ahaha! Lol. Cool story. Let's go Ch.2! Report Review
Demi seems so cool and I hate to be a bastard but Im gonna point something out.The way you spell James' you sometimes spell Jame's like his name is Jame.
I hate being a bastard like that though sorry.I love this story so far.Update soon :DAuthor's Response: Thank you♥ Please dont hesitate to help me when I make any grammatical mistakes. I have bad grammar, though I have Mozilla Firefox to fix my mistakes 8D
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Haha, love this beginning! Demi sounds like a pretty cool character; I wonder what she looks like (; I laughed out loud at the, "Broken rubber," comment. It gives me a mental image of Demi's parent's humping each other now :L Your dialogue is easy and very enjoyable to read; I love that Mrs Potter insists on Sirius calling her mom.
I did notice some things though. The British obviously have a different pronunciation, so they usually call their mothers, "Mum." Last note; I noticed this once or twice, 'Jame's.' It's like James' name is actually Jame :L
Sorry for pointing out the kind of .. mistakes o.O But overall this was a good start and I'm really looking forward to the next chapter! :D
9/10 (;Author's Response: It\\\'s ok. I\\\'d actually like it if you please do keep correcting my mistakes-- how am I supposed to get better? Anywho, yeah. I based Demi off of my best friend, who I love uncontrollably.
Also, I will make sure that I use \\\'mum\\\' instead of \\\'mom\\\', because that did make sense. >_>
I probably just had a brain fart and forgot all about it 8D
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Interesting. I do hope you can update soon!!Author's Response: Thanks for reading 8D Report Review
Interesting start 4 the 1st chapter.^_^
Harry and GinnyAuthor's Response: Thank you ! I\\\'ll be updating soon. (: Report Review
Nice story. It was kida random, in a good way though! I liked the last part where she lands in a room full of boys. That part was a.k.w.a.r.d. ha ha. So, if you like mysterious, dark romance stories, I highly suggest Stranger by EnnaBellaPotter. I read it and thought it was amazing.
Good story though.Author's Response: Yeah, haha. And, I will check out that story! I will tell you if I like it(: Report Review
ooo! i like where this is going you shuld totally put up another chapter...or you know a few more chapters lol just keep writing this story!! Just don't abandon it cuz i swear all of the good ones get abandoned!! And for some reason i dnt think i spelled abandon or abandoned right!!Author's Response: I don't plan on abandoning it any time soon. Just as long as you guys keep reviewing, (: Report Review
Cute start. Demetria seems like a great character so far. Can't wait to see what happens!Author's Response: Thank you! I work hard on Demetria's image(: Report Review
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