That was a great opening-- you really nailed their characters right off the bat. I have to say that I loved the line "Girls? He better not be talking about Ginny." It was a perfect older-brother reaction. You did a great job with the boys' teasing and Ron and Hermione's conversation after-- the way they skated around the topic was cleverly handled. You've really captured Ron's side of things beautifully. It's unusual to find stories that are pure canon, but I admit that I really enjoy hearing from other characters during the exact same happenings that we see over Harry's shoulder. 10/10! siriusgirl1 Report Review
Very well written - realistic and true to character. Nice job!Author's Response: Thank you. Report Review
This is quite good! Nicely detailed and in-character! Please update again soon!Author's Response: Thank you, but this is where I decided to end the story. Report Review
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