Well now, Lily isn't being very kind is she? I do wonder though, she wasn't planning on taking Scorpius the whole time was she? I'd feel dreadfully awful forRosie if that turned out to be the case... Wow, I do get too involved in stories, they just seem to draw people in sometimes, don't they? I look forward to your next installment.

-Amyyy

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WHO! Finally a new chapter! I can't wait until the next one! You are a very brilliant author and I LOVE this story!!! I have never really been a fan of Harry, Ginny, Hermoinie, and Ron's kids well that time era and such. It makes me sad to think that everyone has grown up, but your story doesn't have that. This is fantastic please, please, please post a new chapter soon! I look forward to it. Thanks. -FM

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great update susan! I was glad to read this chapter! I meant to leave a review earlier but I've had a pretty busy weekend with homework etc. anyway, great chapter! I really want to slap Lily in the face right now! She's coming off really mean and almost selfish in my opinion. but I suppose if she was nice/understanding all the time the story wouldn't be as interesting. Sorry if I ramble. I ramble sometimes...
I was rooting for Harry! Go Harry!!! Way to tell your daughter!!! *cheers*
great chapter. I'm looking forward to Lily and Scorpius' wedding! I'll bet that'll be dramatic (if the wedding happens). :)
random thought but I saw fiction central will be closing down.I'm kind of sad about that.

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*slaps Lily*
Argh! I'm surrounded by these people in my school. -.-
I hope Rose can kick some serious ass agaisnt Scorpius and Lily. Show 'em what a real woman can do.

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Hello :D
I really am in love with the story 's plot and the characterization of rose.
The chpt was really interesting.
Can't wait for the next chpt .
Keep up the good work :D
10/10

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"Hate was a strong word, but not strong enough. Rose wanted to slaughter them both."

Loved that line, lol I cracked up when I read it. Another wonderful chapter. I enjoyed the tea leaves with Ming =) The next chapter should be very interesting!

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Wow Susan, not only can you make amazing graphics but your writing is excellent! I'm Ardawling on TDA by the way lol little junior artist *smirks*

I found this chapter so endearing. I liked how you went back to Rose and Scorpius's growing up, so we have an idea how they got to where they are now. You write with such ease, and it feels natural to read. You pay attention to details and grammar, which I dare say some author's forget lol.

Though we don't really have a canon for Rose and Scorpius as Rowling didn't write them grown up, I feel as though the way you write them is spot on. Scorpius sounds like Draco, but not completely. It's obvious he's a Malfoy but he has his own style. Rose reminds me of Hermione, being so ambitious. I could see Hermione reacting the same way.

All in all, very lovely. I shall read on! =)

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What an excellent chapter, Susan! ^_^ I truly enjoyed it, it was wonderful! Lily was appropriately dramatic, as I had imagined her to be, and yet not quite so ridiculous as she sounded in the letter. She's had everything her entire life - what has she to strive for? God, may she and Scorpius rot in the cesspool of their shared money and fame. Ech. Scorpius absolutely does not deserve Rose. :P

There were a few spelling and grammar inconsistencies, but that's nothing major. In short, I absolutely loved this chapter - and this story! And you wrapped it up fantastically. :) Why are you so brilliant?

XOXO, Kalina

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Violet, you are a HPFF treasure. You evoke such a gamut of emotions in a single chapter, and yet made this scene so real. No OOC duels to the death, hair pulling or screeching, and because of that, it is just indescribably powerful.

This isnt fluff, it is deep, and it is nuanced and this is the type of bittersweet romance I adore!

Oh and the ABBA title invariably cracks me up (whether it is supposed to or not)

The only demand I can make is more. Actually I lie. I want Teddy. When are we getting him?

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it was a bit confusing at times, but really funny! I loved how rose felt so weird with the whole dramione thing.

wow, lily really is rather stupid and spoiled. i wasn't expecting her to be this bad, i just thouhgt that rose was exaggerating.

but i'm really looking forward to more!

