that's a little funny and interesting at the same time Report Review
this part is confusing to be honest and you misspelled a work it should be our badges, not are badges Report Review
the story line is interesting, but you should not have added Dumbledore into the story line. Report Review
Just gotta say, I love that bachelor list. Awsome!Author's Response: haha
thank you i'm glad you liked it!
Also thank you for reviewing :D Report Review
This is a cute story, my only concern is the amount of grammar mistakes. Other than that, I like it quite a bit. Keep it coming :) Report Review
can't wait for more!! Report Review
love it heaps=)) make more action=)) that thrills the reader=)))
asap=)Author's Response: ok, I will thanx. :D Report Review
awsome i loved thi chapter:)) hope you update soon:) Report Review
Hey!! Thanks for updating!
Your use of speechmarks has greatly improved!! There's the odd one now and again, but most of them are right! :)
This looks like it's going to be a pretty good story.
However, one thing I will mention is that at Hogwarts they don't have maths, they have arithmancy. But then again, they might have maths as well and J K Rowling just never mentioned it! You never know, it's possible!!
Anyway, keep writing please!!
I'll look forward to your next update!!Author's Response: Thank you, and I'm working on the speech. So I'll change it to arithmancy. I wasn't even thinking about that. But Thanxx and I'm glad you like the story. =) Report Review
please please please please please please please please please please continue this!!!
I can't understand why no-one else has reviewed! I think this is going to be a really good story!!!
However, my only criticism would be your use of speech marks. For example; when you put:
"thanks, hermione smiled, i'm going to miss you guys so much."
It should have been: "thanks", hermione smiled, "i'm going to miss you guys so much."
once or twice is fine, as we all make mistakes, however you seemed to do this all the time!!
But other than that it looks like it's going to be great!! So please continue with it!! Report Review
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