Aw, this is the sweetest story ever! The story flow is great - not too fast, not too slow. Monica and Hugo are adorable together. It's really refreshing to see Hugo in a different light. People always write him as this annoying, underachieving brother of Rose's.
I also really, really, really, love the narrator-voice you use. It's something unique and not really seen a lot. I love it! I can't wait to see more!Author's Response: Oh! Thanks for the review! You were fast! It's great to know it's not going too slow, sometimes I do that... Like any brother, he is a bit jealous of Rose, but that will not be his main priority in life. And thanks! I saw that sort of narrator-voice in a book once, and I have been trying to do it for a while, but this time I really like it. Thanks for your kind words! Report Review
I like your prologue thus far, and the picture at the beginning is pretty neat. A little Phantom of the Opera reminder, if you ask me.
I've yet to see anyone tell the similarities between "love" and "passion," and I think your intro came out really well.
Onward bound!Author's Response: Hi there! I hope you like the rest of the story as well. And now that you said it really looks like the Phantom =P But I used the idea of the Yin-Yang symbol.
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