10/10 impeccable, violet

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Hey Susan :D,

Okay, first of all - your writing is stunning. You're truly gifted in writing in a way that keeps everyone reading even if they're not particularly interested in the ship/characters; everything flows perfectly and your characterizations of JKs people are deliciously unique. I wish I had an ounce of your talent.

This is going to seem very random but I don't like Rose. XD And please don't be insulted by that, it's nothing to do with your writing or your story, I just think I'm reading into her character the wrong way - at the moment she seems really selfish to me. She seems to be assuming that Lily is so beyond stupid that she can't be trusted to marry whoever she wants. And the fact that Rose is plotting (even if it's just in her head) to put a stop to the wedding is just mean :P .

Don't freak out. I do this all the time. I just randomly start to dislike a character with NO good reason. I did it to Hermione in the GOF movie. It's taken me ages to talk myself out of despising her.

But yeah, you're like... awesome. I love how you manage to mix the perfect amount of Rose's thoughts with descriptions of her surroundings and what she's doing; it really is like we're experiencing what she's experiencing. I WANT TO BE YOU WHEN I GROW UP. How can one person have such amazing writing talent and such amazing graphical/artistic talent?! It's unfair!

Peace out.
x

Author's Response: Thank you, Jenny! This was hugely unexpected and very much made my day when I received it. :D Reading it over again, I'm made speechless by the compliments, wow! But you definitely have talent, so no complaining. :P

Haha, yes, I can understand why you don't like Rose. She's a bit of a hypocrite, bears grudges very well, and can be quite selfish - maybe that's why I like writing her because she's very human and flawed. You're not reading her wrong, only showing how much of a nice person you are. ;) I actually like that you don't like her so much and it's something I might play with in future chapters. :P

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Very well done Susan! Ah, I love this story so far. Definitely going into the favorites. I loved how this is written. Poor Rose. I definitely feel like Scorpius is scheming something. Being mischievous! Their meeting at Madam Malkin's was all to... peaceful. I look forward to the next chapter. Keep up the wonderful work!

Author's Response: Thank you very much, Mandy! I'm so glad that you like this story so far - it's one I really enjoy writing because the characters are so interesting and the storyline just a lot of fun to play with. :D

Haha, too peaceful! That's exactly what it was meant to be, putting readers (and Rose) on edge, not trusting Scorpius and his motives. ;)

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AMAZING STORY!!! I Love reading fanfiction and have come across some good authors, but you are BRILLIANT! Keep up the great work and please please please add another chapter soon! I can't wait for it. Great job, there haven't been a lot of great fanfics in a very long time, and yours is one of them. -FM

Author's Response: Wow, thank you! :O I'm gobstoppered by this review, it's just wow! It's amazing that you like this story so much and thank you for letting me know! ^_^

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Write more!!!
:)
I'm excited
yay yay yay yay

Author's Response: Thank you very much! I'm definitely going to continue this story - we still have to meet with Harry and Lily! :D

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UGH
SCORPIUS
IS
URKYFUL
Why is he acting like his father???

Author's Response: Haha, Scorpius is a Malfoy, of course he has to act a certain way. :P My Scorpius is turning out to be more malicious than I intended, but he does make a great villian, and it's something one doesn't often see in fanfiction. ;)

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This is sooo sad... :(

BUT I'M EXCITED FOR THE REST HEHE

Author's Response: It is sad in a way. I'd never thought much about how sad this first chapter was. XD Anyway, it's great that you're excited for the rest - I hope that you enjoy it!

Thanks very much for reading and reviewing! ^_^

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this story is really good, even this last chapter which seems to turn rose/scorpius into a repetition of dramione, which i generally just find tiring. but that said, i thought it worked well within the story, which is very good, i dont know if i mentioned that... anyway, please do update soon, im dying to know what happens next, and particularly whats on scorpius' mind

Author's Response: Haha, it's because I dislike Rose/Scorpius even more than Draco/Hermione - it is very much a repetition, with the two warring families and the prejudice between them. But I'll watch out for that too, as I want to stay away from making the Rose/Scorpius relationship mirror Draco/Hermione.

