very kul!!! waiting 4 da next chapter!!

Author's Response: Aww thank you so much.
This is on hold at the moment.
I will try and get around to it soon I promise :)

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First off, you have a GORGEOUS banner! kudos to whoever made it :) I loved your introductory paragraph, the way you described Teddy before we know it's him! it's a really good technique and really drew me in straight away. Your descriptions throughout were really detailed.

I love the idea of another vigilante group, I think Teddy and Victoire will make good leaders. You've really built up their relationship, even in the first chapter.

Keep up the great work :)

- Marina

Author's Response: I KNOW! How incredible is it? It's by Lubi. She's silv3r_ic3 over at TDA. You should totally check her out.

Oh yay! Jack's cunning techniques paid off, I'm glad haha. Were they too detailed though? That's partly what I'm worried about.

Yay! It just seemed like a logical thing for Harry to try and set up. So they're coming across as best friends? Because, for the moment, that's all they are =]

Thanks!

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Hi,

This is, right from the beginning, an amazingly action-packed story. I can't even call this first chapter of yours a Prologue...

Wonderful, smooth dialogues, nice transitions between descriptive and action-packed parts, you truly manage to capture the attention of your audience.

If this is the beginning, what will be the things to come then?

I have only a small remark. Veelas and part-veelas are not the most powerful creatures when it comes to magic. OK, they have magic of their own, but veela charms won't help in situations prompting the resurrection of DA. Curious how you develop it from here...and definitely tuning in for more.

10/10 without any doubt.

Cheers,

Zoltan

Author's Response: Hey Zoltan,

Well, it kind of has to be a prologue. Setting out all the major characters, plot points etc.

Oh good, transition is something I've really been struggling with, so glad I've got that working here =].

In regard to your Veela comment, I have to disagree to a certain extent. Fleur was only 1/4 Veela and she was powerful enough to become a Tri-Wizard champion. And Victoire was the daughter of Fleur and Bill, who got 13 OWLS and worked in an extremely prestigious job. So Victoire would hardly have any Veela blood in her, and she has two very talented parents.

Thanks for the review, I'll try and update soon!

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WOWZAH JACK!

OK, this is the gushy, short review... well, one of them.

I just love, love LOVE the 'visions of greatness' you painted at the start. When you wrote all about the war and his relatives. It was amazing. I don't know how you did it, but you just took me there. I was so sucked into this fic from the start! Ha ha.

I really lvoe your charactersation of Teddy. He seems really cool (and like a bit of a hottie). He he!

The interaction between he and Victoire was really good! Like, really natural, funny and easy to get into the gist of.
You know what I mean? As in, some fics have these two central 'best friend' characters, so to show how close they are they have them speaking pretty much their own language that they've developed slowly over seven years or something, but you showed it in a really beautiful, earnest way.

I can easily see myself hounding you for updates in the future! XD

Oh! And that thing with the Aurors chasing Ron about the country... GENIUS!

I loved it all!!!

xx Posie

Author's Response: This is short? This is not short.

-Hmms- Well I wasn't sure about writing it, but then...it is a bit of a prologue, and it's worth showing just how much Teddy in particular has to live up to. Victoire as well though.

Yeah Teddy is pretty much made of win. He's the awesome older cousin, and you know he's a hottie.

-Whew- I was really worried about that. It was hard in a way, because they've been apart for six months, I had to bring them together in a way that sounded natural but also like they've really missed each other. Yeah I totally get what you're saying. It will be interesting to write, because they aren't even at school anymore.

I'll try and write the next chapter soon I promise.

Heh heh heh, I have to try and make Ron into a character I actually like and want to read about XD

Thank you Rosie Posie!

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Hey, this is LucyLovegood from the forums.

This is really good, you've captured my attention and I really like the sound of this Tri-Wizard thing. I don't think it will be too clichéd - what with the vigilante group. If you could go into more detail about exactly what this group will be doing and why there is a need for it, that would be good. There's a couple of typos and you've spelt Hagrid 'Hadgrid' a couple of times, but other than I like your characterisation of Teddy. The constant attacks from the kids are great too, and seems very likely. Nice work. Let me know when the next chapters up if you want another review. :-)

Author's Response: Hey, well, glad I requested a review =]

Oh good! You're like the second person who's said that haha. This vigilante group is pretty much the same as The Order of the Phoenix/ Dumbledore's Army except it takes things a step further.
Ahh damn, alright I'll go over that and fix it up with an edit.
Teddy is so fun to write, he's just this easy going, chilled awesome older cousin.
I think I just might =] Thank you!

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First of all, I love that Teddy has the flying motorbike. That's cool. As far as next gen goes, I really like that you put in your own special little things about it. Like Shere Kahn. That bit made me smile. It's good to see authors take creative license in next gen and add their own spins on things. Good job.

I am concerned about the Twiwizard thing, even though you told me not to be. At this point, I can't see it turning into anything other than what was in the books - that is, someone special dying in it and the loss resonates throughout the school, thus waking up the people that death can happen at any time. I'm just a little worried. But I'm sure you'll do something nice with it.

This is very good, actually. The interaction between characters was very well done and it showed a lot for their characterizations, which was nice. Teddy is portrayed as very cool, which is always what I thought of him. ^_^ Harry is adult as usual, and Victoire was cute. Good job.

