Hi Gemma Doyle
I noticed u didn't have any reviews for this one-shorite of urs, so i decided to write one 4 u 'cause as a writer myself i know they make feel good.
Anyways, talking about ur story, i wud say dat it was nice, nice to read it..d plot was good, vocabulary and words were precise but, i guess d beginning wasn't very appealing. when i read d first few lines, dey weren't dat attracting to make me read it further but, i still continued and as d story progressed- it turned out good! Ending was so-sad..i wish Remus was with her but, then the ending u gave it in which she still remained strong-headed to face the world, gave ur story a very-nice finish. Overall, well done! i liked it.
-AashnaAuthor's Response: Aw, thanks for thinking of me! Reviews make me feel good as well.
Ah. Were they just not grabbing enough, wanting to make you read further? Sorry about that. When I find the time (which will probably be never), I'll be sure to go back and edit again.
Aw, I'm glad it turned out good! Remus couldn't be with Louise because they both had changed far too much. Remus had seen the effects of war firsthand, and Louise had been something along the lines of a concentration camp. There was no possible way they could back to the way they were.
Aw, thanks! And thanks so much for the read and review! The time you took to read my story is much appreciated! Report Review
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