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Review #1, by Beeezie Hatred Behind The Scenes

9th September 2015:
Hey, Mikaela, I'm here for BvB! :) I hope it's okay that I've come back to this rather than review your most recent one-shot - I didn't see you specify in the thread, and I was really interested to read the second chapter.

I'm continuing to really enjoy this! Hailey's voice is so strong, and while I know that Wood can be a little overbearing and difficult from Harry's perspective, I can see how he'd come off more so to someone else, particularly someone who's more of a peer and who's intentionally pushing his buttons and who's clearly got a very high opinion of herself. (The "most important player" bit at the end was definitely a little overboard.)

And the thing is, while I don't like the way he's intimidating her at all, I do think that he has a point when they're - ah - talking, I guess, in the beginning of the chapter. She's prickling at it, but honestly, yeah - it doesn't matter how good she is at flying if she's a pain to work with and undermines him at every turn, particularly at tryouts. She's clearly resentful of that, but I have a hard time blaming him for it. It's not a good example to set, and I'd be bothered, too.

It was nice to see that after that, the tryouts did go smoothly. He was a little weirdly formal at times and Hailey and Angelina seemed to me to be pretty clearly reciting from a script that he'd given them, but that made sense to me in the context of Wood's personality as we saw it in the books. I did find the way he picked a fight with her afterward to be really interesting, though - it seems like she's not the only one who's argumentative, and I'm starting to see why she's so defensive and responds to him like she does. There absolutely is a sense of "you can't do anything right" that I'm getting from him, and it's really not productive.

Yeah, the dynamics in this are really fascinating. I love the way you've crafted your characters and their relationships with each other.

As I mentioned last review, there are some little things that stuck out to me, though. I know you said that you haven't really had a chance to go back and edit and I know from your recent stuff that you have a good idea of what flows well, so I don't want to spend too much time on this, but -

Again, your dialogue tags definitely impacted the flow of the chapter, and I think that when you do get a chance to edit, you should take at least half and maybe even two-thirds of them out. I also noticed a fair number of typos (including one at the end of the chapter where you seem to switch to second person), and there's too much "as" and "after" and "before" attached to actions. (E.g., George asks me, his look concerned as I shift my stance and take slow steady breathe. - I'm assuming this should be breath, as well.) It's just not necessary.

And moving beyond the basic mechanics, I did feel like there were times when the dialogue stretched out a bit. For example, in the scene with Fred and George toward the beginning of the chapter, the conversation got a little tedious by the time they headed up to the castle. It would have worked much better, IMO, if you'd cut some of it out in favor of something along the lines of Fred and I bickered back and forth for a few more minutes before George finally dragged us off to dinner.

Overall, though, this was thoroughly enjoyable. I loved it.

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Review #2, by Token Charm and Knowing Things

6th September 2015:
It's nice to see the secrets come out in the open, and I am really interested to see where this goes afterward. Update soon!

Author's Response: Hiya!

Thanks for stopping by and leaving a review! I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter. I do have just a couple more chapters pre-written, just have to do an edit through...hopefully I'll have another chapter up in the next week or so!

Thanks again for the review!


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Review #3, by Token Burns, Apologies, and Secrets

8th August 2015:
Okay, let me preface this by saying that I really like this story and I apologize if I'm a little harsh (I seriously don't mean to be). I just don't really understand where the story is going. The banner and the beginning chapters give the impression that this is an Oliver/OC story, and while there's definitely potential for that to happen, Hailey and George have been dating forever. Honestly, for George to be in it as much as he is, he should be on the banner to at least give the reader some clarity.

Honestly, I don't really like her and George together (I don't like cutesy relationships, at least in fiction), but I'm holding on because I'm hoping for more. They got together so early in the story that it doesn't really make sense, and it doesn't really feel like they're compatible (George's over-protectiveness has a lot to do with that, and if I were in her position, the way he has altered plays to protect her and ignore the other team members during games would completely p*ss me off).

I really love Hailey though. She has fantastic character development, and I love to watch her and Wood bicker like crazy. At times it seems like he likes her, which would be why he's so hard on her and why he's particularly irritated by her and George's relationship, but it's been over 30 chapters now and nothing has come of it, so at least it feels like nothing will ever come of it.