Overall, I really enjoyed this. Ganbare! Tanoshinde ^_^

.:.Ilia.:.

Author's Response: Teddy just seemed like a flying motorbike person to me, I think I'm going to explain how he got it later.
-laughs at Shere Kahn- That bit was kind of fun to write, just showing that Hadgrid's still going strong.

I can totally see what you mean, but I promise it won't be like that. Originally, yes, it was going to be. But then I started thinking exactly what you were so it's changed.

Oh thank you. The interactions are kind of crazy in Next-Gen because there are SO MANY people to deal with. Finding a balance is hard. Teddy is super cool, that's how I imagined him too =] Kind of like a more together guy version of Tonks. Harry is kind of like the chill, relaxed Dad. He's just trying to be as different from the Dursley's as he can. Was Victoire cute? Perfect haha. She gets so hardcore later though.

Thank you so much for reviewing! Oh and Happy Birthday!

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OMNOMNOM THIS CHAPTER WAS YUMMEH! Yup, Me gots an account XD Thought it was finally time to bother :D So, I'm taking your advice and reading everything you've written so far, because I love the Marauders story so much. I have to say though, this kicks muchos arse also! I loved the whole Teddy chasing Ron around the world for six months thing, that made me laugh lots XD And, TEDDY GOTS A MOTORBIEK! Teddy+Motobike=Muchos sexy time XD
My favourite part however had to be:
‘Sounds better than mine.’ Harry said in mock indignation ‘Head of Auror Department. I mean what is that really? Couldn’t it be something like Supremely Glorious Chief Catcher of All that is Evil?’
LMAO XD Genius. Genius. Genius. GENIUS! And the Tri-school; changing tradition is risky, but Melo thinks it's fantastical. LURVED IT AND CANNOT WAIT FOR MORE!
Melo x

Author's Response: Umm this REVIEW IS YUMMEH.
I'm super happy you like it, was my first go at writing Next-Gen so I wasn't really sure how to play it. Teddy didn't just get a motorbike. Teddy got Sirius' motorbike! It'll come later =]
Yep, Harry is cool now! No more angsty angst angst.
Yep, I'm going to have to come up with some super amazingness stuff I think, hopefully I'll make it good!
Thanks for the review, and the favourite!! XD

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Hm.I'm not sure about the Tri School type thing. But I like Teddy and Victoire :D Oh and wouldn't she be Victoire Weasley? Or not? :D 10/10 for Teddy and Victoire's characters.

Author's Response: I'm not entirely sure about it, but it's similar to the GoF in a way. Things are starting to stir up so the Ministry is trying to bring people together. Nope she won't be a Weasley, I'll explain it later. She just isn't Victoire material. Glad you like Teddy and Victoire. Thanks for reviewing!

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Things I loved and are squee worthy:
1. Teddy's training thing was hilarious and I could totally see it happening.
2. Ted and Vic are very clicky together
3. Your Harry was brilliant, I liked him. He is groovy.
4. He has the motorbike!!! I love Sirius's bike, in my head its all shiney and big and perfect. =]
5. You are going to write in the tri-wiz tournament?
6. OMG I CAN NOT WAIT FOR THAT! *excessive happy dancing*
7. The morphing with Teddy was just awesome with a cherry on top.
8. When you had Ted and Vic tied to the chairs- perfect XD
9. The tiger! I want him. *glomps*
10. Everything and anything. Even the little commas and full stops. Because grammar is important. Not that I am very good at it, but you seem to be. I even love the little spaces between the words. =]

Things I didn't like:
1. You left it there.
2. I dont know what happens next.
3. Now I have to suffer untill the next chappie is up.

Things that will keep me going:
1. All of the other allready validated chapters of your other stories.
2. Calico Jack *sighs all dreamy like*
3. The secret sugar stash under my bed.


So for this review I made lists as you can see. It was fun. Can not wait for more *cough previews please cough* XD
Savid.

Author's Response: Jack goes XD and responds:
1. Agreed. I had to give Ron some sort of role of importance, and I wanted to improve him as he didn't really do anything in the books.
2. YAY! yep they is bestest buds.
3. Yep Harry is like awesome. Opposite of Dursley.
4. Hells yeah motorbike! I'll explain later.
5. Indeedy.
6. ME NEITHER! It's 'Tri-School' though.
7. Teddy is super cool older cousin.
8. Teddy + Victoire are the most amazingness!
9. Shere Khan? Me too! Did you like his name?
10. My grammar used to be horrible too. I've really, really worked at it.

Things you didn't like:
1. It is just a prologue.
2. You should like that!
3. Yes. Yes you will. XD

Things that will keep you going:
1. This is very true.
2. Calico Jack who is 100% musician sex
3. I imagine it will =]

I like list reviews methinks. Shall see about previews XD. Thanks! -glomps-

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WHY DIDN'T YOU LET ME READ THIS BEFORE IT CAME OUT?!?!
GR
I LOVE IT. I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT.
You'd better update soon, My dear James. XD
Oh and I LOVE Teddy. :D
Loff you xoxo
-Ande

Author's Response: Umm...because I ish super shneaky?
Is it as good as my Marauder stuff? Next-Gen kind of freaks me out.
Oh, and I'm just about to put Calico on the queue! So more stuff will be coming your way soon I promises!
And thanks for reviewing Ande! You're teh most amazingness! XD

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