Very Intresting. :) I love that you have Lily with Snape. Report Review
I figured, since you have no reviews yet, that I should do my best to give you a short one. It is a good story, with an interesting plot, but I have to admit that I do have some problem with your writing.
You should maybe consider to do more to the plot than to only write dialogue, which you do wonderfully. There is nothing written about the environment, about sound, visuals, people around her. Everything is dialogue, and I think that it will get boring after a few chapters.
That aside, I think you can do much with this, and I can't wait to see what you do with the story. Good luck. :)Author's Response: Thank you for your review! I will take your advice in the next chapter!
~Goddess Faith Report Review
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