I'm just very confused about the pairings in this story, and I was hoping you could shed some light on it.

Author's Response: Heya!

Imma start by saying I'm so happy you like this story. With how long I've left between updates (a long time at times), I'm glad there are people out there reading new chapters as they come. I'm also going to thank you for stopping by to leave a review. I really appreciate it!

I then am going to apologize for A the confusion as to where this story is going and B for this long winded explanation I'm going to try to keep short. (And you don't sound harsh! I get where you're coming from!)

So. This is a Oliver/OC. I PROMISE you that. It's been the intention since I started the story.

The problem? My initial plot was not this extravegant. I honestly didn't really have a plot when I started writing, other than the idea of a short Oliver/OC story. The plot got developed as I learned more of Hailey's character. Just so happens that Hailey's character has a mind of her own so this spin off with George just sort of happened. It was never intended, which is why he's not on the banner, and it's why there are 30+ chapters of Hailey/George. It's just how her character was willing to work with me and the plot (and I kinda liked writing the two of them together, which was not helping the plot of this story, in any case).

The good news? Hailey is starting to catch up to the point I need her at. She's got a bit of experience with dating and is finding herself. Which means things are going to start happening. Things that will stop the nothing ever coming of other things. If that makes sense without me totally hinting at what I'm hinting at... ;)

So. I know I didn't really answer any questions directly, but I think you'll find the story curving more towards what you were expecting. I'm sorry if it was misleading (I am honestly thinking about getting a new banner now that the plot is a lot more defined...) and that there was some confusion. I'll just suggest sticking with me because things are changing (i.e. I'm not currently writing anything including a cutesy relationship for this story). But it's totally up to you.

Sorry for the confusion, but thank you for stopping by and letting me know your thoughts. I appreciate knowing your thoughts and you gave me some idea as to future improvements for this story...


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Review #4, by Beeezie Sarcasm And Annoyances

18th July 2015:
Hey, Mikaela! Here for BvB!

I really enjoyed Hailey's voice in this from the very beginning - the sarcasm and irritation she was feeling came through very clearly, and I really sympathized with her - especially as someone who has a lot of difficulty with punctuality! I admired her restraint - I wouldn't have had it, that's for sure, whatever the consequences.

But it wasn't just that her voice made the story engaging from the start (though it did) - it was that I really felt like I got a sense of who she was as a person from her reaction to what I agree was a completely disproportionate punishment. (Though wouldn't she have been sprinting, not jogging? You can't really sprint for an hour. Regardless, though!) The way she was able to shrug off the pain was particularly admirable, IMO.

And I also feel like you handled the canon characters really well. They weren't major characters, which in some ways makes them easier to mess up - there's the temptation to just write them as OCs. You didn't do that, though - you showed a side to Wood that we do get a hint of in the books but which Harry himself doesn't really experience, and Angelina's distaste for drama fits (or at least, drama that doesn't personally affect her! We saw her channeling Wood in OotP, so I can see her flying off at Fred).

And the relationships between the characters were wonderfully handled, as well - I really believed their friendships, and I felt like you introduced a lot of nuance into the way they interact with each other. I'm really curious to see where you take it!

There were a couple things about this chapter that didn't seem quite as smooth as the one-shots of yours that I've read recently, though. There were more typos and misplaced/missing punctuation - e.g., I'd like you're attention rather than your attention, and there probably should have been a comma after Yes in "Yes Captain?" - little things, but there were enough that they stuck out, particularly in comparison.

I also felt like your phrasing was sometimes awkward too, particularly surrounding dialogue. It seems almost like you were afraid of 1) letting dialogue stand on its own without a dialogue tag and 2) of being repetitive with your dialogue tags, which led to you adding adverbs or other descriptors that weren't always necessary. That's totally understandable, but I do think the narrative would flow smoother if you were a little more willing to do that.

This stuff is all minor, and I think that part of the reason it's reading so different to me is that you first published it so long ago. I thought I'd point it out anyway, though. Otherwise, this is really fun, and I'm curious to see where you take it next!

Author's Response: Heya Branwen!

