6 Reviews Found

Review #1, by I_heart_PadfootnMoony And the Devil is Winning

10th July 2010:
That was great! I really liked the way you portrayed Sirius' condition and the way you described the more mature parts of the story ;p Good job!

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Review #2, by lily flower And the Devil is Winning

28th September 2009:
This is really good!! I really like it!!! Good job:)

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Review #3, by marauderqueen And the Devil is Winning

1st August 2009:
Is this really your first attempt?
It's brilliant!
Great descriptions of everything and you portrayed the emotions well.
Really liked it.
marauderqueen
10

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Review #4, by Maxinarina And the Devil is Winning

3rd July 2009:
aww, this was so sweet! i loved it. all this slash fanfic's make me all gooy and happy on inside *wriggle* :D hee.

ahem. anyway
lovely story. it was wonderful. i think you're a fabulous writer! absolutely brilliant! inspiring!
keep up the good work : )
xx.

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Review #5, by long_live_luna_bellatrix And the Devil is Winning

3rd May 2009:
Hey there! Sorry I've taken so long to review. I feel like every time I turn around there's more and more to do. But here I am.

This was really well written. I won't pretend to be an expert on borderline personality disorder, but Sirius was written realistically enough for a person like me to get it. All the emotions were portrayed nicely.

The slash was ok too. My suggestion is to put more emotional love in the story, not only physical. I feel like when I lot of people think of slash they only think of the kissing, when they must feel some sort of emotional love too. I think you need more of that in there to make it more realistic.

It also could be a little longer, but that's not a must. I like this because you get to see one scene, and know that almost the same exact scene will happen again (i.e. Sirius will be in trouble the next night and Remus will have to help him because he loves him). Another part of me thinks that a little more detail would be nice. So that's kind of up to you.

Overall, nice work! For a first slash and afirst Marauders, that was great!

~llb

Author's Response: Oh no. It is fine! I loved the surprised of signing in one day and boom! A random review being there.

Ooh. Good. That was one of my main worries in writing this. xD I wasn't sure how to approach emotional love in this because of the circumstances but I will certainly keep that in mind when I write my next slash piece.

I didn't want it to drag on so I can understand why you might think it is a little short. I will keep that in mind if I ever write a dramatic piece like this again.

Thank you for reviewing! =)


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Review #6, by redherring And the Devil is Winning

12th April 2009:
Omg, that was amazing. Was it really your first attempt at slash? Haha, I don't believe you, it's too good! :P

I was kind of 'oh my God, what the hell's Sirius doing??!!' before I read the author note at the end, at which point it all made sense, but the OMG factor was part of the appeal of the fic, if you know what I mean. I also loved the title - it fitted the story perfectly.

Your writing style is just captivating. I don't know quite what it is about it, but I just think I could read absolutely anything you wrote.

10/10.

Author's Response: It was! I promise. xD

Thank you. I was worried if I got the whole 'slightly going insane' thing done. xD Thank you. I was scrolling through my iTunes library and it popped out at me.

Thank you so much! That seriously made my day. =]


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