Here as requested. ^__^ Sorry it took me a bit to get here.
Ah, this was so great. So new and... refreshing, you know? It's nice to see a unique one-shot every once and a while, and this one definitely did it for me. Kudos to you for that.
I absolutely loved your first paragraph and the descriptions at the top. It highlights what the story's going to be about! It gives you a good impression. Like a good taste in your mouth after biting into a cake, right? XD Ha.
And your characterization stayed straight all the way through. Your character never fluctuated, never changed their feelings or actions. That sometimes bothers me in a one-shot, when a character acts one way and then says something totally different. So well done with that!
Wonderful wonderful wonderful. Really, it was a great fic, and thank you so much for requesting! 10/10
- RinAuthor's Response: Hi Rin!
Sorry it took me a few days to reply. I realized I had a major project due and had to drop everything to complete it ;) I do sincerely apologize for the delay.
Thank you so much for the fantastic review. I wasn't sure if the fic itself could be a stand-alone, as it is tied in with a novel of mine. Your comments, however, were so kind and encouraging ^_^
"Like a good taste in your mouth after biting into cake."-that's a great metaphor. I love it! Haha
Again, thanks for everything. I really appreciate your feedback. I hope you have a great week!
Hello, there, dear! I'm here with your review.
I'm so sorry this took me so long to get around to. Life just catches up with ya, you know? :P
But this was very good. It's new and refreshing. Completely unique and all its own story. It's moving and very interesting. You had me going from the very first paragraph. Wonderful story.
Freddy and his mother's relationship really stuck out to me. You don't see those kinds of things. It was portrayed wonderfully.
Everything is so nicely spaced in this story. You don't linger on descriptions. You keep the story alive and move on. And it is interspersed fantastically with dialogue and actions and emotions.
This was very great. Good job! Keep it up!
9/10Author's Response: Hi there Phoenix Flames!
Thank you so much for taking the time to review! I'm so glad you were able to understand and enjoy this story even though you haven't read my other fic.
Your feedback was so helpful. I really do appreciate it. I'm happy to hear you liked Freddy's relationship with her mother and the descriptions of Scotland. I was worried the imagery might be a bit overwhelming ;)
Again, thank you for everything! I hope you have a great week ^_^
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This was a very heart-felt story, and it definitely gives insight into Freddy's character and past. What I loved most of this was the way you bring readers to the setting and make it come alive. The descriptions weren't long-winded, but they were powerful.
It's interesting, though, that Freddy's mother isn't excited that Freddy's finally getting a job - I wonder what she wanted Freddy to do with herself, get married? work for the Ministry? do something more useful? They have a strange relationship, and you portray that well here.Author's Response: Hi Violet!
Oh, your reviews are just delightful! Thank you so much for taking the time to read this! I was so anxious to receive feedback from someone who had read "Consumed" and was familiar with Freddy. I was worried that perhaps she wouldn't translate well, being younger and less-experienced in this fic than she is as a Hogwarts professor. Well, you've definitely allayed my fears...thank you!
As far as Freddy's mother goes, I think she's just as confused and lost as her daughter is. She wants her to get a job and be independent, but she's not exactly sure what would suit her daughter. Also, I think Mrs. Fotherby thought a position at Hogwarts was a bit above Freddy, since she can barely manage her finances not to mention such a challenging career.
Again, thanks a million for the great review! It was wonderful hearing from you. I hope you have a great weekend!
celticbard Report Review
A pretty fair write my friend; and it did seem to indicate a great and fine story in the waiting to be told. Enjoyed it very much.Author's Response: Thank you so much, my dear! Your feedback is highly appreciated. I'm so glad you enjoyed this one-shot ^_^ Report Review
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