I put my apologies out again for the lateness of this response. I've been falling behind on everything this summer, review responses topping the list along with the online class I'm neglecting right now. So, sorry I've been slow but I do really appreciate the review!

I'm so very glad you liked Hailey's character. Her character has been the one consistent thing in my head about this story. The plot has changed a million times since I first started writing, but her character has been one thing I'm super protective of, so I'm happy her character comes across well. I also am glad you enjoyed the relationships I put between characters. That sort of came naturally and I'm not sure if it's because I'm so used to Hailey's character or if it was because the relationships are based off of what I saw in high school...

I also am not sure I know what to say about the cannon characters! They're pretty specific in my head to fit in with cannon (Though this is an AU and I alter ages to fit my plot more than once), or what I believe is cannon. The fact that they work well like that, and that my image of them isn't just my own, it seems to fit in cannon is just amazing!

As for the little things...well, I know they exist. This is one of my oldest ideas and first novel to date. This was started back before I found my style of writing and back before I read like an editor and was super picky when it came to errors. So they are things I go through and correct with every edit, but I do need to spend more time getting those things to flow smoother and not be so choppy. And the dialogue tag thing. This story is horrible like that, until the more recently written stuff. It's something I'm still working on and I have to thank you for bringing my attention to it so I know to pay a bit more attention to it.

Thank you, again, for the lovely review! I really appreciate all you had to say about this chapter and I was happy to see you stop by this story! Hopefully see you back for more at some point!


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Review #5, by MalfoyMannor Potions, Hot Cauldrons and Near-Panic

18th June 2015:
my big question: were they two different time views. Was George's before Hailey's burn? cause if George knew about her burning herself I 'm pretty sure he would overprotective and over sympathetic :P
just trying to pin the timeline together :p

Author's Response: Hey.

So. This is a part I debated with for a long time. I didn't know whether splitting the George POV and Hailey POV would work as well as I intended. I'm nervously thinking no, as without having the next chapter with it back in Hailey's POV here, confusion comes up...

So. George's POV is the day following Hailey getting burned. Just so happens that George doesn't /know/ that Hailey got burned. Yet. He just knows she was absent from morning practice and Wood didn't say anything. I think the next chapter may further clarify that point, so if my explanation here doesn't make sense, the next chapter really breaks it down and explains the events. Sorry for any confusion!

Thanks again for reading and reviewing! I appreciate it!


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Review #6, by MalfoyMannor The Power of Suggestion

18th June 2015:
George and Hailey are just so darn cute together :)

Author's Response: Ahhh! Words cannot do them justice! I'm always surprised by how easy to write they are. They're so natural with each other and just...ahhh, one of my favorite pairing to write right now. They're adorable, really...

Thanks for the review! Especially on one of the newer chapters post edit!

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Review #7, by MalfoyMannor Running and Hypocrites

18th June 2015:
Dear Oliver Wood you are the biggest hypocrite ever :P

Author's Response: Hey! Yeah, uh, Wood is a pretty fantastic captain...breaking his own rules and all. You'd figure he'd be a bit more careful with how he publicized it, but then's Wood. Being hypocritical makes his captianing more difficult, which he seems to enjoy. So there's that.

Haha, thanks for the review!

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Review #8, by Gina Running and Hypocrites

8th November 2013:
Strict, serious old Wood is actually snogging someone? I was beginning to think he had no feelings! lol great work as always!

Author's Response: Hahaha! He does have feelings...deep, deep down somwehere! HAHAHA! Thanks for reading and the review! I did just recently update THE ENTIRE story posted and post new yeah! Thanks again!


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Review #9, by tiberiusirius Running and Hypocrites

31st October 2013:
Finally the poor bloke is getting some action! :) Can't wait to read the fallout.

Author's Response: Haha, yeah. I couldn't be completely cruel to the poor guy. And the fallout is...well, it's interesting...

Thanks so much for the review!

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Review #10, by MsErrol Anxiety, Reassurances, and Following the Rules

27th September 2013:
this is amazing!!! besides the fact there is basiclly no such thing as harry potter, but its still great!

