Hey great story! But how is lily pureblood when Harry was a halfblood? Report Review
its been forever, need to read more...
100/100 Report Review
Your story is so good this far, haha, two chapters in. (x
I feel really bad about Wes-I mean Sparrow (brilliant name!) and the fact that his parents are like the Dursley's, but I'm glad that Harry let him stay in his house, *wink-wink*, I have a feeling Harry's playing matchmaker. (;
I have a few questions though:
1-Doesn't Lily have FIVE brothers, not counting Teddy? I mean there's James, Albus, Alastor&Remus, and little Cedric. Wouldn't that make Teddy number six? I'm just wondering.
2-Is Albus and Sparrow good friends? Because they're in the same year, yet it seems like Lily is more-or-less the only Potter to be bestest friends with him.
Anyways, good job so far (: Report Review
i love this its really good :D
i love lily and sparrows characters but i feel sorry for lily that he doesnt see lily the way she sees him :(
more than 10/10 :D Report Review
Amazing! please update soon!
Can't wait - this story is really well written!
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Lilly and Sparrow sort of remind me of Harry and Ginny!
Maybe if Lilly started snogging everyone Sparrow would notice her!Author's Response: lol. Knowing Sparrow, I don't think that would make him notice her. Then again, maybe he would, simply because he thinks he should protect her.
However! She is not going to sart snogging everybody. :P Who would she snog, most of her friends are her cousins? Report Review
I really like your writing style, the words flow together really well! Great job:) This is probably my favorite story on this site.
9.8/10 Report Review
who is they guy in ur pic playing scorAuthor's Response: Alex Pettyfer Report Review
Wow, I'm really, really liking this story! Lily's voice comes through very nicely and I especially like how she reacted to Danny Vane! And I see someone else made the point I was going to make about longer chapters. Number one, your story will be less chapters and it'll get through the queue faster. Other than that, I really like this and keep it up! 10/10
imagine_the_magic Report Review
You continue to amaze me with these chapters!
I loved Lily's reaction to the girls!
But anyways keep writing:)
oh and I like your banner, the girls looks like Lily to me. Report Review
I don't know what else to say! LOL. I really like this story thought, it's really good:)Author's Response: Thank you XD The next chapter has been put through for validation... Report Review
but it was way to shortAuthor's Response: hmm, they are pretty short aren't they. Once I've posted up the whole story, I'll probably trowel through it all, rewriting it, and then it'll all be much longer. for now your going to have to survive with short chapters because my muse is near non-existent :( Report Review
I like the Lily on the banner. I hope you don't change it! That's actually what attracted me to the story. xD Mind telling me who she is?
I loved the first chapter. :) Please update soon!Author's Response: Not to worry, I am going to keep the Lily I currently have. Her name is Sarah Bolger, but her hair is not naturally red. Eventually I will get round to creating an improved banner where her hair doesn't look so fake red XP
I'm glad you liked it, next chapter is already in the process of validation, and should hopefully come up soon! Report Review
Awww, that was soo cute and readable!
Normaly the first year train rides are annoying, you know every one nervous and all thinking they'll meet a troll or something, but this one was great!
I'm already startin to like Sparrow! (that really is a an awesome surname!)
P.S Looks like Lilly knows a lot of fancy words *sniff*
Update soon!Author's Response: I'm glad that you like the story :D
His surname is inspired (obviously) by Jack Sparrow out of Pirates of the Caribbean , and I'm trying to model him as a younger and slightly saner version of him!
Thanks for reviewing... Report Review
I love it! Sparrow almost reminds me of a new Sirius...which is a total compliment because I love Sirius!:) Anyways...write more!Author's Response: oh, he really is like Sirius, I hadn't thought of that at all! You'll later find out he's even more like Sirius then you think now XD. Report Review
I love this story so far! Please update soon!
I can't wait to see what happens...
=]Author's Response: Next chapter has already been put in for validation! Glad you like it :) Report Review
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