Aww, this is a really great start! I don't know where the story's going, of course, or if this comes into play later, but my only suggestion is maybe to explain things a little more. Like why does James want to help her when he's got his own life? Why would he care? And do he and Ellie like each other as friends or not? It seems like they don't, but then why would they want to help each other? I don't know, I just think the story would be more relatable if the reader could understand that. But maybe you plan to explain things later? Anyways, just my advice! But great start! I think they are so cute together! Can't wait to see where the story goes, I'm definetly going to be following it! Report Review
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