Author's Response: Thanks! And I know! My original intention was to include Harry Potter and keep this story aligned with the books, but once I started writing, it didn't work out so great.I'm glad you like it regaurdless of that fact thought!
Thanks for the review!

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Review #11, by MsErrol Pink Hair, Food Fights, and Captains

24th September 2013:
hahahahaha this is hilarious!!! Are you realted to j.k or something?

Author's Response: I am so glad you're enjoying this story! It has been my project for a number of years and it's good to see people still enjoying it. And no, not related to J.K. I wish somtimes.
Thanks for the review!

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Review #12, by annonymous Snow Ball Fights and Late Night Conversations

27th May 2013:
WOW! i love this story! its great, i only have one thing to say. I would really like it if you brought cedric into it more. i think you should definately make him a main character!

Author's Response: So glad you enjoyed the story! It's been a blast writing it and I'm still having fun when I have the time to sit down and write another chapter. And I don't know how big of a character Cedric's going to be. I'll have to see where I can pull him in a little bit more, if I can.

Thanks for the review!

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Review #13, by PurpleMoors Snow Ball Fights and Late Night Conversations

24th March 2013:
Hi :) I used to post reviews as Sammie but I FINALLY made an account haha

I'm really glad you updated :) It's a really good chapter! It's nice seeing some of Hailey's family dynamic and how her and her sister seem to manage to get along when Tait's there :P

You were right I don't think it sounded particularly like her in this chapter (she seemed to be a missing a bit of that spark/pluck that's been so obvious in other chapters) but I actually think it's a nice change to see her with her guards down and not raising to the challenge every time Oliver opens his mouth haha :P

One thing I'm not so sure about (but this could be just my preference) is her and George acting all lovey dovey. It's probably just me but I'm not a big fan of the whole cutsie romance thing! I mean don't get me wrong I love reading romance but I just don't want their relationship to be drowned by it if you get what I mean :)

Keep writing cause I'm still a strong believer in this story so I'll keep checking for updates! Keep up the awesome writing and I look forward to the next chapter!! :D

PurpleMoors :)

Author's Response: Hello! Glad to see you back and congrats on FINALLY making an account ;)

I'm really glad I finally got around to updating too! It surely took me long enough...but I do have more family orientated stuff in this chapter.

But yes. I don't know what changed when writing Hailey in this chapter. I can say I'm glad it's a nice change, I just hope it doesn't effect her attitude after this chapter. Because I'm thinking having distinctive time away from George and Quidditch and having some time with her family instead is what caused the change...but I guess we'll see as the chapters go on.

And yeah. There relationship is getting to be a little over the top. Mostly because I have been struggling with writing some of thier scenes together. And hopefully it's just an off thing with the pair of them separted and it dies back down after George comes back...but again, we'll see.

Thanks so much for the review!

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Review #14, by TheMarauderChick Hatred Behind The Scenes

7th March 2013:
Hello! Back again :)

Do I sense a ickle crush here ;) ('And suddenly, with Georgeís smile, my heart seems to go into overtime')

Anyways, who knew Oliver could get so angry? And what was up with the whole backed up against the wall thing? Oliver, you need to learn the concept of personal space.

I really liked the descriptions of Hailey's feeling when Oliver was doing his schpiel. How she was so nervous yet angry at the same time. It was like I could feel what she was feeling!

Also, I can't wait to find out what happens during the tryouts next time. I totally feel like she's gonna do something drastic and Wood'll kick her off the team (meh, wouldn't put it past him)

Bye till the next chapter!

-Sankavi ^_^

Author's Response: Hello! I love seeing people return for more! It means that the chapters are interesting and my characters are worth revisiting!

And there may be just little bit of a crush going on there...maybe a rather large one, but then again, what do I know ;)

And yeah, I enjoy describing emotions. I don't know why. I just like when the reader can feel the emotions and relate to the characters feeling them! And Quidditch tryouts? Well, they're bound to be fun!

Thanks much for the review!

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Review #15, by TheMarauderChick Sarcasm And Annoyances

7th March 2013:
Hello! I'm Sankavi, here from the BvB (yay team blue!).

