that's not what special K is like but cool story Report Review
love love love LOVE your story!!
I feel really bad for lher :(
Draco can be such a prick.
anyway keep up the good work. and please update when you can Report Review
What a wonderful second chapter! Is the main character Pansy? Or Jacqueline? At first I thought it was Pansy, but now it seems to be Jacqueline. Either way it is written beautifully. :]
-camilleAuthor's Response: oh thank you (: and yes, it is Jacqueline that is the main character, sorry for the confusion. again, thank you for reading/reviewing, it means a lot. Report Review
Hey there. I am in love with his story so far. Usually I don't like Draco/Hermione ships, but this is so well written and intriguing. I love this line especially:
"Each face looked the same. Their eyes, half open, their slumped backs, and how they keep yawning every few seconds." It is kind of like poetry. wonderful!
-camilleAuthor's Response: Ah! Thank you so much! This story is one of my favorites that I have written, and I am so very glad you enjoy it.
Again, thank you for your kind words (: it means so much. Report Review
I LOVE it! The whole story & how you are writing... Especially how you are describing her feelings... I can't wait for the next chapter!Author's Response: awh, thank you so much :) atm I am blocked.. so sad.
but I have really been trying lately with this story :)
I'll try my hardest and thank you so much for the review! Report Review
awww. this was a sad chapter. poor girl. it's not a nice thing when memories are the worst possible nightmares. :(
I still really like the story and can't wait for the next chapter! 10/10!Author's Response: Thank you so much! Report Review
This story is slightly confuzzling me, but I'm keeping up.
Please update soon :)Author's Response: The next chapter is in validation =) Report Review
yaya! I"m so excited to read what happens next, so try your best to update rather soon-ish! I love your story to death! 1000/10!!!Author's Response: Aha thank you so much =) The next chapter is in validation. Report Review
OMG i love this story, you have to write more, it's addictive!Author's Response: Ha, thank you, I will.
addictive-ness is goood! Report Review
Fantastic story, really and truly amazing.
It was funny that you mentioned the book Speak, because I was just thinking the chapter before the one where you mentioned it that your story reminded me a lot of it. Not really the plot, not at all actually, but the voice. It also reminded me the book "Go Ask Alice," which, if you haven't read, and you liked Speak, would be a great read for you.
What also is weird is that I've felt exactly the same way as her in the chapter where she is in the hospital wing. I even have writing and poetry that is reminiscent of what Jacqueline thought about in that chapter.
Also, I know that above, in this review it will say that it is by "Hi" I actually have an account on HPFF it just logged me out and i was too lazy to log back in, but my pen name is Rebitt.
Yeah. This is a phenomenal story. One of the best so far that I have read. 10/10 !! PLEASE KEEP WRITING. quickly too.
- RebittAuthor's Response: Thank you for all of those wonderful things you said. And no, I have not read that book, I'll check it out sometime.
And that's alright- laziness is cool. Ahaha.
I am so happy that you like my story and I'll try to hurry up.
Thanks for the rating and thanks for the review itself :) Report Review
This girl is completely DEPRESSED - She honestly just needs someone to show her that there is more to life than boys, love, pain and depression. She needs someone to prove to her that she can have the same happ feelings outside of a relationship. i.e. Get her into a new hobby or introduce her to some new people. And if she reeally likes male company that much, why can't she just be FRIENDS with the guys???
And I know people will say I'm being insensitive but honestly, I'm not! I suffered from serious depression from when my parents divorced (I was twelve) right up untill the year before last. (I was sixteen!) And it wasn't easy to get through, believe me. So, um . . . There are some suggestions on what Ginny, Hermione & co. could do to help Jackie.
With love, Heidi. xoxoxoxoxoxoxooxoxAuthor's Response: Okay so I made Jacqueline for my friend- well to me she is my friend except she has a different name and she goes to Hogwarts. I can't say that I'll for sure change anything about the story or any of the future chapters.
Jacqueline doesn't really... hmm... like male company as much as it seems I guess? I didn't mean to make her look like that.
With Draco it was her first... love. And I mean her first real love. And so I had to make her depression with him seem absolutely horrible. And she is friends with guys its just she seems to be falling for the ones who she isn't meant to be with (?)
