I really like this..
It's so sweet..Author's Response: Thanks! ^_^ Even the evil people need to have a heart sometimes, don't they? :P Report Review
Wow, I do like the way you got into Salazar Slytherin's mind. His voice throughout was very lofty and superior, as well as a bit scary and crazy. There were a few places where it didn't seem like thoughts anymore, such as when Salazar thought he lacked merciless cruelty. It seemed a very odd thought and not just because of my personal reaction to the content. There were just one or two thoughts, such as this one, that seemed out of "flow" with the rest of the story.
Anyhow, the overall effect WAS pleasing. You portrayed Slytherin as a very dark character, and you didn't pull back from the way you'd decided to write him. By the end, I was thinking, wow, there's one dude I wouldn't want to cross! I really liked the way you described the making of the locket: how he designed it and how he felt when he put it on. I wasn't expecting that part at the end when Salazar is thinking about the other Founders and puts a picture in the locket. However, I liked it. That scene added depth to Salazar's character and shows him to be a complex human being, not simply an evil villain.Author's Response: Thank you so, so much! :D I really enjoyed writing from Salazar's point of view (I seem to like writing about any Slytherin) ^_^ and I was worried about how he would turn out. I'll go back and take a look at it, and try to fix the bits that doin't run as smoothly. :) I'm really happy that he turned out not completely evil, as everyone has shades of grey, do they not? ^_^ Thank you so much for the review and letting me hear your thoughts! I really appreciate it. :D Report Review
Wow...that was really creative and well written. I like how you put the traits of the other Founders into Slytherin. I have a story I'm writing at the moment about the Founders and Slytherin is my favourite character to write. He just has so many layers, don't you think?Author's Response: Thank you! Yes, Slytherin is alot of fun to write. You can make him mean, or mean with a nice side, or a very confused person all around, or... yeah. :D I love layered characters! And basically all Slytherins are pretty layered in the books! :D Good luck on your story! Report Review
Not what I expected but it made it all the more great. I really enjoy your style of writing.Author's Response: Thank you so much! XD Report Review
I thought this was really good! I liked how you brought in the influences of Helga, Rowena and Godric throughout the story...it added a rhythm and structure that was really great to read.
Great job! :DAuthor's Response: Thank you! The whold influence thing was what sparked the idea for the story. I'm glad it worked ^_^ Thank you for reading! :D Report Review
I was just scrolling through the recently added stories and then your banner attracted me to read this. But i wasn't expecting such a good story!
I think that the greatness salazar sought from himself, at least in your story, was quite misunderstood, and also rather misdirected. His attempts to place himself above others blinded him almost to the people he was trying to exceed; the people who were really improving him after all.
Salazar represents the character of those in slytherin house. And i think that you portrayed him in a just light in that respect. His goal to be the best was ambitious to the exclusion of everything else. To everyone else.
Anyway.Author's Response: Yes the banner worked! :P Thank you so much for reading this. :D Report Review
Oh wow, that was just brilliant. Beautifully written, and your characterisation of Salazar was amazing, as well. 10/10.Author's Response: Thank you so much! Report Review
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