i thought it was really a great story.Author's Response: thank you for reading!! =) Report Review
Hi, ChellDaBelle1030 from the forums here!
I liked this. The only thing I didn't like was your kept referring to Victoire as Victorie. Other than that, it was well written. The description of the two's relationship was nicely portrayed and drawn out so the reader got a good perception of the bond these two share.
The kiss at the end had just enough romance and fluff to be satisfying. This was rather good.Author's Response: Hi there! Thanks for reading the story and reviewing. I'm glad you enjoyed it! I agree with you on Victorie, she seemed a little clouded. But I took a different direction with this story and had it from Teddy's point of view. I think it's my first Teddy fic and I'm glad it's good! Thank you! =) Report Review
Beautifully written story! I have almost no concerns or critiques about this story. It is wonderfully written, the character development is thorough, and your story flows without a hitch! The only thing is your summary, as it is a little misleading, and leads the prospective reader to think that there is more conflict than there actually is. Other than that however, there is absolutely nothing wrong with this story in my opinion! I really like the backstory, and the look we get into Teddy's thoughts and emotions. And, although there is not a whole lot of action going on in this story, it still works very well and keeps the reader interested until the end. I really like the emotion within this story, and you did an excellent job conveying it to the reader.
Altogether, fantastic job! Keep up the great work, and keep on writing! :)
snowfallingonroses xxAuthor's Response: Wow, thanks for the wonderful review! I'm glad you liked it :) Report Review
Hey! Here's the review you requested! :)
So, first off, I just want to say wow! Great job writing! I honestly have never been into the Teddy/Victoire pair as much as some people (and I blatantly refuse to read Teddy/Victoire/Dominique...blech) but I genuinely liked this story, and the way you put the pairing together. I can see them now as a modern day Remus and Tonks! :)
The only thing I have to say about grammar and all that junk is that I'm thinking 'Victorie' is spelled 'Victoire'. But other than that, I didn't really find any other spelling errors. So great job! :D I liked how you sort of tried to find your character's emotions, and in every story, keep doing that! You have a lot of space on here, so don't hesitate to use it to really explore your story. I think this would be a great story to continue if you decide to do so, and getting into your character's heads more can help you do that. :)
Awesome job writing! You've convinced me to check out more Teddy/Victoire pairing stories now! LOL.
Miss_Ravenclaw09Author's Response: Thanks for your review! It made me happy. =) I really liked this story too. I'm glad you got into Teddy/Victoire stories now! I knew I always spelled her name wrong...lol.
Thanks for reading & reviewing! Report Review
very cute, i liked it. was there a little twilight reference in there? seemed like it...Author's Response: haha...yea, the note writing. ah well, it worked did it? =] Report Review
aww they are so cute. keep up the good work please.^_^
Harry and GinnyAuthor's Response: thanks for reading && reviewing!! Report Review
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