I love this chapter, but i found it irritating how hermione thought that "Lavander" was so annoying, but saved her life (so, clearly, she's over it) and im sure the war changed her mind about everyone.
That doesn't sound like Hermione at all..Author's Response: keyword: WAS.
lavender was annoying when Hermione was at Hogwarts before the war.
yes, lavender can still be a little annoying, but not as much so as before. do you understand what I'm saying? Report Review
woohoo i think i will really like this oneAuthor's Response: aww, thank you!
I hope you do! Report Review
I enjoyed it. Great work! Nothing i noticed that would confuse a reader so Congrats you get a 10 in my eyes. Can't wait to read more.Author's Response: wow, thank you so much! that really means a lot to me! Report Review
Good starting chapter. I love how it's the Hufflepuff and not the Slytherin girls who giggle. (I'd giggle either way, but still.)Author's Response: hahaha, yeah i thought i'd twist it up!
i'm glad you like it! Report Review
I really liked this chapter although there was one spelling error (protect, you probably skipped the 'o' on accident) and a few capitalization errors, but nothing major. I usually don't read Draco/Hermione fanfics, but I got sucked in by your fanfic so I guess you should be flattered. :) Haha, looking forward to reading the rest of the chapters.
-AnnaAuthor's Response: yeah, i'm probably going to go back and fix it.
i'm really busy right now, but i'll do it as soon as i can!
and i am flattered thank you so much Report Review
wow, great chapter! i'll admit, im a sucker for dramione's, and im so glad i found this one!
very orignal, and i lvoe how you write hermione!
i really cant wait to read more of your work, you an amzingly talented writer!
have you considered writing books? i'd read them!
i review every chapter but my reviewsa re short becuase i like to read on fast, so sorry in advance!
must read on, chapter 2!
your newest fan becky!
you rock! :)Author's Response: oh my gosh!
thank you so so much that's the sweetest thing anyone's ever said to me!
and yes I have considered writing a book. I'm planning on starting to write on this summer :)
you are the sweetest person ever thank you so much again! Report Review
the story lines good but your tenses are muddledAuthor's Response: yeah i know i need to work on that Report Review
I can see where you're going with this, and I think it has a lot of potential. :) But you switched from past to present tense a lot, often times in the same sentence, and it was driving me insane haha. Just a thought. :) You might wanna fix it. Or maybe get a beta? They're pretty awesome.
Other than that, it seemed pretty good!Author's Response: i still did that?
you see i wrote this about a year ago and i didn't wrote very well then, but i edited it, but I guess i just missed some things.
I'll see if I can fix it. Report Review
great start =) im definitely going to keep readingAuthor's Response: thanks! im really glad you liked it
i wrotye it almost a year ago, so i wasnt sure if it was that great :/ Report Review
Wonderful. I only found on typo so i think you did really good. I don't think there was any spelling errors, however i get spell for my life. :] Smashing chapter and i love how the boys acted/ Harry was so cocky thinking he got straight of the bat, NOT. Oh wonderful and quite funny. I was drinking hot chocolate while reading and i bet you would have laughed at me. When i read about there mouth dropping i thought it was so funny cause i pictured the boys like that. I started laughing and almost spilled my WHOLE cup on me!
Any ways well written, and great. I dont know why you said you were not good at these kinda openers?? I thought it was quite splended. :] I bet if my friend Megan was here she would loved it. She is a die hard Harry Potter fan but she like i love the idea of Dramione.Isn't that such a cute couple name?? Well i am going to leave and sorry for such a long review but i loved it. Author's Response: wow thanks so muchh! that really is so sweet!
im soo soo glad you like it!
sorry for the short response :/
but this review means a lot to me, thank you so much Report Review
you have a lot of run-on sentences and a little more detail would be nice, but it's a nice idea.Author's Response: oh well this is my first chapter that i wrote a REALLY long time ago so its not that great.
but thanks anyways, im glad you thought it was nice :)! Report Review
Your story has alot of potentail. It's very well written with an intresting storyline, but their was some things that bothered me. ex.
"Attention students!" yelled Professor McGonagall, trying to get all the stundents to quiet down, and pay attention to her. (When Proffessor McGonagall says attention students you don't need to re-explain it to your readers by saying and pay attention to her.)
But despite that It was good.Author's Response: oh right that does sound weird :/
i didn't really re-read it like i should have.
thanks for the tip! Report Review
the chapter was good, the idea was good. it would be better if you could fix the typos because it sometimes makes it hard to read. and just a slight thing i noticed was that you sometimes use past and present tense, which can be a little confusing. and you sometimes go from third person to first person. but those things aren't really really important, it would just make the story better than it already is.
8/10Author's Response: oh the third person to first person was a total mistake I didn't realize it. I mean, It's supposed to be their thoughts and I was supposed to italisize it, but I guess i didn't. I'll try to fix it now.
but, thanks for the review. Report Review
Exciting, nice build up n__nAuthor's Response: thanks! i'm really glad you like it! Report Review
Good start to what will be an excellent story. I love it :)Author's Response: thanks! :) that really means a lot to me Report Review
I really like the story line, but there's just one little thing that bothered me about this whole thing. Which was after... "Hermione's eyes wondered as Ron and Harry were going on and on about how much food they could shove into their mouths at a time." not that i'm nit picking, but right after that, you began using the word eyes far too much, kinda distracted me a little bit, but overall good job :)
Your friendly(sort of) critic
ZeksKiAuthor's Response: oh alright i get it. i mean i wrote that a while ago. thanks for the review Report Review
AAAw malfoy hasnt said anything mean yet lol but i bet he will. this is pretty good just try and mak eit longer please! hurry and update chapter 4!Author's Response: yes they will get longer. i wrote chapter four and it's now validating(: Report Review
cool start=)) i loved it heaps=)))Author's Response: thank you so much
:-) it really means a lot! Report Review
Why is Hermione being so mean to Ron and Harry, they're best friends.Author's Response: she's just growing up and going through a lot of changes, trust me, she doesn't really mean it. They don't really take it too seriously cause they know she's going through a lot of changes and has hormones, like every other teenager. :-) Report Review
OMG! I love hermonie/draco stories!!!
I can't wait to see where you take this story,so far I love it! so keep writting...
You also did a great job with the characters as well...I think you capture them just right =]...
This is a great start!...[I didn't see any typos]
I can't wait to read more so update soon!!!
~MAuthor's Response: thank you sooo much[:
your my first reviewer EVER[:
thank you thank you
i write this story in one of my notebooks and i already finished writting chapter two. i'll post it soon[: thank you again.
and i WILL update soon[: Report Review
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