The first thing that came to mind when reading this was why is she so angry at Wood? Like, is there some other backstory that'll come up later or is it just because Wood acts like a poo to her on the pitch? I think it's a great way to start the story because it's like you're starting in the middle of the action.

I also really like the group of friends you've got going. The way Angie, Alicia, and Katie interact with Hailey is really nice to read. They sound so close!

I think this is really nice start to your story and sets it up for quite a lot of conflict. Can't wait to see what happens in the broom shed ;)

-Sankavi ^_^

Author's Response: Hello! Sorry for the slow reply! I was in the middle of a crazy semester at school and summer really didn't settle down to much...but I'm here responding now!

And there is a little bit of back story to her and Wood being at each other all the time. I mean, not a lot. Mostly it's that Wood doesn't treat her very nicely. And it does get worse in later chapters. So it sort of is a little more justified later on.

And I'm glad you like the introductions of Hailey's friends. I have a lot of people to keep track of in this story and if I'm building thier relationships well, that's good to know!

Thanks so much for the review!

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Review #16, by Secret Santa Punches, Conversations, and Cold Water

2nd January 2013:
I guess I spoke too soon about getting a punch in, huh? Good for her.

It makes me sad that she would even believe Wood that George was using her, and I hope that he said that because he's jealous George got to her first. But part of me is nervous that there's a little bit of truth to it. I don't know. I'm going to hope Georgie is telling the truth.

And once again, Wood ruins everything. Ugh, that boy needs to pull his broomstick out of his...yeah. Jerkface. I can't believe how much you've made me dislike Wood in so few chapters.

Author's Response: AHAHAHAHAHA! When I read the whole think about punching him in the last review, I couldn't help but giggle just a little. Cause yeah, she finally got her hit in. And Wood really deserved it too. He has no right to put that seed of doubt in her mind. And I would say it's safe to assume George isn't lying ;)

AHAHAH! And yeah, Wood needs to fix that whole broomstick in the wrong place's causing him a lot of issues. Because in the last couple of chapters, there is really nothing to like about Wood and his attitude.

Thanks again for the review!

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Review #17, by Secret Santa Pain, Dirty Looks, and Idiots.

2nd January 2013:
Ouch. Those injuries sound painful. And Wood finally showing some concern about her! I don't know why George didn't offer to carry her the whole way to the Hospital Wing. :P Poor girl. I think Quidditch sounds like so much fun but then you think about how high off the ground you are and what a fall to the ground could do to you. Terrifying!

Ughh, Wood is so frustrating! Seriously! He's the biggest jerk there is. I don't blame Hailey for putting a wand to his throat. I'd have killed him by now, for sure! I don't know how she puts up with his crap the way she does. I mean, I know they fight but that girl has amazing restraint. Some of the things Wood has said to her would have had me throwing punches, haha. I hope Hailey doesn't get another detention from Snape..

Author's Response: Yeah, I don't even want to imagine what those injuries feel like. I mean, I've had times where my knee pops out of place and that's painful enough...add in broken ribs and all that other stuff? OUCH!

And yeah..I'd be worried if Wood wasn't acting concerned in this situation. I know he's a pain on a good day, but that would just be absolutely cruel. And he hasn't hit that point yet. Though he's really testing his limits later in the chapter... He really is lucky she has some good self control...

Thanks for the review!

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Review #18, by Secret Santa Tellings, Veritaserum, and Friends

2nd January 2013:
Ha, a Quidditch fight. Geez. There is a lot of tension on that team. Maybe they all just needed to get all that frustration out and things will be fine after that.

Fred is such a creeper! I bet he read the entire thing, though I didn't really see anything incriminating in that entry. It makes me wonder if he'll try to steal her diary or something.

Ahah, when the Veritaserum came out, I KNEW something like this would happen. I didn't expect Katie to come out though! Ooh, the questioning will be good, that's for sure. I wonder if they'll both admit their feelings for each other! George was obviously angry that someone accidentally punched her and I've been saying it that he is SO obvious about his attraction to they just need to come clean to each other about it! Next chapter should be a doozy.

