I love this story so far but the only thing I have to mention for this chapter is that you mention that James is a chaser. He's actually a seeker that's where Harry gets it from. Just a small detail but things that hardcore Potterheads would notice haha. :)Author's Response: Actually, in the books, James is a chaser, which is why he's one here. He's only seeker in the movies. Even if it were true, the team position is irrelevant, what Harry inherited from him was James' natural flying skills, not the position he played. Report Review
har har har irony because of course Voldemort can't die. I really love how you go deeper with the relationship between Lily and Petunia because they do really love each other, even if they quarrel a bit. I hope they remain friendly. I'm wondering...are you going to go back to cannon? Like eventually James will end up with Lily and having Harry and all that jazz? Or will it be too spolier-esque to tell me? Oh and I think it's hilarious that Lily is a Seer too because I remember Tonks asking Harry in OOTP if he had Seer blood. Also, I really like how you outline the differences between Lily/Sev and Tuney/Vernon. You'd expect most relationships to be like Tuney/Vernon, but then Petunia looks at Sev and she's like, "why can't I have that?" and I think that's what lots of people do when looking at relationships in books. Looking at how lovely that couple is in a book and then settling for something else because it doesn't seem realistic or along those lines. Anyway, loving this story so much(: Report Review
I love this, I've followed it for so long! it's so perfect down to the final detail. I'm so impressed, I loved all the pairings and write all of the characters so well. It's probably my favourite fic of all time, and I'm not big on AU. I assume you're setting up a sequel with this chapter? I'll keep my eye out for it. big well done for finishing this beauty! 3 years in the making! Report Review
Oh well wowzies Snapesyboy.
Not unexpected, but this is bound to cause some relationship issues between Sev and Lily-- secrets always do. Grr I want him to tell her. Report Review
herpdeladerp you're awesome(: Report Review
Ah I loved seeing/reading Grimmauld Place like that, all alive and from a friendly perspective.
Ok, so do you say "Orion" like "Oh-ry-an" or "Oree-on"-- so confused D:
haha like I said before, I love seeing this whole shabang from the other perspective. You might get some more word salad as a comment for the next chapter, so be warned (:Author's Response: I believe it's pronounced the first way, it's a Greek name for the constellation of the hunter in the sky.
Glad you're enjoying this so much! Report Review
hahahaha obviously things go wrong. Helllo, the "Iron Masks" meeting is bound to screw SOMETHING up (golly gee I can't get over that name haha)
I just still hope it won't end with Sev+Lils splitting up. Hope against hope.
And eh, I kind of agree with the solution, but I mean, dramatic irony-- I know something the characters don't. Dun dun dun.
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first off, LOL THE IRON MASKS HAHAHA
and then, OMG no Regalus D:
and then, GAH URGH Tobias ):<
sorry for all my uppercase-lettered word salad, I really am enjoying your story. That's nothing new, though(: Report Review
NO THE OLD LADY IS GOING TO DIE D: SORRY THIS IN CAPS I'M JUST REALLY EXCITED! Report Review
YOU ARE KILLING ME AND WE HAVEN'T EVEN ENTERED THE ANGST YET!
and haha I don't think I know the song Report Review
WARNING WARNING WARNING
GAH ANGST D: Report Review
AH AH AH AH AH GAH I LOVE IT
but I also worry, because this story has 85 chapters, and this is only chapter 5.so there's got to be some angst coming and I dunno if I'm prepared for that D:
by the way, I loved your spin-off of "Snape's Worst Memory" though I thought you might've had it follow what happened in the original book and just have it all be set up by Severus and Lily and then they'd date in secret, but I liked what you did better. Especially because one of the whole points of Lily dating Severus is that she's not afraid to be seen with him---which is so awesome. Again...I'm very, very worried that some conflict is bound to come up.
and the only reason I rated this a 9/10 and not a 10/10 is because I always believe there is room for improvement, even if I have yet to see any in this story.
And uh hello thanks for being an awesome writer(: Report Review
For the time being, there're some things I'm unclear: (since the story was so long) how many Horcruxes did V have and how did our heroes kill them? Or was he relying more on The Machine to beat opposing forces? And if Narccisa is a willing DE in this universe, who would be raising little Draco? His Black cousins perhaps?
I'm almost sad to see this wonderful epic come to an end; then again I'd be even sadder if it somehow got abandoned. ;) I read the chapters on FF first since it's got the alert system, and I realize that here you've refrained from mentioning the fact that this fic has in its own way become a Tree-Killer. Does this exceed Lord of the Rings in content as well, I wonder? That is really something to be proud of, a "Labor of Love" indeed.
