Hi! I think you have an excellent story here!!! The only thing I suggest is to maybe get a beta reader because there are quite a lot of issues with commas and dialogue. Also, "order of the phoenix" should be capitalized like Order of the Phoenix. I hope you end up posting more! It's a wonderful story. (: Report Review
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