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Review #1, by Lil lily71 Chapter One: Recognition

22nd September 2009:
that was wow, how do you leave me so amazed Carla??
You write so beautifully.
I am not usually a Neville/Ginny fan but this is so sweet.
I feel sorry for poor Harry though, to be young and in love.
10/10

Lore

Author's Response: Thank you, Lore. You are the best. I love Neville/Ginny. I enjoy reading them and so now I decided to write them. You are gorgeous. --Carla

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Review #2, by snowfallingonroses Prologue: Neville and Ginny, Close-Up

4th May 2009:
This was a good prologue to a story. I especially loved the beginning of this chapter. It was well-written, and it drew the reader in. The backstory in this chapter was somewhat interesting as well, although, technically speaking, it is more effective to do more "show" in the beginning of a story rather than tell. Stories and chapters are more interesting to read when there is action and interaction between the characters. I think that if there was more of that, it would greatly improve this chapter. However, it was very well-written; there were virtually no grammatical or spelling errors. It was interesting getting the contrast between Ginny and Neville and it will be very interesting to see where this goes. (She doesn't divorce Harry.right?) But, good job! Keep on writing, and keep in mind that it's more effective to show rather than tell! :)

snowfallingonroses xx

Author's Response: Super my weakness is showing rather than telling! But I do appreciate the help and I definite agree with you.
Thank you so much for the review. I am endeavoring to edit this before finishing it entirely. You are gorgeous. --Carla


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Review #3, by Stella Nightingale Prologue: Neville and Ginny, Close-Up

30th April 2009:
Neville/Ginny, very interesting! Really looking forward to seeing where this goes I think your prologue opened up the story nicely and catches your attention.

I really love Neville as a character and I think so far you've captured him quite well, and even though Ginny isn't my favorites I think you've got her down as a character quite well. It does seem perfectly picturesque with Ginny and her life in the epilogue maybe she was craving something more? Was the perfect life perfect? Hmm, well def think you should continue! great job!


Laur (from ze forums!)

Author's Response: Thank you for the review! I honestly love Neville/Ginny and thought that I might as well write them.
I definitely know that I want to finish this though it's been ages since I wrote it. I definitely know I need to edit it more, though. Thanks.
---Carla


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Review #4, by Elysium Prologue: Neville and Ginny, Close-Up

29th April 2009:
SQUISH! :D

This is a wonderful prologue for a very believable pairing. You kept them both intrinsic to their natures that we see in canon, whilst at the same time showing the maturity that comes with age. I thought your repeated structure of the opening paragraphics in both their perspectives was a great way to really pull us in. And the writing itself is excellent :D

Gorgeous work hun xox

Author's Response: OMG, Kylie. I love you.:D Had free time, didya? ;p Lol. Anyway, I'm glad you think that the characterization is believable. I was a bit iffy on it and had a hard time editing and editing things out.;)

I'm glad you think the style of the openings were good. I had many sleepless nights over them. No kidding.:P

ILY, darling. Will post this in TDM soon..:)

~~C


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Review #5, by RonsGirlFriday Prologue: Neville and Ginny, Close-Up

27th April 2009:
I absolutely adore this so far! The "success is relative" and "happiness is variable" themes are so true, and I think you've done a good job of describing how someone can have everything and still not feel complete. The thing that really made this chapter great, though, is how you paralleled those two themes, even down to the way you wrote the opening paragraphs of both sections in a similar manner.

I think Neville/Ginny can sometimes be difficult to do effectively, especially on Ginny's part, but it looks like you may be on your way to writing a very believable pairing. I'm looking for some constructive criticism to give you, but seriously, I just enjoyed this chapter a lot!

Author's Response: First Reviewer dance!:) I seriously didn't think I'd get any reviews so I thank you.. *dance* *yay*

I'm glad you enjoyed it. I had trepidations as to whether or not I should continue with this fic. It was a hardship to think of how to make it but I will try my best to stay true to the pairing and make it as plausible as possible. ILOVEYOU, dear. Thanks for the review.;)

~~C


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