hmm.. i liked it, although i think chapter 1 was a little bit better. although it was nice to get inside her head and compare it to Lily's view point.
update soon :) Report Review
lol! Funny introduction and completely random at some points, but i really like it! Report Review
LuckySeven here with your review! (sorry for the wait, I ran off and joined the circus) Ok before I even begin I have to say that your penname on the archives is AWESOME. And the sheepies r aweshumm link was funny too I had a good laugh.*ahem* Anyway!
My favorite parts:
"My eyes widened and my cheeks grew warm. I snapped my head away from the window and instantly got down low onto my bedroom floor, somehow afraid that he might come floating up to my window on the second floor and chide me for being mildly tacky for staring. It doesn't make sense, but still..."
-I find that cute. That weird feeling that if you stand in front of the window people are going to look at you is something I get. Odd? :)
"Morning, mom," I whispered and set her carefully into an open trunk on the floor, with clothes, books, and other necessities already tucked in neatly."
-*sniffle* 'nuff said. :D
"What, were the first years too peppy for you?" a voice comes from the bed nearby."
-that part just made me laugh. Stupid Freshmen!! *ahem*
And the plot thickens! I love it. This is a fun story! My only issue is that the chapters are a wee bit short. :) Other than that, good job! And thank you for returning to my review thread. Do come again. :)
Have a Splendiferously Fantacular Day!,
9/10Author's Response: (sorry, haven't checked my reviews in a while)
Haha. Your reviews are aweshomme.
Glad you liked it. :D
No one else has reviewed this chapter yet. *sniffsniff*
But, oh well. I had fun writing this chapter. Next chapter's gonna be even more fun!
yesyesyes, I'll try to make the chapters longer. I'll try. XD
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Awesome chapter. I really really loved it. Does Audrey like Remus and therefore she's nervous around him and mad that he's moved in across the street and Julie's annoyed that Remus caught Audrey as she fell, because secretly Julie likes him too?
I think that may have been a completely ridiculous idea lol, but I tried. Great job, I love the characterization of all the characters and I like your OCs. They're cool :)Author's Response: Ummm...
Ok. You're right and wrong, but I'm not going to tell where you're right & wrong. >:D That would give it away.
I can't wait to finish Julie's chapter! It's gonna be long, and extra good! :]
Thank you, I'm flattered. ^___^
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Hey! I'm responding to your review request. So before I read the chapter, I'll admit that I tend to sugarcoat things, but since this is your first fic I think I'm going to actually look for problems.
*Reads chapter*...Are you sure that this is your first fic? Usually first fics tend to be about 800 words long with absolutely no substance. I'm impressed! You actually have a decent length, your writing is fun and it even makes sense! You made me laugh a lot as well. I have a rule. If I laugh (in a good way) I give a good review. So, I'm really not feeling critical today! I'll tell you honestly that you are a good writer. Feel free to re-request. Thanks for the laugh!
10/10Author's Response: Wow. I'm honestly flattered. Thank you for the review. The problem is that since this is my first fic, I was looking for a few reviews, but only 2 reviewed... So I had no idea how it was: should I discontinue it or should I keep going? So thank you for reviewing, and for actually completing my request. :) Report Review
I love it! Keep writing! I'll see you in school tomorrow...xD Report Review
This was awesome! I can't wait to read more!!! I really love your characters. Audrey, Julie, Lily. They're great and James, we've only seen a bit of him but it was good :D
I can't wait to read what happens next. You've got a really good story on your hands so far.
IloveNeville :)Author's Response: Ah. That was touching, since you're my first review. Now I finally know a little bit about what people think about my story. XD lol.
Thank you! Report Review
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