Author's Response: Yeah...what's a Quidditch team without a couple of fist fights, right? xD

And I love writing Fred's character. I know, I love writing everyone's character and I always switch from character to character, but Fred is such a pain sometimes...and he's like a 'you-can't-hate-him-but-he-is-kinda-annoying' character and he's just a lot of fun to write. He's got such a different personality than everyone else...

And of course the Veritaserum is where the trouble starts. It wouldn't be any fun otherwise! And I decided Katie was necessary to get in on that because I don't know if Fred would have been able to pull that whole thing off on his own...he could have, but in all likelihood, without Katie, Fred and George would have taken the Veritaserum, which would ruin my whole plot...

Anyways, thanks again for the review!

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Review #19, by Secret Santa Meetings, Practice and Detention

2nd January 2013:
Sorry for the delay in your reviews, I'm a sucky Secret Santa.

I really like George and Hailey's interactions. I don't think I mentioned it before, but I like the nickname Hail Storm. It's cute and clever. Poor George really likes Hailey, hm? He was really concerned about the detention and being behind it. I wish I could have seen more of the love potion on Wood, that would have been funny.

Geez, seriously, Wood and Hailey cannot be in the same room without starting a fight, can they? Wood just frustrates me beyond belief! I can't believe he would stoop so low as to accuse Hailey as being a slacker and relying on friends to help her pass classes. I think that their discord could make for some great passion if they finally get together (that's what I like about love-hate romances, even if they are cliche) but Wood's antagonist remarks are somewhat cruel. I guess that's why I'm sort of rooting for George and Hailey now, hah.

I can't wait for the prank. I bet it'll be epic.

Ooh, finally, not trying to rip each other's throats out during detention. That's a welcome relief, but it does seem strange for them to be in the same room and to not be yelling at each other. Hopefully this is a step in the right direction. I really want Wood to stop being a huge jerk. He's too cute for that.

Author's Response: You were an excellent secret santa! You're reviewing skills are much better than my responding skills have been xD

And George and Hailey, again, are adorable. The pair of them...they are so much fun to write. It's like being in a relationship myself without actually having to be in a relationship. But yeah, he does really like her. He hates that it's more or less his fault that she's in detention and having to deal with Wood. and I was tempted to write more of the love potion scene...but I wasn't quite sure where to take it from there...

And no, Wood and Hailey together in the same room is just a bad idea. Neither can handle being civil with one another...although detention doesn't go quite as horribly as it could have...and I agree. Wood is way too attractive to be such a huge jerk...

Thanks for the review!

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Review #20, by Secret Santa Pranks and Proposals

24th December 2012:
Well, I'm glad that Hailey and George didn't die. Actually, George being all cheerful and shirtless was quite nice. I liked that he encouraged her to keep going. It was really sweet of him. :)

Hah, secret meetings on the third floor and Mark just overhearing their conversation. Silly girls. Nothing is secret if you're going to talk about it in the open.

I LOVE that George and Fred wanted Hailey to use the potion on Wood. Though it would've been cute if Hailey took it and proclaimed her love for George...even if it was the potion talking. ;)

I wonder if Snape will give Wood the antidote and if Wood will find out what happened! Hm, so many questions I suppose I will only find the answer to in future chapters!

Author's Response: Yeah, I was originally going to have them die, but decided it would sort of end the story early ;) xD

And I loved that scene! I know I've said I adore Wood and George, but Mark is seriously my favorite character in this story. He's got such a funny sense of humour and most of the time it comes from him pointing out very apparent things. He's just great!

And yeah...I was going to have George take it, but the opportunity to put Wood and Hailey through just a little bit more? Because really, Wood should know that Hailey added a love potion to it. Because Hailey is in advanced potions and how likely would she be to make that big of a mistake?

Thanks for the review!

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Review #21, by Secret Santa Reactions and Unexpected Moves

24th December 2012:
Ugh, THEY WERE ABOUT TO KISS, WOOD. Thanks for ruining the moment.

Aw, George to the rescue! It was sweet of him to stand up for Hailey and to point out to Wood that she's only one that ever has to suffer his punishments, but like Hailey said, kind of stupid. I'm glad she didn't get into anymore trouble, having George defend her like that. It is frustrating, though, that Wood would assume Hailey asked him to fight her battles for her. Doesn't Wood know her by now to know that she wouldn't back down anyway? She fights her own battles with her sarcasm quite well, I think, even if Wood is a jerk about it.

