this is absolutely incredible
probably the best marauder story i've read! Report Review
It truly was a pleasure to read :) I hadn't realized until somewhere in the middle that it was her wedding day! lol then I realized you never actually said anything about being in her common room at all lol :)
I absolutely love this, how James acted the same kind of person he always had :) I loved everything!
Absolutely wonderful job! 10/10 :) Report Review
this story is endlessly beautiful!! Loved it! (L) Report Review
I loved this fic! I liked how the beginning, it was like the stereotypical Maruders fanfic, but turned into something fun and unexpected. I love all of your fanfics! Report Review
So, so sweet. Wonderful job. It was refreshing to read a story in which neither one of them gives up their persona to fall head over heels for the other. Clearly they love each other just the way they are.
--Kate/RP :) Report Review
ahhh that was adorable i loved it!!! Report Review
Simply fantastic. Great job! Report Review
What a beautiful and funny story! I laughed through most of the whole thing. I'm not much of a James/Lily shipper, though it is canon (Marauder era + me = not much love), but this story was really sweet. I can tolerate the Marauders like this. You can't have a light-hearted Marauders story without pranks, and I appreciate your subtlety. The flowers, fireworks, paper airplanes . . . those weren't exactly practical jokes, but they were the perfect Marauder-ish touch.
I could practically feel Lily's irritation! Geez, James was being so insufferable! The cheeky . . . whatever. It was funny, though, the way they kept needling each other. The banter was perfect.
My favorite part was possibly when Peter came to the door. I thought you described him very well. That scene could not have possibly worked with any other character.Author's Response: Thanks for all of the reviews you've left me recently! I promise to try to respond to them ASAP.
It's really difficult to write an original Marauders story anymore, and all I can say about this one is that sometimes I have to indulge in frivolous fluffiness. It keeps me sane. XD I'm glad to hear you actually found it funny!
I don't think James would have ever stopped teasing and tormenting Lily. And anyway, what's a good relationship without a healthy amount of time spent provoking each other? I'm sure Lily enjoyed it on some level.
Poor Peter. He was fun to write here.
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That was a really cute a really sweet story. I throughly enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing! :)Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! Report Review
A lovely story. Again, I love your characterization of James and Lily, likewise, Sirius and Wormtail. You've taken what little we know and done wonders with it.
Great storytelling.Author's Response: Thank you!! :-) Report Review
Awww! so adorable! almost made me cry!Author's Response: Thank you! Report Review
aww. That was so sweet! OMG when he called her Potter I almosted started to cry!! LOVED IT! Congrats! *Claps and a cookie*- CharlyAuthor's Response: Hahaha, thank you so much! Report Review
I don't even know how to review this because it'll probably sound the same as all my other reviews for all your other cute/sweet stories.
So...yay :)Author's Response: Thank you! :-) Report Review
Hey! It's MagicMuggle from TGS ;).
I decided to come and look at your page, and I'm glad I did. This was absolutely beautiful! I love how you kept the reader guessing right until the very end about what was happening. James still retained his cheekiness, and Lily didn't act all soppy and lovestruck like she often does in these kind of fics. She actually seemed like a real person. And although it seemed like they still had the Lily-hates-James-he-loves-Lily relationship, it all made perfect sense when it came to the end. Sorry, I'm rambling now. It was a really good read. :)
10/10.Author's Response: Thanks so much for the great review!
This was just a fun little random thing I dreamed up, so it's nice to see it's still getting some love, and good to know you enjoyed it, too!
I liked retaining their antagonism. I think it's cute. ^_^
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i am just completely speachless. thank you for writing the best lily/james one-shot i've read in a while. :]
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It was such a pleasure to read!
What a truly lovely story!!!Author's Response: Thank you! Report Review
this was indeed a pleasure to read :)
i didn't really know what was happening at the beginning, but i did enjoy how it nicely unfolded. and James is a perfect mix of sweet, loving and arrogant.Author's Response: Yes, he is, isn't he? I love James. :-)
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You write wonderful lilly and James stories!! write more please! I love them!
