter. I love how Hermione put Malfoy in his place and what not. It's nice to see a story where she sticks up for herself to the point of giving decent comebacks and insults.

I love the concept of the two sharing a common room too. That will definitely be interesting.

Anyways, onto the next chapter!

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Hello! I'm here from the review tag!

Now, what to say about this chapter. I rather enjoyed this chapter. It was short, but sweet to the point, leaving the reader wanting more. Although I don't mind longer chapters, I often like stories that have shorter chapters and leave you wanting more instead of droning on to the point of making you bored. Good job with that.

I can see Hermione behaving like this due to being drunk. While she may be seen as the good girl, she often has a streak in her that can be seen as a rule breaker, and with her inhibitions not in place due to the alcohol, this is totally believable.

I also like that you leave the chapter with her not knowing who the other person is, although most of us can guess. Another technique meant to keep the reader guessing and get them to read the next chapter, which I have a feeling I'm going to be doing.

Overall, loved it and good job!

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I am enjoying your writing, and as I said before can not review every chapter. I would find it ieasier if they were a bit longer. I have found that when they are at least 1500 to 2000+ words it goes smoother. guess I read to fast, seems I am having to stop every 10 minutes. but you are doing grreat.

Author's Response: I'm sorry for the length! I tend to always write short chapters, although lately they've been a bit longer. Thank you for the reviews!

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what happenned to our Hermione. we can all fall, but she took a big plunge.. I thought her able to handle any hurt or crsis, but then she is just a 17 yr old girl who whas been through more than we can imagine.. first chapt fast and furous and not much explanaiton.. corgive my gramar and spelling.. I will try to review, but am not a good critic. plus this computer is hard to write on, but when get a better one will re read and put my thoughts down more often. seems like it is going to be entertaining and emotional. both by the way we know is good for keeping readers. good job

Author's Response: She got a bit mixed up and made some mistakes. It happens to the best of us, and was essential to include as the foundation for this story.

Thanks for the review!

Bri

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I reviewed chapter 8 like, 2 years ago, and I thought it's been a while so this chapter deserves an update too :)

As many people have already said, the dream part was ah-mazing, it almost felt as if I was there, watching it. Also the Romione part - EPIC! - Although some of the reviews are against there being Romione and want Dramione all throughout, I feel that most stories are far too cliche and ignore Ron completely. My favourite thing about this story is that it is NOT cliche. If it was Draco and Hermione would be drastically in love without knowing each other and I would be bored. However, I am definitely not, the pace is perfect and realistic, and well though out. We can see that Draco is changing and is being careful(possibly because he knows something.. ;]) around Hermione, yet there isn't the whole ''looking into her chocolate brown eyes'' laaa-dee-daa as if he's had some sort of spell cast on him. The characters are perfect and haven't changed drastically from the canon(which is something else I love)

But mostly, it's just well written. All the description and emotion frames the story perfectly and just makes it fantastic.

Thank you so much for not forgetting Masquerade :):):):)

~Em

P.S .. I want your writing skills >.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the lovey feedback! I'm so glad to see someone back from before my 2 year hiatus :) It means a lot!

I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter so much. I'm going to to try and update with Chapter 10 as soon as possible!

And aw, haha, you're too sweet. Thank you :)

Bri, xx

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Wow that dream description was awesome! Is Draco being nicer to Hermione because she's pregnant, or because he knows he's the father of the baby?!! And also even though I support everything dramione, the last sentence of a sober Ron Weasely was adorable!! Update ASAP!!!

Author's Response: Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it :) I'd say that Draco is being nicer simply because Hermione is pregnant. And haha, glad you liked that line!

Thanks for the lovely feedback, I'll be sure to update soon!

Bri, xx

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This story is ok ... It's a little boring though . I think it needs a little drama and more references to the masquerade ball . Just my opinion

Author's Response: It would be much more helpful to provide specific criticism and suggestions, rather than just general statements. Also, the masquerade ball is not a main focus of the story, despite the title, so that's why it's not referenced much. The title is more inspired by the masked man and what happens afterwards as a result of her decisions.

Thank you for the review!

Bri

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Hello, I'm Val from the BvB battle ^^
So, first off, let me say I don't ship Dramione (like, at all), but I'm starting to read some recommendations and well, that's an awesome thing about the battle isn't it? Finding new things?
Most of the time, what keeps me off this pairing isn't Ron, but the OOC thingies used to bring together the bully bloke and the clever bullied girl, into gentleman and careless witch. However, seeing as they had no idea of who te other was (I'm just assuming he's Mr Mysterious although I could be rambling nonsensly) and were under the effects of alcohol, it was believable. I remember Hermione getting flushed in third year by butterbeer, though I probably would have insisted more in her hesitation, and then make an excuse about I don't know, Gryffie courage and determination.
I usually don't like graphic kissing descriptions but you did it really vaguely, smoothly and somehow softly (Ikr? Little crazy here, because it was more than passionate but that's how it felt with your words) so it didn't bother me or anything.
Your descriptions in general were really enjoyable and I was slightly sad the chapter was short. Because I really liked them, and you could exploit that, talking more about the night's atmosphere and the blurriness of it all.
Anyhow, I liked this first chapter, it was a nice and passionate start, and I'm looking forward to know what you're doing with it and how you're introducing the other characters and their relationships!

