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Review #1, by krazyboutharryginny Something Great / A Waitress

29th December 2009:
Hello there!
I'm just leaving this review to tell you that I love this story, but I'm pretty sure Lily wasn't an Auror. According to J.K. Rowling, both L and and James were full-time Order Of The Pheonix members and had no other jobs.
This may be false, but I'm pretty sure about it. :)
love this story tho!

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Review #2, by krazyboutharryginny Jennie Fletcher / Margaret Court

7th April 2009:
I'm kinda confused.. did she literally die? Or, like, emotionally?

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for reviewing!

I'm sorry you were confused, but yes, Lily died. The whole idea was that she could have chosen so many other things to do when she grew up, but she decided to become an Auror to fight against Voldemort, ultimately dying in the process.

I hope this clears up everything for you, and please do check out my other stories!

Again, thanks for reviewing :)

- Nisha


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Review #3, by ParadoxTremors Something Great / A Waitress

5th February 2009:
How many typos did you catch? Not sure if it's a typos, but something in this sentence didn not seem right in the second paragraph - "As the laughter died away, he would to speak again ." Did you mean to have another word such as "try" between "he" and "speak?" Other than that, I just lost myself to the story and enjoyed it.

Was Lily a Mary-Sue? Not sure what you mean by a "Mary-Sue." If you mean, like a million other characters in other stories or not flesh out enough, I would have to say "no." She seemed to be a very complex character with goals and desires like many of us do in real life.

Was anyone else a Mary-Sue? No.

What was your favorite part? The general idea of the story and the confusion she has at a young age. Finding it difficult to understand why her parents frowned on her wanting to be a waitress. It gives the idea they (her parents) looked down on certain professions while she sees the good and the importance in everything

What was your least favorite part? Not sure why you kept repeating "became an Auror and die." That part brought me down. Why read if she ends up dead anyway.

Wil you continue to read this? Yes, I think you have great ideas and stories to share. A little rough around the edges like me, but once "refined and polished" you will be an outstanding and sought after author. Keep writing because practice makes you better and better.

Is there anything more you would like to add? I hate question and answer reviews to be honest, but I can understand them. I try to be honest and tactful in my reviews, always.

I hope I manage to answer your questions in a way that it helps. Keep up the good writing ad ideas my friend.

Author's Response: Hey, thank you SO MUCH for reviewing!! And that too, with the question and answer filled out!! :D

I'll take at a look at the line later, it does seem wrong so I'll changed it. In this, I'm trying to keep Lily very complex and distinct than in other fics. Additionally, "became an Auror and die" is used to show how she could've chosen any, ANY profession in the world and not die, but she basically chose to die by becoming an Auror. This line is like a them throughout this fic, it'll be the last line in every one. Hope this doesn't draw you away from the story!

Thanks so much for the compliment, I really do appreciate you reviewing for me! Check out some of my other stories as well for me, I personally loved writing Golden Snitch and am currently in the middle of After Years of Hiding and A Game of Chess! Hope you'll find those interesting as well!

I'll update soon,
Nisha


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