I like it, a little short, but good. Write more soon.Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it; I'll try to update soon. Thanks for reviewing! Report Review
Ooh cliff hanger! I like!
This looks like a really promising start to a story. I think your dialogue is amazing...I'm always jealous of people who can create believable dialogue and yours is great. The insults thrown between Rowena and Sirval were really imaginative, and the opening lines of the chapter drew me in completely.
So Rowena's a Slytherin by marriage? Or rather by her mother's marriage. That's something I've not seen before, and it's a really intriguing idea. Is Salazar her step brother or something?? Well, I guess I'll have to wait and see...
The only criticism I have of the chapter is that I think it could have done with a bit more description. The dialogue is amazing and certainly let me get to know all the characters, but a bit more description would have fleshed out the story and added even more to characterisation and setting.
But overall I think this is a really good start to your story. I pretty much only read Founders era, so will check this out again when you update! ^_^Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm really glad you enjoyed it.
I did try to get in as much detail as possible, but this site has rather stringent rules, so I had to edit this chapter a lot. The original is on my ff net account, in case you care.
Thanks so much for taking the time - I'm really glad you reviewed! Report Review
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