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it, despite your reluctance towards certain ships and scenes. I'll keep any and all comments in mind! It means a lot to know someone is reading and enjoying, so once again thanks so much for the review. :)

Bri, xx

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As it turned out, the town had Potions together right before dinner.

^

Do you mean the two?

Well, I find myself laughing at Harry's comment. I normally don't read Hogwarts era because I can never get into Harry that much, I prefer reading him in post-Hogwarts or Next Generation, but this story isn't about him so never mind.

I think you write really well. The only thing that irks me a little is your use of exclamation points. I know it sounds ridiculous but then I read it as shouting in my head and that's a lot of shouting. I know the characters are excited/angry but I guess that's more of a stylistic thing so ignore my comment.

I was kind of confused why Ron doesn't have class with Harry/Hermione because I thought he and Harry were on the same level and regardless wouldn't he still be with his year/class because I don't remember them breaking them off unless it was due to an OWL grade.

Oh, and I thought you hit Ginny's temper really well. I'm glad that you didn't have her just accept it right then like a lot of pregnancy fanfics do. However, I was kind of surprised with her comment:

"Ugh, I shouldn't have let you leave by yourself! It was your first time drinking, I knew that! This is all my fault!" Ginny cried.

Ginny is younger than her. I don't see Ginny as getting drunk herself or Molly/Arthur allowing Ginny to drink. So, I was kind of confused because how old is she supposed to be? 15, right?

Author's Response: Ah yes, I keep meaning to go back and fix that little typo. Thank you!

I've had a few people say that about the classes... I think you're right, they don't level them, but this would be their 7th year so I think Hermione would be in mainly high level NEWT classes and whatnot. Harry would probably be in most of Ron's classes, I must go back and change that!

The bit about Ginny's comment, I've always seen Ginny as a bit of a rebel and someone who is much more mature, mentality-wise, than her age. Whether she had actual experience drinking or not, I think she would have enough sense to realize the risks that come along with drinking so much, especially for the first time. I think this was just me expressing the little motherly Ginny I have imagined in my head. Also, she would be around 16 at this point.

Thank you for the feedback!

Bri, xx

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Hi there!

I'm not very experienced with Dramiones, as I usually ship Romione, but I actually really, really enjoyed this first short chapter! You managed to keep Hermione IC even while she was drunk and I really liked how she knew that she wasn't acting like herself, but carried on with it anyway. It makes the situation a lot more believable, and I liked the way you brought her together with Mr Mystery ;)

All of your description was gorgeous, and there was enough to set the scene and paint a clear picture in your mind, without having to enter hugely extended detailing of the stone walls. I also liked how you wrote the passionate ending, since we got a good idea of why Hermione could ignore her usual good side, but it wasn't tasteless at all.

You had lovely flow, too, and no typos that I can spot :P And I can't wait to see where you go with this!
~TGK

Author's Response: Ahh, thank you so much! I really appreciate the lovely feedback :) It means a lot, and I'm glad I'm doing something right! Haha.

Bri, xx

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An interesting start to this story. I get the gist of what's gonna happen, but I'm still extremely curious to know more; great set-up to a great story. :)

Sam.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the lovely review! It's much appreciated. :)

Bri, xx

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It's Rosie from the blue vs. bronze review battle! :)

First off, this was written wonderfully. I honestly couldn't find a single grammatical/punctuation mistake, so congratulations!

I loved your description; the imagery really came to life, and very few authors can make you feel as if you're really with the characters.

Definitely an amazing start! To be honest, I'm very anti-Dramione, and probably will stay that way forever. So even for a Dramione, I've got to admit: Wonderful story! :)

~Rosie

Author's Response: I saw that you did this by mistake, thanks anyways though! It's appreciated :)

I'm glad you liked it :D Especially despite the fact you're not a Dramione shipper! haha

Bri, xx

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I love that you're taking your time with getting to the real Dramione. The fact is, Ron & Hermione were together, so there's no point avoiding it. I think you wrote their little scene at the end beautifully. A few things:

"It was the eve of November 16" So, is it November 15th or the evening on the 16th?

"Malfoy was lounging on the couch lazily, head slung back as he gazed at the ceiling in utmost boredom." Ugh, so gorgeous.

"He didn't call her "mudblood" and most of the time took simply to ignoring her presence.
She supposed it was better than nothing." I really appreciate that you are slowly changing Malfoy, and in a believable way, That's been my main problem with Dramione before- most people just seem to lobotomise them both and then have them jump into bed together. You're slowly making changes that make sense.

I love the part where Ron and Harry ask her to spy on Malfoy. That is just SO them.

"For one brief moment, Hermione forgot all her troubles. She forgot about the baby. She forgot about the masked man. She forgot about the difficult times soon to come.

She forgot it all. After all, she was kissing a very sober Ron Weasley and it felt lovely." I just really like this bit. It's worrying me though! I know that at some point this will be a real Dramione fic, but I think you're writing Romione so beautifully. Do what you've gotta do, but please don't break Ron's heart too much!

Really looking forward to the next chapter, and have loved reading it all so far.
Athene xo

Author's Response: Thank you thank you thank you for all the amazing feedback! I don't even know how to respond to it all, haha!

I'm really glad you've enjoyed everything so far :) It really means a lot.

I'm sorry to worry you about the Romione! I'm trying my best to make this believable so I think I need to write quite a bit of it before moving onto Dramione o.o I'll try not to hurt Ron too much!

Thank you, once again! I hope to have the next Chapter up soon!

Bri, xx

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