It's great that you liked this story and want to know what happens next. :D Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review it!

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aww i very much enjoyed the dramione flashback-ish. that was really good and despite what happened with rose and scorp, i think that what will happen with the both of them won't be the same with draco and mione. well i'm not sure actually, haha. hmm, wonder if theres some deep dark secret that scorpius is harboring to make him so cold...maybe its just his thing..who knows. :)

more please. :)

Author's Response: It won't end up being the same, like you said. Scorpius and Rose are different from their parents, especially in how they deal with their relationship. Hopefully Rose will be able to get over it, while her mother, and probably Draco too, never really have.

I still don't know what to make of Scorpius. Maybe he's just a cold fish. XD It's something I'm still trying to work out - Rose was an easy character to get into, but I'm having more trouble with him.

Anyway, thank you very much for reading and reviewing! I'm glad you've enjoyed it so far. ^_^

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I liked all the parental interaction here, and getting a better sense of Rose's relationship with each of her parents.

The father-daughter relationship is very well done, and it seems to me that, all things considered, it's a much more comfortable relationship than the one between Rose and Hermione. And it was an interesting point, about Ron and Rose each protecting each other. They already have similar personalities, so it's a nice twist, the fact that perhaps they each underestimate each other (or whatever else would cause each of them to want to protect the other).

I had to laugh at the part where Ron figures out right away that Rose had run into Scorpius ("Her father wasn't among the top Aurors for nothing.") I could really identify with Rose there, because my dad is a police officer (and was a detective within the department for over a decade) -- and let me tell you, I can't hide anything from that man. Good lord, is it frustrating.

I've probably mentioned this before, but I really enjoy your subtle use of humor. It's nice because, even though things are getting really difficult for Rose, there are moments of levity. It also makes me think that maybe she's keeping things more in perspective than she realizes herself. I really liked these lines:

"It was a rather obvious observation, but according to her mother, that was only to be expected from someone with the emotional range of a teaspoon."

"It was then that Rose realised she was definitely and most assuredly insane.
Scorpius Malfoy wasn't worth being locked up in St. Mungo's with Gilderoy Lockhart."

The Draco/Hermione relationship put a nice spin on things, and it really did fit in with the rest of the story, so I think it was a good decision. (I like how you tied in this story with another of yours -- I do that, too). I mean, I'm hugely averse to Dramione in theory, although I have to say I'm interested to read yours now. I'm sure if anyone could make Dramione remotely plausible, you're one of the writers who can do it! (Must... resist... Hate... Dramione! Argh!) XD

And I'm really glad that that little story helped to bring Rose and Hermione together. I loved these last lines:

"After a moment, a moment of eternity and beyond, Hermione smiled back, and Rose realised that, in her mother, she would have the most loyal and courageous of allies."

"But together, they could face any Malfoy and send him to Hades."

It was moving, but not sappy, and it was sort of hopeful and empowering. I sort of felt like Rose now understands that her mother won't judge her very harshly for some of her choices, because Hermione's made some of her own choices that open her up to Rose's judgment. (I wish I had a better way to phrase that.)

Anyway, great chapter! :-)

Author's Response: Wow, thank you for this! It's so long and detailed, just the sort I love to receive (but am usually less quick at answering as it's daunting to come up with a suitable reply). You've gotten into a lot of interesting aspects of the story, so I'll try to address them as best as I can. :)

Yes, the Ron-Rose relationship is supposed to be more comfortable, more natural. Rose feels akin to her father and recognizes the similarities they share. With Hermione, I think it's because Rose has always been expect to be as smart as her mother - in failing to be so, Rose grew further away from Hermione. Rose is in awe of her, too, which can't help. What you said about their two relationships is exactly what I was trying to convey. :D

Haha, that's perfect how the Ron as Auror thing worked out! It does make sense that, if he was a top-ranking Auror, he would sniff out most any trouble. I'm so glad that it made their relationship easier to relate to, especially from Rose's side of things.