Well, at least Hailey doesn't have to die alone. That practice sounds brutal. Hopefully without his Seeker and Beater in practice, Wood will realize how much he needs them and stop making them do stupid punishments for "stepping out of line." He's taking his captain thing way too seriously for me!

Author's Response: Wood and his tendency to have bad timing and ruin all the perfect moments in life... *sigh*

And yeah...stupid or not, it was kind of sweet of George to stand up for Hailey. Not that it worked all that well in his favour, but it's the thought that counts, isn't it? xD

And Wood should know better. Hailey has her sarcasm and it's the only weapon she needs to deal with Wood. She doesn't need someone else to fight her battles for her. Although if Wood wasn't being so evil being Quidditch captain... [That would have been a practice of death for me...definately not a fun soudning one...]

Thanks much for hte review!

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Review #22, by Secret Santa Punishments and Potions

24th December 2012:
Ahh, George and Hailey are so stinkin' cute together. I love how protective of her she is. To be fair, Wood's punishment DOES seem a bit out of line, and that's a lot of running. If I was her, I'd say screw it and just quit. See what Wood would do about all those threats that he would have a Seeker to replace her anyway.

OF COURSE he would be her partner in Advanced Potions! I hope she can see a different side of him in class, though knowing the two of them, it will probably be a bunch of drama and head-butting (figuratively, of course.) This should be interesting.

I'm still internally squeeing about how cute George is, though. I'm curious how you're going to tie all this together and I bet there will be lots of boy drama. Yay.

I'm glad you didn't have Hailey repeat what happened at tryouts again. I think that was my only qualm about the previous chapter, having to read what happened again. It just seemed a tad bit unnecessary, so it was nice that you had Hailey brush Alicia off.

Off to the next chapter to see how Wood handles being Hailey's new Potions partner! Hehehe. Poor guy.

Author's Response: Ahahaha! The last couple of reviews had me wondering who my secret santa was last year...then I remembered. And laughed because this is the consequence of waiting almost a year to reply to reviews xD

ANYWAYS. George and Hailey are adorable. George is just so adorable as he goes to protect her, no matter how stupid, and he just...he's perfect. And I adore his character so much!

And of course that would be her partner in Advanced Potions! It would be no fun if he wasn't! But it's always a little bit funny for Wood to not have his 'captain' title to hide behind around her. Because it could lead to him acting a little differently. Guess we'll see.

And yeah. I noticed that it was sort of annoying to have Hailey repeat everything that had just happened. I've been working on ways to cut those parts out as they are unnecessary...

Thanks for the review!

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Review #23, by Secret Santa Hatred Behind The Scenes

24th December 2012:
Hi! I am so sorry for the delay in your reviews. Things got busy and then with the archive down, I haven't had a chance. I hope to make it up to you for this round.

Ooh, this chapter was just so full of tension! Wood makes me want to punch him in the face. I'm not sure if that's intentional or I'm picking up on how uncomfortable and angry he makes Hailey. I really enjoyed that I could picture Wood in all his cocky ways as he inched Hailey closer and closer to the shed up until the point where he had her pinned there. Of course sometimes I am a sucker for cliches so I was silently rooting for them to just kiss even though I was really annoyed with Wood.

I love that the twins broke Wood out of his focus and that little quip about their hatred and how their position looked to outsiders. George is so cute, with his concern and all that. Maybe this will be a George/Hailey fic! ;)

I can't wait to see how Hailey behaves at tryouts, if she takes Oliver's threats to heart. It should be very interesting, indeed!

Author's Response: Hello! Delay in reviews is nothing. Especially now, looking at how long it's taken me to respond to this lovely review... xD

Anyways, the tension! It was the greatest part of this chapter. It really explored Wood's serious side and how he really can play up to being captian. Of course, this was a little over the top, but still within the realms of his character. Even better that it was broken by the twins, because I kind of adore them too...

And punching Wood in the face? That's kind of a theme at the start here. There were a lot of times where I hated him as much as Hailey. Which is a bit tricky.

