When's the next update?!(: Report Review
Great chapter! Love the story! Update again soon please!!! Report Review
Great story! I can't wait until the next chapter! Report Review
Really did the emotional part well...
Looking forward to next chapter. Report Review
Ooooft Ailsa.Don't think Bonnie could have done your Ginny justice! Report Review
That is a really interesting beginning. Keep it up! Report Review
Wow, nice job! This is your first fic?!
I think that this is possibly a little over written, but it's beautiful, so maybe that was the style you were aiming for.
Peace:) Report Review
Wow! This chapter~the story~ is good!
when will the next chapter be updated? Report Review
Interesting start, look forward to seeing what happens next, btw great banner! Report Review
That was amazing. I loved it. Your banner rocks too. Report Review
Good start, I enjoyed it. I agree with other reviewers about the spacing of the lines. For a short chapter you got a lot accross, Harry's state of mind and physical tiredness for example. I look forward to seeing how you develop and build the characters as individuals (dificult in a short first chapter.) I guess I would have liked to see some more detail and build up. but overall well done, you left me definitely wanting more. Thank you. 7/10.
Tgfoy Report Review
I liked it; the plot's there, but it still needs developing. For a first fic/chapter though, it's very good. I would suggest leaving spaces bettween lines. If it's not dialogue and you're just describing the setting or whatever, it's fine, but to make it more appealing and grammatically correct, try to leave a space between each line of dialogue. It will make it look much cleaner and easier to read. On a different note, I know you're just starting out with this, but try to build on the depth of the character's personalities more; bring out the traits that we can relate to, for example, give a Harry a stronger composition. It'll seem more natural. Other than that though, great work! 7/10. Report Review
I like the start however I think u should add more space between the sentences or else people will be a little confused. Don't take me wrong on the review ok? I'm just saying this because i've read a lot of stories from hpff and I think if u give more space between the sentences this story wil have more readers and that means more reviews!!!^_^
P.S: What did u think of my review?
Harry and Ginny Report Review
This is really good good so far. I hope that you upsate soon. I am just a little confused and hope that Ginny has been recently cursed. Surely she hasn't been sitting in the great hall with her mum bleeding for several hours. But you are doing fantastic. 10/10Author's Response: fair point! ok i didn't think it through enough! oops... Report Review
wow, this was really good! you've got me hooked.Author's Response: thank you! I will continue to write more! Report Review
OK, you asked for it. First, you make Harry act & look stupid, second this chapter is way too short, there is not much in it.
Why didn't Harry call Kreacher and have him take Ginny to the hospital
Give Harry a little more common sense that what you have so far. Give Harry some backbone and if this is a love story, show it.Author's Response: firstly harry is tired and can't think straight because his mind is already overloaded, but I will give him more backbone later on, don't worry! Report Review
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