Melian, just try and mimic JK Rowling's style some more and you got it! Please continue writing

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This was an amazing story, and I've read it every free second, not being able to put down "the book" so to speak... I believe you're a bit hard on yourself sometimes, saying you're not happy with a chapter and so on, they are all brilliant! I was a bit sad Laura died but like you said it's better than that they break up. Thanks for 62 awesome chapters!

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Make it more suspenseful! Mary's death was sadder than I thought...

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Wow... I've been reading this for a couple of weeks, every spare moment I'd read a bit more :) I feel like I should go back and review each chapter that's how good it was but I'm kinda lazy so I'll just do a big review :P I love how the characters develop through the story, and that it goes over a period of 3 years from Laura being an unknown random person to being Sirius' girlfriend and friends with all the girls in her dorm. I couldn't believe it when you killed Mary off, when I read that chapter I was just sat there, stunned for a good couple of minutes! :O That's another thing, I know there were some cliche/predictable things like the anonymous gift from Sirius but there were a ton of 'I did not see that coming' moments too! I thought that it was very true to canon and I loved well researched it was- I had to look up the event about Bertram Aubrey on the wiki :) I know you put at the end that a load of people were like 'don't kill Laura off' but I didn't see that coming either! I've really enjoyed this story and thanks for finishing it, I think it's the first whole story I've read on here! I think I'm going to have to go and read The process of becoming tamed now ! :P

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Melian, has someone hacked in and edited? Because half the words are spelled wrong and the other half have been replaced with strange words (chgarden shed?)

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I WAS LITERALLY SO CONFUSED THIS ENTIRE CHAPTER UNTIL I FIGURED THIS OUT:
every "ass" was replaced with "eyebrow".
every "girl" was replaced with "bunny rabbit".
every "boy" was replaced with "frog".
every "wand" was replaced with "banana".
JSYK.
good chapter though.

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Had to read through the reviews to figure out why but. April Fools really confused me! There were a lot of bunny rabbits, frogs, eyebrows, and garden sheds in this chapter. Lol
Otherwise, I loved it!

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This is such a great fanfiction! :). I especially like how long it is, and how you made the relationship so deep. I think it's really sad that Laura died. I kind of wish that didn't happen, but it made the ending of this story that much stronger!

Author's Response: Thank you! And yes, it's sad that she died but really I didn't have much choice if I wanted to keep things canon. And, as you said, it made the ending that much stronger. :)

cheers, Mel

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James Potter is a Seeker in the real books

Author's Response: I hate to break it to you but it was only the movies that had James as a Seeker: JKR has most definitely confirmed he was a Chaser. I'm not allowed to do links here but if you Google "James Potter Chaser" you'll find the quote quickly enough. Thanks for the comment though.

cheers, Mel

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Oh. My. God. Laura's mom is like Remus! WAY too observant... She's my favorite character though.

Author's Response: Yes, she is observant, but that's what mums do, isn't it? I was quite proud of that little scene, actually. :)

thanks, Mel

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a fanfic has never made me so emotional like this before.and I've read a lot of fan fics

Author's Response: Thank you so much! It's so lovely to hear that you've hit an emotional chord with people. I'm really flattered. :)

cheers, Mel

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*Giggle, giggle* I TOTALLY get the whole wet dog smell thing, and I absolutely love all your foreshadowing!! Amazing chapter as always.

Author's Response: Thank you! I had a lot of fun with that, especially Laura's confusion as to why on earth she might be smelling wet dog. So enjoyable to torture the girl like that! Hahaha. Really pleased you appreciate it too.

cheers, Mel

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James is seeker, not chaser!

Author's Response: Hi! Thanks for the review!

I hate to break it to you but it was only the movies that had James as a Seeker: JKR has most definitely confirmed he was a Chaser. I'm not allowed to do links here but if you Google "James Potter Chaser" you'll find the quote quickly enough.

cheers, Mel

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It's funny. My uncle made a comment like that about his daughter once, about damaged goods.
On the night before her and her husband got married her father pulled him aside and said, "I hope you are serious about this marriage. I will be less than thrilled if she comes back as damaged goods."
Sad thing was he wasn't kidding.
Guess not only pure-blood wizard families get to act like the scum of the earth.
Good chapter though.

Ps.
I love Laura, but how thick can you get?!

Author's Response: Oh dear. I was deliberately exaggerating things: I hadn't realised that people still talked like that in this day and age. It's really a very Victorian way of looking at it, isn't it? Sigh. Oh well.

As for Laura, well, yes, I know. There are none so blind as those who will not see. But it's all part of the fun, isn't it?

cheers, Mel

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Wow. This is such an incredibly beautiful story, I have cried and cried. Not literally, just inside my head, because I wanted to keep on reading, but I've laughed, and cheered and just generally been very weird. I don't mean your story is weird... Shut up, brain.
Laura is such a brilliant and addictive character. It's been a pleasure reading this 62 chapters about her and I love how you've so cleverly meshed Potterverse (and obviously done a lot of research) and raw, original stuff. Perfect. One of the best characters ever.
Sirius, also, is brilliant. We see so many sides to him- the who-the-hell-are-you side at the beginning, the oh-you're-funny side in the middle, the cold, aloof side, and the I-love- you side. I loved him throughout. Oh, especially the Snuffles bit! That was hilarious.
James, Lily, Remus, Pete (the rat!!), Mary, Charlotte, Martha and Elvira were amazing. They evolved throughout, especially J&L. Also, did Remus and Charlotte ever get together? Bertram, was really good, too. He got what he deserved, the monster. See, I'm watching my language!
You are obviously a brilliant writer, Mel. I think you should try writing your own stuff and I bet it will be as brilliant and creative as this. I've said brilliant a lot in this review, but it really, really is true.
Finally, the ending. Heartbreakingly sad but probably the true ending. Obviously we all wanted to see the move in, get married and have children but it just wasn't to be. I sob to think of it.
But this story is fantastic. I'm prepared to say I like it as much as Harry Potter itself, possibly even more.

