COOL!COOL!COOL! Awesome story! I would love to be writing right now, but i can't update! :[ M.E.G. Report Review
I think you have the makings of a great story, but for a first chapter there's a lot going on. Try slowing down and adding more detail about the characters; Ambers past - why is she coming to Hogwarts, The train journey - who does she meet, The sorting and The feast. Slow it down and stretch it across more chapters. I really liked it and with a few alterations I think it will be even better! Keep writing! x Report Review
No offense but the writing of this story is childlike, bland, and predictable. It's a good idea but I think you did a poor job of writing this story. Report Review
No offense but the writing of this story is childlike, bland, and predictable. It's a god idea but I think you did a poor job of writing this story. Report Review
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