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Review #1, by Ariel White Rose Wilting

19th August 2009:
"Rowena, who had been surveying the discussion shrewdly"?Idk, I like to think of the founders as nothing alike. Sals the shrewd one

Author's Response: Of course the Founders are different, but someone can made a shrewd comment without being devious. Shrewd is also a synonym for "wise", if you'd like to check a thesaurus.

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Review #2, by inkscribble White Rose Wilting

28th May 2009:
Wow. I'm speechless. This was purely amazing. I was on the edge of my seat the whole time, waiting to see what would happen next. Your writing is beautiful. Everything just fit so well together, and you have me bealiving that this is exactly what happened. Although I can't remember whether the other Founders actually knew that Slytherin had built a Chamber, but still. this was absolutley amazing.

Author's Response: ...oops...I totally posted this to a reviewer before, because I didn't read the name closely enough. I'm a dumb dumb. This is what I meant to say:

I just read all of your reviews before I started responding, and I could never get sick of them! Seriously, I've been losing my motivation to write lately, but getting all of these makes me want to get my rear in gear! I'm really glad that you're enjoying my stories :)

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Review #3, by xx_LucyC_xx White Rose Wilting

1st May 2009:
wow ur discriptions are absolutly amazing !

a really great story, cant wait to read more

Author's Response: Thank you so much but this is only a one-shot. You can always check out my other stories if you feel the inclination ;)

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Review #4, by chocolate rain White Rose Wilting

17th April 2009:
Hey, lovely one-shot, very nicely sort of flows, but does get very fast at the end, which was a bi unbalancing compared to the rest, but nevertheless very nice! I liked the names you used too - Gavina "white hawk" and de renard "fox" . Clever.

A different take on the Slytherin story too. :) great!

Chocolate rain

Author's Response: I tend to have that problem of rushing near the end. I've really been working on it, but I'm glad that you still enjoyed it. Thank you for your review! :)

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Review #5, by Mrs Roonil Waslib White Rose Wilting

1st March 2009:
First off, I need to apologize to you for having to wait this long. It is absolutely irresponsible for me to offer to give reviews and then have you wait two weeks to give one. I am so sorry. Please do not stray from posting in my review thread for more reviews; this will not happen again.

With that said, I thought this was very interesting. It told about the Chamber of Secrets and why you can't apparate on the Hogwarts grounds.

Regarding your concerns, I don't think it was too rushed at the end. And your summary isn't terrible; I've read a lot worse, trust me. ^_^ One tip if you want the dialogue to sound a little more traditional: Don't use apostrophes. Instead of saying 'It's' say 'It is'. I find it really amazing how much that can change the dialogue, but it really does.

I love insight on eras or ships that have not been explored as much; your fic gave that insight. It was so interesting to, instead of delving into the future, go back in the past. Well done! 10/10

-Mrs Roonil Waslib

Author's Response: I apologize, too, for taking so long to respond! Thank you for a fantastic review; I'll be sure to pop by your thread again this summer when I hopefully start writing again.

Hmm, I tried to stay away from apostrophes, but I'll watch them more carefully next time.

Yeah, it was interesting to do that. I tend to stay away from Founders because they're so far back, but it was nice to explore the roots of Hogwarts, y'know? Thank you again for your fantastic review! I really appreciate the time you took :)

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Review #6, by long_live_luna_bellatrix White Rose Wilting

25th February 2009:
This was really, really good. The plot was incredible for a simple one shot, and I really liked it. It was a great explanation for the chamber! I've read a little Founders, but none of them have ever mentioned a spouse for a Founder other than another founder. Gavina was really nice to read.

For your concerns on the rushing at the end, I'm no master, but I thouht it was fine. The pace that was set begged yo uto read fast, and you were on the edge of your seat, and it was fantastic. I'm also no master on the dialogue of the Founders, but it was certainly believeable, if not 100% accurate. It was definitely not distracting from the story.

As for your summary, when you asked for help, were you referring to the one you posted on my thread or the one on the story now? If I'm guessing right, I'd assume you got help since you posted (sorry for taking so long to reply, by the way), and if that's so, the summary on the story now is great. It really drags you in. The only problem with the summary on my thread is that it was a little curt, and a little short.

Nice work! It was an incredibly written story, and a great read!!!


Author's Response: This was definitely the most complicated plot I've attempted in a one shot, and I'm really glad that you didn't find it too overwhelming. I just had this wonderful idea, but I don't have enough time to totally flesh it out into a novel or even short story, so I thought I would try to make it a one shot.

I did get help with the summary. It's always one of my weakness, because I just want to pull the old "JUST READ IT"...but I can't. ;)

Thank you so much for your wonderful review! :)

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Review #7, by confusedlover White Rose Wilting

15th February 2009:
very lovely.

i thought that the dialogue throughout this story was written incredibly well for the time period. they way they spoke to each other was so simplistic, yet entirely complex and the same time and that is how people took to speaking a hundreds of years ago. i think that you did a lovely job with tackling that obstacle and would not change how any of your dialogue was written throughout this read.

i did think that things sped up a bit at the end. i liked the pace throughout the entire story; it was one that really collected readers and led them on, but then at the end things sort of went faster and even though you did not lose me, i was not a drawn in as i was throughout the rest of the story.

overall, i thought that you did a wonderful job with this story. everything seemed to be written so well and i find that you did a beautiful job with everything. nice work.

Author's Response: Thank you! I really am I dialogue person, so that's what I was most concerned about it. Thank you so much!

Urgh. I tend to do that. At least it's good to know that I'm starting to improve. I'll continue to work on it, though.

Thank you so much!! :)

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Review #8, by FriendofMolly White Rose Wilting

14th February 2009:
Oh my. The leaving of Slytherin, was always a question. This was an answer that made sense. Poor Godric, but even more sympathy to Lady Gavina. To have seen the birth of the Chamber, but not able to give it's location. Now we also know when the first anti-apparition spell was cast at Hogwarts. Did the other Founders ever meet again with the evil Snake? This was an very good One-Shot.

Author's Response: This is my second idea of what could have happened. If you're interested, I have three interwoven one-shots that deal with the leaving of Slytherin. ("Beacon", "Remembrance", and "Flickering") They are from Hufflepuff, Ravenclaw, and Slytherin's points of view. I'm hoping to get Gryffindor's eventually. For this story's sake, they never saw him again. Godric would have killed him if he had returned. Even though he never intended Gavina's death, it was better that he didn't come back.

Thank you so much for your kind review! :)

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