Aww, poor Sirius. I know, James and Lily had to die, but it's so sad. And that's why I can't like Peter Pettigrew. Btw, I think Wormtail fits him quite well...but it's a horrible name. It makes me think of a scabby rat's tail. How's that for a picture? Ugh.
Question: What did Peter Pettigrew pick up off the ground? Just being curious here... :)
Oh, and to answer your question on the Jealousy reviews thing, no I don't have user on the forums...yet. I wanna. I think I'd like to have you read it and hear what you think...only what if you don't like it? :) Idk, maybe I make them be different than they are... I'm not actually quite done with it, but I guess...
Ok, I think I got off the subject of reviewing this story. Anyway, I think it's a good story, I like the way Sirius is feeling (well, I hate it, but you know what I mean I think?) and I like/hate Pettigrew's DISGUSTINGNESS. He is rather smart, even if I don't like him.
So, great story. :)Author's Response: Haha, no one likes Peter, right? I read somewhere that Peter came to the house and picked up Voldemort's wand - that's how he got it years later in GoF. That's what he picked up.
Um, okay. If you want me to read the Jealousy-thing, please make a user on the forums, it'd be easier to talk there. I think it's exciting and I'd like to help you out if you want to?
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Intense. How I always imagined Sirius would feel. Phenonomal.Author's Response: Thank you! :D Report Review
Hey there. That was a realy cool way to show what happened the night Peter "died". I've never read anything explaining it, and it was very good. Honestly, I don't think Sirius would've been quite so murderous, it was really his years in Azkaban that made him so dark, but for the purpose of the story it was fine. A little more length, description of feelings also might've enhanced the story. Overall though, good work. As for Sirius, he was written fine, besides what I mentioned.
~lllbAuthor's Response: Thanks a lot. Yeah, I guess you're right about Sirius, and all I really had to go from was that he tracked Peter down, and did intend to kill him (we heard that in PoA) and that's basically all I wrote it off from. Ahh, lenght... Yes, I wanted to do that, but I wasn't comfortable with getting to close to Sirius. One, I'd mess it up. Two, I think when he realised James was dead, he went into a somewhat numb/crazy stage - he laughed when he was caught. Therefor the slightly little feelings in it.
Thanks for your honesty. It's something I can work with! Report Review
Brilliant one shot
I really like your writing style
good job =]Author's Response: Thank you very much! Glad you like it! Report Review
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