Author's Response: You know what? This revivew came through on my birthday, and you really made my day. (Not that it wasn't a good day to start with, but you know what I mean.) What a lovely review! I'm so flattered. *beams*

It's just wonderful that you got so much out of my story. I put a lot of work into it (thanks for recognising the research, by the way) so to have feedback like this is simply amazing - and really gratifying. I worked really hard on characterisations, too, so it's great that you appreciated those as well.

As for writing my own stuff, well I'm doing 2 original fiction novels at the moment, one in the editing stage and one still being written. So with any luck they'll be out at some stage. :) I'm not sure that I'm as good as you seem to think, but it's really encouraging that you do think that because, frankly, without people like you I would probably never have even attempted it. :)

Thanks again for a simply lovely birthday present.

cheers, Mel

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I know you wanted more dialogue, but honestly the lack of it adds to the awkwardness and tension growing inside of Laura and Sirius. It wasn't intentional on your part, but I believe it works amazingly.
You have a great story, I love it so far.

Author's Response: Why thank you! I've had feedback like this on this chapter before, so maybe I'm being a little misguided in my desire for more dialogue. I'm really pleased that the unspoken stuff came through as well as it seems to have, too, because it means I did something right. Thanks!

cheers, Mel

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hey!
i love your story! it's just amazing and wonderfully written. and thank god it's so long, so i can keep reading it for a while. i think your writing style is super professional! and i love the way you stick to the details from the book!

xoxo

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I put a lot of work into this story so it's really gratifying that people like you are enjoying it so much - means I'm not wasting my time with this writing malarkey. :) I hope you keep reading and enjoy it all the way through.

thanks again, Mel

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JAMES IS A SEEKER, NOT A CHASER! it says so in the books; please fix that :)

Author's Response: Hi! Thanks for the review!

I hate to break it to you but it was only the movies that had James as a Seeker: JKR has most definitely confirmed he was a Chaser. I'm not allowed to do links here but if you Google "James Potter Chaser" you'll find the quote quickly enough.

cheers, Mel

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okay im just gonna let you know, i've read many fanfics over the years but this is my favorite one i love it so so much

Author's Response: Why, thank you! What a lovely thing to say. :) I'm so pleased you liked my story so much.

cheers, Mel

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Hello, now I'm just going to say that I have a bit of a trouble over here... You see I'm searching for a new fanfiction to start reading and here I was stumbling across yours. At first I can tell you that I didn't want to start reading it because of me being way to picky, but then after this second chapter I'm starting to believe that I really should give this fanfic a chance... AND then I saw that your name was Mel, which mine is too, so I thought, hell this must be destiny and now I'm so going to contuine this story. Sorry for my rambling and this really full-of-nonsens-comment but you know... I had to get it out of my chest.. :)

Author's Response: Ah, destiny. Yes you should defiintely keep reading, if for no other reason than we share a name! Hahaha. Or maybe I just like people reading my stories. Anyway, I'm super picky as well so don't worry about that, and if my fic doesn't meet your standards then I'm fine with that. If it does, though, then that's extra flattering. See how you go and let me know. :)

cheers, Mel

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I love this story. Melian, please write more for us fans!

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm in the process of writing a story about Neville's seventh year so you can have a look at that if you like; other than that I've been working on some original fiction. Thanks for the review!

cheers, Mel

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wonderful chapter, better than some of J.K. Rowlings!

Author's Response: Really? What an amazing compliment. Thank you so much!! :)

cheers, Mel

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I love this story. I must have read it a hundred times. Thank you for writing such a wonderful and compelling story (even if it makes me cry at the end.)

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm really flattered that you've read it so many times because that's a huge compliment to me as a writer and as a storyteller. Thanks again. :)

cheers, Mel

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I remember the first time i read this chapter, i was in love with it, but I forgot to leave a review. Sorry about that, by the way. I didn't want to leave this in the next chapter because it truly killed me, but I'm just going to say that it was a pleasure reading this story for so long, and the way you finished it was beautiful. Personally, I'm a sucker for happy endings, so I was ecstatic when I read the last chapter of The Process of Becoming Tamed, and I thank you for writing that. By this point, I'm quite fond of Laura and she's one of those characters that you never forget :) So I will probably continue to come back and reread some of my favorite chapters. Thank you for writing this story, I absolutely adored it. :D

Author's Response: Hey, no problem! We all have real lives and if you didn't get around to leaving a review the first time, that's totally okay. :) Thank you for leaving one now, though. Like you I'm a sucker for happy endings, and if this story wasn't fanfiction then it would have ended with this chapter, but I really felt I needed to explain why Laura's not in any of the books,hence the epilogue. However, that final chapter of PBT was a salve for people like us who just wanted the happily-ever-after. I'm so pleased you liked that. :)

Thanks again, Mel

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This fan fiction is so much better than the others. Author, please write about Harry's time period; I'd love that!

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm so pleased you're enjoying it. And I have just started a novel set in Harry's era, specificallly telling the story of Neville's seventh year. If you want to have a look at it, it's called Year of the Snake. Thanks for the feedback!

cheers, Mel

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