Another reason I'm glad that you've successfully wrapped this up is that I really would like to see the beginning of a next installation to the Broken Wings universe. Even a teaser prologue of sorts would be great right now. I have long since been obssessed with your Thea OFC, even though she only ever existed in Severus' flashbacks. Personally I've always viewed that AU as among your best (if not The Best) because it's mainly emotion- and character-driven as opposed to simply plot-driven like the others. I really admire that since the characters are ultimately the readers' to digest, than resonance and empathy would really, really matter.Author's Response: Here, Voldemort was trying out ways to become immortal. He made two Horcruxes and both were destroyed, then he turned to the machine as a last resort.
I'm not sure if it's got LOTR beat as far as length goes, I think so, because Gone With the Wind is so long and the person who told me that swears this is even longer, but it's all to do with formatting,
Draco is, or will be, not so bad in this Au. I don;t mention it here, wanting to save something for another story, but Narcissa did some time and then was pardoned, so she is trying to become a better person and thus can now raise Draco. Before Dromeda had him. So he's at Grace's party playing.
As for the third BW story, I have several plotlines that I have to cross before I even attempt that, I had something in mind once, but discovered that it won;t work and need to have something else happen before I even start that. Plus, I go back to work now and would hate to have started something I have no time to work on yet. UnVeiled is a good character story, even though the original parts weren't mine at first and I'm almost finished with that one . . . barring 20 more chapters. Same with Common Interests, which will probably be a little longer. Lily's Defender is written with another author, so I don't know when that will be done, but I would like UnVeiled completed before i start anything else.
Thanks so much for reading! Report Review
thank you for putting this story to rest - by far it was the most complexly built AU storyline you've written (for me at least, since i prefer this over your Prince Manor stories).
i've read every one of your fictions over and over again and have you bookmarked on my ipod, checking daily for updates.
not really vocal but when i like something i tell the person responsible for it - you did a great job,
looking forward to reading Unveiled and Lily's Defender (Common Interests not so much though, sorry it bored me). Report Review
So in love with this story, thank you. Will continue to reread it Report Review
This has been such a great story, thank you for sharing it with us. Report Review
Wait...this story can end? Are you sure? I don't think I'm quite ready to live without it! It's been such a constant in my life and, believe, me I need stuff that sticks around for awhile. I've said it before, and I'll keep saying it; you've done a really masterful job here. Your attention to detail and character development is marvelous. I always have the tendency to rush character development and rush though parts of the story to get to the things I REALLY want to write, but I didn't get that at all here. It seemed like each and every moment had been cared for and concentrated fully on. You let your characters speak, breathe, grow, and live like real people and that's amazing. This story is tremendous, truly and honestly it is. I'm sad to see it go, but I'm excited to see how it wraps up. Also, I think Art is my favorite character...just so you know. :) 10/10Author's Response: Aww, thanks! Some people in the beginning didn't think I should put him in there, but I had my reasons for doing so. It took me a long time to finish but now I'm done and have posted the last chapter. Please read it and tell me what you think! Report Review
So glad they caught wormtail. Cant wait to see how they get the kids rescued from their prison.Author's Response: Thanks! Just posted the last two chapters! Report Review
Another wonderful chapter, thank you! And I am so happy that you are now posting more frequently. (: Can't wait for the next chapter, should be interesting.. Report Review
It was a good chapter :) loving the story. I think sirius and annie should have a girl, and lily and sev a boy. It would put the pressure on reg to have a boy too, in order to please Voldemort, so if he had a girl... :) Report Review
going great! keep up the good job and I fervently hope that ppl will start recognizing your name as the girl who wrote a whole book to display her affection of the harry potter series. keep up the good work! Report Review
three words: so bloody good! Report Review
Sirius youre a hell of a man so best ye defend yer self or thou art a dead man P.S. Can I have the recipe for the black and white pudding?Author's Response: Hmm, have to look that one up, though I think it's chocolate and vanilla pudding in layers with an Oreo bottom crust and whipped cream on top. Report Review
Um Im a guy so normally I wouldn't answer a question about Severus' kissing abilities but this once I shall so a ten from me. See ya. *Grins and winks* Report Review
To your cousin I wish her a peaceful eternal sleep and may she rest in peace. Report Review
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