So as you know- since you must've read the other chapter- she has men issues. And actually I don't put that in as much as I should. See I make Jackie seem alright with guys but most kids who are hit- or see someone being hit when they are growing up or even after- usually have (whatever the gender is male or female) issues.
Uhm... well with the male company liking thing uh...
As I said before she is friends with most of her guy friends and guys in general but I mean if you think about it I only mentioned her having a liking for two guys so far and well... this is like high school I guess- can one live without a boyfriend throughout high school? Yes but I haven't mentioned Jacqueline having a boyfriend yet- so there is the question has she ever had a boyfriend? She's in her sixth year and well... yea I can't say much about that subject yet... but it would be hard. Well for some no, but for her yes.
Anyway as I was saying- she does have like... wow... like urges? Uhm... yes and well I guess im saying that I don't think that I make her seem as if she thinks guys are everything and all that good stuff. I mean yea I don't think she does- because truthfully she doesn't.
Uh okay with your suggestions- new hobby, new people- love it but as I said in the beginning im not changing much of the story.
And by the way I so don't think your being insensitive.
Wow I really tried to answer this review... I think it was an epic fail... I don't know. I'm bad with responding sometimes.
Oh and one last thing- I might've already said this but I don't remember- you said that someone needs to show her that there is more than boys, love, pain, and depression. Well I mean of course there is but what she's been through, going through, seen and knows is just... well I haven't said everything she knows or seen or any of that YET... so it may seem a little confusing perhaps.
But yes... so I am kind of saying that she does know that- but all she basically experiences is love and pain and depression(because of boys and other things,) and most of the pain and depression she does feel is like held in from what her dad did to her.
So with all that I hope I answered this review fairly well.
Thanks so much for reviewing! Report Review
aww. I feel so bad for her. It just keeps getting worse for her. :( I loved Ginny's reaction, I'm glad that Jackie has a friend at least. 10/10 and I can't wait for more!Author's Response: Yea I know- I feel bad. Thanks soo so so so so sooo much for the review and rating! Report Review
oh my gosh! ah. okay the last time i reviewed which was only yesterday but still, im pretty sure i hated Draco, now I'm sitting in my room going "aw" and yes because Draco had dumped Hermione! *does irish jig* wahey! things are looking up.. buuut. aww. i feel so sorry for Jackie she gets over Draco or well seems to, likes Ron and in comes damzel in distress. poor girl. i think this chapter is well paced! bravo mes amis! 10/10!
xAuthor's Response: Yes I know you reviewed yesterday... and for some reason on the last review for chapter 6 I accidently said all my stories when I meant all my chapters... anyway, I am glad I got that awh effect out of you! and well... Draco didn't really dump Hermione, and she didn't dump him... it was just kind of they seperated...
I know... so sad... but I am seriously a person who loves angst... indeed.
Thanks so much for the review and the rating! Glad you liked the chapter! Report Review
Awww. She never seems to get what she wants does she? Poor girl. I hope things get better eventually, one person can only survive so much crap in their lives. Can't wait for more! 10/10!!Author's Response: No, no she does not. And that is so true... but I won't let her die or anything... or will I?! Haha thanks for the review and glad you liked the chapter! Report Review
jackie and Ron? aww that would be soo good! he's muchos better than Draco. as far as im concerned Hermione can have him =] adding your story to my favourites! update soon?
xAuthor's Response: Oh my goodness... you reviewed all my stories in one day... today! Wow thank you so much and im glad your adding it! haha!
And... just... remember... I am a sucker for angst... even though I hate it... I still kind of love it... it's like Jackie with Draco, she hates him but usually, almost all the time that love replaces the hate! Haha! That's me and angst for ya.
Thanks again for the review... or shall I say reviews? Haha Report Review
I love how you call Draco IT. but why did they take her clothes until she was just in her undies? Hermione is such a pooo bum seriously if her and jackie are supposed to be friends then wouldnt she not know that jackie wouldnt of shouted at a new kid and knew that Draco was lying. i dont know but Jackie doesnt seem like that type of person?
great chapter your story has really got me involved!
xAuthor's Response: Yea I got that from the book Speak... hehehe... oh and well I think you'll find out in the later chapters? Maybe? I forget... they do that because they want to kind of scare her? But it was supposed to be Ginny... and they wanted to get answers out of her... so yea that's why.
