Reading Reviews for Fading Amaranth
  
4 Reviews Found

Review #1, by dianap00 Fallen Stars

25th April 2009:
Oh, my. I like that it sounds like Hermione. She is thoughtful and pensive and not at all harsh. She's clever and simple. It feels like Hermione. I love it and I do hope you continue it. There is an impression - garnered from those suggestive last two sentences - of intimacy. Not in a gamy way, necessarily, but it seems as though she may be partial towards Malfoy, if a bit resentful for such a partiality, if you understand my words. I love it as a tale of sorts but would adore it as a short story (or more). You've established them very well.
Cheers.

 Report Review

Review #2, by WeasleyTwins Fallen Stars

24th February 2009:
Hey, hey, Shelby here to review :] Sorry for the delay.

I'd like to say how absolutely, utterly, and astoundingly beautiful this piece is! Your way with words is amazing beyond anything I can say to describe them so. I loved the tense that you used. It gave the story depth to it. The characterization, my goodness, what to say? When it comes to pieces like this, I am at a loss for words. I sympathized with Hermione. Time flies by so quickly, before you know it, you're 40 and life has been blurred before you eyes. The subtle description of Hermione's physical attributes was astounding! Such honesty, rarely seen in fanfiction, was refreshing. The shortness of the piece gave the story a lighter feeling. If you had written more, the story would have been bogged down by too many details. I believe that you should leave this as a one-shot. To be honest, I don't want to know anymore, I want it be able to recollect on what you've given me and use my imagination. Perhaps it's the beauty of the story that makes me wary of reading more of what you might write. Not that it won't be good, but that this is excellent now.

Phenomenal, 10/10

Shelby

Author's Response: Oh, Shelby. *blushes* You're too kind to me, really, you are. I cannot possibly tell you how happy your review has made me feel - I'm just basking in the praise right now. I suppose I used present tense because I often feel I can connect with the characters more intimately on that level, rather than the visceral and visual impact of past tense. And yes, I'm often surprised by how little people choose to write characters well into their forties, or nearing that age. A one-shot? Well, one for that. :P I've gotten one unsure vote (either way), and yours. So for the moment I was thinking I might be writing a short short story, but really nothing more. But you make a very good point - I'm not sure if I want to know more either, because what could come from it? Only more dissatisfaction (on Hermione's part).

But thank you so much, Shelby. Really, you are far too kind to me. ILY.

XOXO
Kalina


 Report Review

Review #3, by Phoenix_Flames Fallen Stars

21st February 2009:
Hello, there!! I'm here with your review!

Wow. So this was extremely fantastic. It was truly beautiful. Honestly.

I have nothing to do but praise you. Everything was perfect. Flawless.

Your wonderful characterizations, descriptions, emotions, grammar, writing style its self. You have talent, dear. You do.

Since I cannot do anything but ramble about your amazingness, I shall have to end this review. :p

Great, great, great, perfect job!

10/10

Author's Response: Drue! Hey! Wow, so you liked it, huh? I'm so glad you did! Thank you so much!

 Report Review

Review #4, by GubraithianFire Fallen Stars

15th February 2009:
Dammit, Kali, you're supposed to tell me when you have new stories! Thankfully I discovered this on my own yesterday afternoon and am now reviewing. So, you know, here goes:

I can't really answer your question, about whether this should be a one-shot or WIP. It would, it could, work really well on its own, but it could do equally well as a short story. It is tantalizing enough to be a one-shot but vague enough to expand - and that's what I like best about this. Judging, however, by the summary, I'd have to say that this would be best to make it a SHORT short story, three-five chapters at most. This does not feel like a full-fledged Dramione, and that's what I'm most grateful for. Your characterization of Hermione is astounding, I think - it's common enough to see a Hermione who is tired of her perfect, monotonous life, but yours is actually afraid of her life, of it continuing. Very original in that respect. Her fear of time also struck a chord in me personally, because I'm terrified of growing up and everything, as well, so I know you put that fear and that resignation in words better than almost anyone I know.

You know what this reminds me of, now that I think about it? Stephanie's Evading Lightning, which is the one of the best, if not the best, Scorose short story I've ever seen. The one moment that changes everything in these people's lives. So I think this would work splendidly along the same lines, but obviously different because you're you. The way I see this story and you, Kali, as an author is that you take things we all know and make them very much your own, with a melancholy tinge. This is definitely melancholy.

Oh, and I love the title. The juxtaposition of the images - genius. If this is a one-shot, I'm so glad to have read it. If not, I am truly curious to see where you take this story. ^_^

Author's Response: Gubby! Oh my God, you've not the faintest idea how absolutely ... magenta I'm turning right now (yes, I skipped straight past vermillion and into a whole new spectrum of blushing :P) Thank you so so much for the amazing review!

Ah, I posted over at HPFF! Sorry for not telling you! *feels abashed*

Yes, the summary does lead it into the short short story direction, but as this was such a minutely short chapter, I think it'll be around three-five chapters not including this prologue of sorts. Mayhap I'll even write it in first person (OMFG!)

And thank you for your compliments on Hermione's character! I was trying to pull her away from the norm (simply tired of her relationship with Ron and looking for a bit of fun) ... well, she's not tired. She loves Ron very much, but she's so afraid that time has made her despicable to him and everyone else that she's making choices that even she doesn't fully understand. :P

Wow! Compared to Stephanie? I am now in nirvana. Seriously. I could never measure up to Evading Lightning - that was such a stroke of genius that I fear I will be in its shadow forever. Aw, thank you!

Honestly, you have no idea how happy this review has made me. ILY Gubby. Thank you so, so much for your amazing input.

XOXO
Kalina


 Report Review
If this is your story and you wish to respond to reviews, please login