This was good!
I like the idea of Petunia being a witch too =)
The only thing is, is that they seemed to believe Dumbledore a bit too quickly.
I mean, imagine if two people randomly came knocking on your door telling you that your two daughters were witches =)
You wouldn't just believe them like that *clicks fingers really quickly*
You could maybe edit it or something and make the conversation longer, if you ever have time, as this would make it much more realistic and believable =)
It was really good though =)
9/10 =DAuthor's Response: I was thinking that but im my eagerness to get the story started i just wanted that chapter over and done, I'll go back and edit it once the story is well and truely under way! Report Review
That was cool, I hope you keep writing this. Petunia is a witch in one of my stories (yet to be written or posted) but Lily doesn't know, Petunia goes to Beauxbatons ect. So I really like the idea.Author's Response: sounds great let me know when its up! Thanks for the review! Report Review
Good start - not so hot on what its about. I trust you enough to change my mind I'm sure :)
I like the way you used bits from the book and I love how continental your disclaimer was lolAuthor's Response: Thanks...and thanks for trusting me too! Things will clear up soon hopefully...and i needed to use the book to get my mind going...and as for the discalimer...thanks. Report Review
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cute story idea btw :)Author's Response: Thanks...I shall. Report Review
I love AU stories (especially AU Marauder stories) so when I saw this, I couldn't keep from clicking on it.
I have to say, I really enjoyed this. At times, the dialogue and description seemed a little rushed (along with the Evans' acceptance; I feel like it probably should have taken them a little longer, and possibly a call to the police before they believed Dumbledore,) but sometimes those things are in prologues.
There were only a few grammatical or foremating errors, and nothing that was particularly distracting from the writing.
Anyways, I'm very much looking forward to an update; this is going to be interesting. :DAuthor's Response: Thank you so much! well I know, I felt that too, but I wasn't sure how to get the ball rolling as it were...thats possibly the first time anyone has said that my english language wasn't that bad...im happy now...and an update is on the way, thanks again! Report Review
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