Thanks for the review!

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Review #24, by Secret Santa Sarcasm And Annoyances

15th December 2012:
Hi, it's your Ravenclaw Secret Santa! I'm sorry for not getting to your reviews sooner - it was finals week!

I haven't read an Oliver/OC fic before so I thought this looked like a cute story that I might enjoy for my first foray into this ship.

I really like the premise so far. Oliver is hilarious with how much of a tyrant he is when it comes to the team. I love how he picks on Hailey and it's so obvious to her friends that he targets her. Don't they always say boys pick on girls they have crushes on? ;)

I love Hailey's sarcasm. She's so snarky and I really enjoy reading her inner-thoughts when it comes to Oliver. It makes me laugh.

All your characters are great so far. I love Angie and Fred and your dialogue is natural between friends. It's not too stuffy or anything like that, which is nice.

I also think you did a good job describing a sports practice. You didn't gloss over the not-so pretty details about it - sports are hard, and some people might think Quidditch is easy and all you do is fly around on a broom, but it definitely takes a certain level of athleticism and having them do normal things like suicides and cool downs, etc. really adds authenticity to it.

I'm super curious what Oliver wants with Hailey now! He just can't give that girl a moment of peace, huh? I'm going to be leaving you reviews throughout this Secret Santa thing so keep an eye out. :)

Author's Response: Hello Secret Santa! I apologize for replying almost a year later, but I'm here and will be responding to any and all reviews I have yet to reply to xD

I absolutely adore Oliver/OC stories. Part of it is because I absolutely adore Wood's character and the first Oliver/OC I read was phenominal. I was really impresse with it and had a blast reading it.

And I'm glad you like what I have so far. This chapter was written 4ish? years ago, and my writing has come a LONG way since then, so it's good that this chapter is still interesting.

As for the sarcasm? It's like my native language. I'm naturally a really sarcastic person and I knew it would be fun to give that trait to Hailey. I think the biggest difference, though, is that Hailey is a lot more snarky than I could ever be...

Anyways, I'm glad the Quidditch practice stuff sounded good. This was my first real attempt at writing Quidditch and I'm actually quite impressed I did as well as I did...

Thanks for the review, again!

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Review #25, by my_voice_rising Sarcasm And Annoyances

8th December 2012:
Lucky me, I found an Oliver/OC at the review swap! :D

I have to say, it makes total sense for Hailey to be interested in George, as they both seem to love making Oliver's life hell! She must be a really, really good Seeker or I have the feeling he wouldn't put up with her undermining his authority. Or maybe he really does just have a crush on her!

I think Angelina would look cool with a pink streak in her hair, personally ;) I think you did a really good representation of practice; including all the agony of Hailey's suicides, the laps on brooms, the stretching, the endless critiques from Wood... I feel exhausted just sitting and reading it! The fact that Hailey is just wearing a sweater and trainers and such, rather than trying to doll herself up, adds to her character as an athlete as well.

Uh-oh. She's in trouble. Heheh. I'm curious to know how to pronounce her name, though, in my head I'm saying tea-zon, although I have a pretty firm belief that it's wrong XD

Nice first chapter! I love your characterization of Wood as the strict, serious Quidditch captain rather than the heartbreaker. :)

Author's Response: Yes! Oliver/OC's are the greatest things to accidentally run into! [Not that I'm biased or anything...:P]

Ha, I never thought about Hailey liking George for that reason...but it does fit quite nicely and is actually pretty funny. And she is a pretty good seeker...but Wood also doesn't really have someone better to replace her, so he doesn't have much of an option but put up with her undermining his authority.

And I am so glad you think the Quidditch practices seem realistic. I figured that Quidditch couldn't just be about flying around; it required running and laps, and stretching, and Wood constantly having something to say. It just seemed to fit.

And I adore Hailey. In some ways she's like me [not looking to impress anyone with her looks, or be something she's not] but in other way's she's a lot bolder than I would ever be. And honestly? She'd probably be someone I wouldn't like very much...

And her last name is pronounced Tie-zon, so pretty much as it's spelled. Which is different.

Thanks so much for the review!

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