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This was so sweet! *dreamy sigh* I lurve the way you write James...he's still so arrogant and obnoxious and it's really charming! Honestly, why do we girls fall for that? It's stupid, lol :P
And Lily was just divine :) I loved how you didn't make it all sugery-sweet and you kept the whole thing a secret right up until the end.
This was just brilliant, really. I love it :D 10/10Author's Response: It is one of the mysteries of the universe, why we fall for the Jameses of the world. But he didn\\\'t turn out so bad, so maybe there\\\'s hope for the rest of them!
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Aw. That was adorable. It took me a while to figure out what was going on, but probably because every one was in character, which for some reason people think James and Lily changed dramatically once they became an item. I liked it a lot =] Gotta love Sirius hiding in curtains and never behaving himself.Author's Response: Thank you for the review! Glad you liked it! Report Review
OMG!!! WTF!!! BBQ SAUCE!!! At first I just reading, not really thinking. Then when Peter said not sleeping tonight, I actually started considering the thought of thinking, then when Lily thought about having something blue, the Weddding Song from Corpse Bride popped into my head. I love it! : !Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review! Report Review
That was such a nice story! Description, characterisation and plot were all great, and all the clever lines made me laugh. I did think they were at Hogwarts at first ... maybe counting down to a ball or something ... if that's what you were aiming for, well done! James and Lily were so cute together. This was really lovely :).Author's Response: Yep, that's what I was going for! I wanted it to be a little bit ambiguous. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. Cheers! Report Review
:) “Potter,” he said, kissing her forehead, “I promise I will never stop chasing you.”
Such a good last line. :) Characters all perfectly done - just how I imagine them! You're characterization is the best I've ever come across, everyone just "fits" together so well and no one says anything that makes me think "that character would never talk like that!!" Author's Response: Thank you for your awesome review! I'm flattered that you thought I got the characters right. :-) Report Review
really well written and i didnt cotton on that it was there wedding day until it said wedding. i was like oohh haha :)
but thats good, its well written and all the characters are written and captured spot on :)
MizzWeasley xAuthor's Response: Thank you so much! These characters are really fun to write, particularly James and Sirius. Glad you thought my portrayal was accurate! :-) Report Review
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Ok, no more Spanish. On with the review!
Ok, I admit, when I started reading this, I thought they were still in school. It just seems that like Lily would find a small gift from James in her bedroom during the school year. If that's the angle you were going for, good job.
Characterization could have been worked on a bit better. They were some minor things, no biggie. For example, if Lily is a hardworking honest person, I think she would be able to keep her room in check. But, (I'm going to contradict myself here), it seems that's she's really stressed out and such, so that could be a reasonable excuse to let something so minor slip. Another interesting thing I found was that James and Lily call each other by their last names...up until engagement? In addition, maybe it's just me, but I think Peter would have more confidence in himself when it comes to speaking with Lily; however, Lily's stressing/psycho/rampage mode could be pretty intimidating.
Your opening scene for me was very visible despite using so few words! I don't mean to offend you in any way, but they're simple descriptions, but they're powerful enough to get a visual going on in one's head.
Other than that, I thought this was a cute read! Nice work! By the way, the last line made me go "Aw!"
I hope I wasn't to harsh with my CC,
ca♥Author's Response: Thank you for the extensive review! I love CC, so I do appreciate it, and it's good to know which things might seem confusing and weird, even if they came out the way I meant them to - for example, I know of lots of motivated, conscientious girls who can't keep their rooms organized to save their lives, so that's where Lily's messy room came from. And - can you believe this? - I actually know a married couple who call each other by their last name! I just thought it was something James would do to be flirtatious.
And I did mean the beginning to be ambiguous, so I'm glad it had that effect on you!
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