10/10

Astounding piece. I loved every bit of it, from beginning until the end. It grabbed me from the start. You have a way with words that not many do.

I especially commend you for bringing tears to my eyes. You have managed to portray his feelings in words so perfectly that I couldn't hold back. I was thrilled to see how you justified his aversion towards Muggle born children. I empathized with him. An event like that could destroy anyone.

Magnificent! I am going to add it to my favourites. Congratulations!

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Completly and utterly brilliant!
Loved every moment!
When can I expect the next update ^_^
marauderqueen
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That was very sad and moving. I was prepared for something tragic, but it moved me nonetheless. How terrifying for anyone, but especially for a child, to be driven away by a mob! And how traumatic to nearly witness his mother's murder! No wonder Salazar wasn't too keen on Muggles later in life. Overall, I think this was well-written, and you did a good job of delving into Salazar's character.

I am not a huge fan of flashbacks like that. If they take up nearly the entire chapter, they should usually stand on their own, in my opinion. Actually, huge chunks of italicized text bother me more, because it's more difficult to read than normal type. There are other ways to set scenes off without having to italicize them. Although I think you could have written this without having any of the "present time" bits included, I do admit they - especially the first one, the opening of the story - make the story a bit stronger. I really do like that blunt question of Rowena's at the beginning. I do wish the flashback had been set off differently, though.

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Blimey that was good.

What I particularly liked about this story was that you've chosen the mother/son dynamic to describe Salazar's enmity towards muggles, instead of a romantic dynamic, which I've encountered more frequently. I think that made sense...maybe :P

Anyway it was wonderfully written, and Salazar's story was so sad! I think maybe the only criticism I have is that I think the flashback story would have stood very nicely on its own without the parts with Rowena and Salazar framing it. But that's really my personal opinion :)

Overall, awesome story! :D xxx

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