Giving Rose the one-liners is hard to avoid. XD It's probably the legacy of "Delicate", which I read before writing this story. It seems right for Rose to be sarcastic, especially in regard to herself. I don't know exactly why, though. :P

Maybe it helps writing Dramione when you hate it, haha. I'm pleased that it fit well into this story. It was a last minute decision, and those are worrying things for a story (especially for this story, which I have high hopes for). I didn't think Rose should judge her mother harshly for it - as much as she favours her dad, the Malfoy problem is still a barrier between her and Ron. Now, she has someone who can understand that side of Rose's life. :)

Thank you for this wonderful review. I really appreciate it and have enjoyed reading it the number of times I have. :D It's made me even more relieved about how this chapter turned out. ^_^

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I don't mind! I wanted to read that story anyway! And wow, it really is a big secret, a huge infidelity because it's with Draco, of all people. Ron would die! But I loved how Rose didn't judge her but offered an understanding. I think it's because they were both dealing with a Malfoy. I also liked the comparisions between Draco, Scorpius and Lucius. Brilliant and true.

The relationship Ropse has with her parents is lovely. I loved conversations. The wise one with Hermione and then Ron just trying to cheer his daughter up and being so overprotective. And then.the meeting with Scorpius, full of electricity I tell you! I could just feel the vibes and the whirlwind of emotions Rose was feeling. I could really feel the attraction between those two, but also the anger and bitterness. it was just perfectly written and I loved it. :)

Author's Response: And now you have a good excuse. It happened by accident, really - I didn't mean to advertise. It just seemed convenient to tie my stories together (laziness is a prime factor there, I'm sure :P). But yes, it's a huge secret, one that Ron must not find out (because that would actually ruin my comic wedding scene). But it does help bring together Rose and her mother, as their relationship was bothering me. It seemed a bit too distant, at least on Rose's side. She does look up to her mother, but sort of fears her at the same time, rather like she will with Harry in the next chapter. ;)

I'm really glad that you like Rose's relationship with her parents. It's awkward juggling with making Ron and Hermione canon while also making them realistic parents, so knowing that it's turning out is quite a relief. :D The same with Rose and Scorpius. I do want them to be attracted to one another, but at the same time, it needs to be somewhat obvious that they're not meant for one another, especially Scorpius, who is emerging as a very creepy character. Still not sure what to do with him. :/

Anyway, thank you very much for reading and reviewing, Liz! It's so wonderful to hear from you on this story. ^_^

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Another awesome chapter! I really like how you've drawn up the relationship between Rose and each of her immediate family; mum, dad, and brother. And I like the comparisms and contrasts between her and her parents. Great job, and I'm looking forward to the next chapter. 10/10

Author's Response: It's great that you like how the relationships are panning out so far. I'm trying to keep them realistic, yet also part of the drama that Rose has to deal with along the way. :)

Thanks again for reading and reviewing! ^_^

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Ooh, what a way to leave this chapter off with the two finally meeting up again after two years of being apart. I really did enjoy this chapter, and I thought you wrote the father-daughter relationship between Ron and Rose quite well and it seemed very natural. Great job; 10/10

Author's Response: It's a very nasty cliffhanger, but I both needed something to end the chapter appropriately and pick up the pace a bit after the long conversation with Ron. ;) I'm glad that you liked the relationship Rose and Ron have - it's interesting to write them together, how similar they are and so very awkward.

Thank you very much again for the review! It's fantastic to hear from you! :D

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i really like this story, can't wait to read more (:

Author's Response: Thank you for the reviews! It's great that you've liked this story! ^_^

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really great story, very different from the rest in my opinion :)

Author's Response: Thank you! :D That's amazing to hear! ^_^

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hm it just doesn't seem like he's worth it to be honest! interesting chapter though!

Author's Response: No, he's probably not. :P But that's still something Rose has to decide for herself.

Thank you again for reading and reviewing! :D

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