I'm a little confused. So does Severus like Penny too? I can't wait for more!! Report Review
I like the hospital wing scene, how Madam Pomfrey almost gives it away. I also forgot to mention this the first time, but I like how you imagery-ize (yeah, it's a very now :) her heart, talking about this piercing it and hurting it, and all of those comparisons.
I also like how Penny gives Severus a chance, and I think it's very realistic the way Remus snaps at him. I like the thoughts in Remus's head, too. Actually, the change of POV isn't as distracting as you'd think it might be.
Nice work, I can't wait to read more when you update! Report Review
I love the imagery! It's really good, and you describe everything in such great detail. The story is so sweet, and I just plain 'ole love it. Penny's last line is really wonderful too, and I love how you make her not the typical hero, per say, but the fact that the physical pain hurt, she smiles awkwardly at him, all of those realistic truths that people always leave out of their stories. I really love it, and can't wait to read more! Report Review
*tears* Wow. That was so great. Gosh. I was feeling really badly for Penny. So will she get friends now? I loved the chapter. I can't wait for more!!Author's Response: Thanks so much for letting me know that you liked it! I feel so much better now, and more confident. I'm so glad you like it, I shall put the next chapter in for validation right away!
Thanks again, for reviewing, I really appreciate it.
And yeah, Penny's found friends ^^
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