With Hermione... it is very complicated... Jacqueline herself is a very complex person... like in the chapter before her dad hit her and that kind of messed her up a little... not much just made her different, of course not in a bad way but... different. Basically I am saying that you can't really expect anything from her... she's full of suprises! So you cannot get all mad at her for that. She's just going from experience of being friends with her.
Thanks for the review! Report Review
ah im beginning to get very annoyed with Hermione!! cant she not just keep her nose out of things..and Draco eee. can't he not see? i just want to run up too him and shout SHE LOVES YOU, YOU FOOL! but err. that would ruin the story i suppose. lol. great chapter
xAuthor's Response: Yea Hermione... well in this story she's supposed to be very... how can I say this... demanding, like if she wants something, she wants it, ya know? And I want it to be kind of a phase because to me in a way she hasn't ever really been givin much in life. I mean magic (THE GREATEST GIFT!) but she's been made fun of, which doesnt usually annoy her much and all that and I guess the feeling of Draco kind of making her baddish or something?
I am bad with describing what I'm trying to say... uhh... yea...
Draco... he doesnt see because for all the years they've been best friends and he just doesn't really think about it too much, ya know?
So uh yea haha. Thanks a billion for your review :) Report Review
I'm really confused so helpfully you can help me out..
how did Jackie and Draco become to be friends cus afterall we know the attitudes that Slytherins and Gryffindors have towards each other?
It seems to me like Draco is the addiction? could i be right in saying this??
great chapter !! xAuthor's Response: Jackie first came to Hogwarts during 2nd year. I haven't really included it in the story yet but something happened during the naming ceremony and yes that is all I can include at the moment... sorry... hehehe... and I am so sorry but I don't understand what you mean by Draco being the addiction?
Okay well thanks for the review! Sorry I couldnt answer the questions... Report Review
wow. you've managed to put a moral into your story, the first story i've ever came across to do so! =] i totally agree with your authors note! i feel so sorry for Jacqueline! for her to feel so low that she came to drugs i really do pity her, and all i want to do is give her a massive hug! though on the otherhand i did chuckle a bit when you called it Special K cus in the U.K thats a cereal! lol. Hermione isnt that good of a friend is she? for her not to notice that she was feeling so rotten is nearly unbelievable if there supposed to be that close! what year are they in by the way?
great chapter! xAuthor's Response: At the moment they are in their 6th year, and yeah in Canada, too, it's a cereal... but uhh once I watched this movie and the girl took a drug called special K so I just used that.
I wouldn't say Hermione is a BAD friend... yet... but she is just caught up in the excitement of everything... she hasn't really been bad except for with Harry and Ron but that was more, how do I say it? Dangerous... but well... a different kind perhaps? I'll go with that.
Anyway thanks so much for the review! I hope I like... answered... fully (?) Report Review
wow thats a great first chapter!
your spot on with this girls feelings! And im glad to see that Oc hasnt got everything straight away, and that Draco isnt all perfect because afterall he's been playing away two girls like two..err.. fiddles? it was shot and snappy and i love when a story is like this because i find it hard when people right like 2000 chapter i usally get distracted and this time i didnt! bravo 10,10!!Author's Response: Haha, awh! Thank you so so so so much! Wow... now I feel good :) Thank you so much for the review and the awsome-ness (?) of it! Report Review
awww. It's so cute. I hate that her dad is such a jerk, but it's nice that she had somewhere she could go. Mrs. Weasley is a real saint! lol. 10/10!Author's Response: Yeah he does suck, big time! Thanks so much for the review! Report Review
intersting. I'm a little confused, but that's ok. I'm sure it will all be resolved in the next chapter, or at least the new kid, kidnapping weaslette part. :D lol. loved the chapter!Author's Response: Thanks for the review!
Uh... I don't think I mention it in the next chapter... well anyway the new kid part is like Draco took something to make him look different... if that makes sense? So that's what I meant. Because you know... Draco at the Gryffindor table? I don't think so. I hope I answered your question and thanks again! Report Review
Is the person that loves Draco, Ginny? 'Cause I'm a little confused. But so far it's really good.Author's Response: No it is not Ginny. You'll find out in Chapter Two. Thanks so much for the review. Report Review
Loved this chapter.
10/10Author's Response: Thank you! Report Review
Another great chapter. I liked how she was being sarcastic.
10/10Author's Response: Haha thank you. Report Review
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