7 Reviews Found

Review #1, by HG_HP_fan Across the Sea

28th August 2010:
Sentences and conversations are choppy. Spelling needs hecked and grammar does to.

Author's Response: Yeah I know that now that I look back at it. I think I've gotten better but I don't honestly know.

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Review #2, by Timothy New York City is the Place to Be!

18th July 2009:
Again thanks for the credit.
What i liked about this chapter is the changes of point of view and there was only one part were I got confused on who was telling the story. The only thing I think you have to change is don't swich views so much. I also loved Timothy's point of view. :)

Author's Response: Thanks for the review once again. For that chapter I wanted to get in different views to show what everyone was doing, but the views won't change that much again. Promise :)

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Review #3, by Timothy Across the Sea

18th July 2009:
Hey thanks for the credit on Timothy and Katie.
I really liked the chapter and i think that it was funny that harry was actually practicing his signature. I cant wait to see what happens to harry in the American Diagon Ally.
Can't wait to read the next chapter!

Author's Response: Well there your characters have to give credit. Hey don't give too much a way mister! Thanks for the great review!

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Review #4, by Fireball Nymph New York City is the Place to Be!

1st June 2009:
I really liked it, and I'm form New York, and you got a lot of things correct. I can see a little bit of Hermione and Harry action. It was nice of Harry to get Hermione that car. Well, another great one.

Author's Response: Thanks I was trying to get it as close to the real New York City as possible, so I'm glad I got things right. It took a lot of studying because I wanted to get this correct but I have never been to NYC. Well thanks for the review I really appreciate it.

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Review #5, by Zak Across the Sea

1st June 2009:
that was fair good but you made some mistakes mate

Author's Response: Well I'm not the best speller in the world, but I tried to fix them. I guess I didn't see all of them.
Well thanks for R&R-ing!


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Review #6, by Fireball Nymph Across the Sea

30th May 2009:
I like this so far. It's a good start, and I can see that this'll be a good story. it seems really relaxed. Keep up the great work. And I love Harry!

Author's Response: It's relaxed for a while but later in the story things take a turn for the worst, but things start to get worse and worse in the sequel.

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Review #7, by Rob Across the Sea

26th May 2009:
Very different than the other story.so much info, which I like!! Nice start and look forward to reading more on both this and the other story. Proud of you for all this work.

Author's Response: Thanks! I just wish more people would review like you.

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