This is fauxthefox from the forums with your requested review! I'm so glad you requested a review for this! I absolutely loved it.

"Summer was a time when she could sit outside barefoot and draw to her heart’s content." I loved this entire passage. The way you write about Victoire's feelings gives her depth and reality.

Oh so cute :) I guess you could add a bit more description here and there. Some of the dialogue is a bit awkwardly punctuated, too (sometimes you use commas when you should probably just start a new sentence). Other than that, I don't really have any suggestions - unless you want to add in something about Teddy/Victoire's past? Like, how their relationship came to be.

Feel free to request again if you come out with another next-gen or marauders era story!

Faux

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing for me! I loved reading this. It really made me smile. :]

Thank you for all of your compliments. I'll definitely check out the punctuation (I have that habit--using too many commas.) and I'll look into possibly adding some more descriptions.

I'm really glad that you liked this story. Thank you so, so much! It means a lot to me.

--Emily

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Hey, this is lbell from the forums with your long due review. I kinda forgot about my review thread. :)

This is an ADORABLE story! i love all the little gestures that proves that they're completely in love, and i love the descriptions of shell cottage! they're wonderful!

I think that the fluff is a tiny tiny bit over done however. Like "he wrapped his arms around his girlfriend" could just be "he wrapped his arms around her." And the "i don't deserve you" bit is overkill. One more thing. I don't think a 18+19 year old couple could go through a adorably romantic afternoon like this one without at least one makeout session, but if you didn't want to right that, its cool. it just seemed a bit in complete.

Overall, great job! Just work on the extreme romantic cliches and your golden :)

-louise/deanluvr/lbell

Author's Response: Thanks so much for your review! :D

I'm glad you liked it, and I'll go check out the things you mentioned I might want to change. :]

I appreciate that you took your time to do this, thank you! :D

--DF11

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No, no, this was great! The thing about fluff is it's sort of pointless, but if you write it just right. . . It's perfect. This was written beautifully, and I loved it! Victoire and Teddy's love was obviously very strong, and it showed. Nice work!

The only mistake was that Teddy conjoured a picnic basket, when it's impossible to make food out of thin air. Otherwise, amazing!

~long_live_luna_bellatrix

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing!

I'm glad that you liked the story. It was written for a challenge so I wasn't sure how well I did.

Thank you so much for your feedback, I'll definitely fix that thing about the picnic basket. :o

Thanks again, I really appreciate it.

--DracoFerret11

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I definitely don't think this is pointless. I thought it was very cute and very sweet. I enjoyed it. By the way before I forget your banner was amazing for this. Props to whoever made it! The plot, didn't have much to it. It was simple but yet refreshing at the same time. I enjoyed reading this thoroughly. You write very nice!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review!

I'm glad that you liked the story, it was a lot of fun to write.

It was written for a challenge, so I was worried I may have done poorly since I've never written for either character.

Thanks so much for the comment about the banner! I love it as well. :]

Again, thanks for all your compliments and I'm glad you liked the story.

--DracoFerret11

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sweet, not pointless. It didn't have an exact plot but it did have lots of romance and I love romance. I was in the need for a good, fluffly, romantic one shot. This was it. :)
Your descriptions and thoughts are well written. I loved every second of it. Teddy seems like the perfect boyfriend... :D

Author's Response: :D Thanks so much for reviewing.

I'm so glad that you liked it. :]

I'm also happy that you don't think it was completely pointless.

Thanks again, I really appreciate your feedback.

--DF11

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i liked it... it was verry fluffy but i thought it was nice... you didnt keep it going too long so it wasnt boring... i really like that idea!

Author's Response: Thanks so much for reviewing!

I'm glad that you liked the story.

I really appreciate your feedback.

Thanks again!

--DF11

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