This is a nice story, showing the gentel side of James, and what a great guy he could be.Author's Response: Exactly. Thanks very much! Report Review
OMG! SO ADORABLE! amazing job as usual! Keep up the good work. *Claps and a cokie*- CharlyAuthor's Response: Oh, thanks a very lot! :D Report Review
ok i now totally want to have a massive food fight lol. one day i will make sure i have one :)Author's Response: I've never actually been in a food fight, but I want to! :P Report Review
generally i love anything written by you. but this for some reason lacked emotion. the whole death bit i felt was not really portrayed properly..maybe a little more depth and understanding to that would be better. but do keep writing i love your writing style. read loadzz of your storiesAuthor's Response: Completely understandable. Seeing this was the first story ever I wrote in first person I was very nervous - and new - to this. I didn't want to change it when posting it, and was somehow happy with it. I think I was afraid of really getting into Lily's head. Thanks for the honest review! Report Review
That was cute!
It was a nice, comforting read, to put it quite simply.
There is not much else I can say, other then I really enjoyed it :]
Lovely job!Author's Response: Comforting read :P That's a nice phrase, and I think it fits . haha Thanks for the review! Report Review
I love the transition. Not an immediate one, but so subtle, you're taken by surprise when she's laughing. Then you realize it's been happening all along. Brilliant. Amazing, as always.
Bravo.Author's Response: YES! Haha, it was exactly what I was going for. That she would laugh, without it came unnatural. Thanks for the review! Report Review
I simply LOVE your one-shot! They are always so original and beautiful. This one is sort of sad but James is so sweet :) And Food fight! Ha, I like food fight with my brothers! :DD And absolutely fantastic quote was: “Bad move, Prongs,” he said, “bad move.” Go, Remus, go! ;)
KrisAuthor's Response: Thank you very much! I especially love the word original :P Thanks for the review! Report Review
i really liked that. james was sweet and it was well written. the ending was good too. well done!
Dilys :)Author's Response: Thanks so much, and I'm very glad you liked the ending; I was a tad nervous about it. Report Review
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