this was beautiful, and absolutely deserved the award you won.
without a doubt a 10/10. it'd be higher if it were possible.
ihavealife iswearAuthor's Response: thank you so much! Report Review
The ending was bittersweet and it was really, really well-written. Loved it! :DAuthor's Response: thank you so much! Report Review
very good i liked this one it is perhaps one of my favs good work and keep writingAuthor's Response: Wow, that means a lot! Thank you! Report Review
I really enjoyed that. A sweet but sad ending.
It's true that he turned out pretty well without any parents, but I wish their lives hadn't been cut so short, so soon :(
:) GAuthor's Response: I know, I wish that too. Very tragic, really :( Thank you, though, for reviewing! Report Review
OMG that was the best one shot i have ever read it is BRILLIANT keep writing !Author's Response: Thank you! That means a lot (: Report Review
That was really beautiful. It was so nicely written, tragic but in a way I suppose inspiring. loved it :)
xx A.Author's Response: thank you so much! Report Review
i think your story was excellent and the last line is so...good(cos i can't think of a better word)Author's Response: Thank you so much! Report Review
i have tears in my eyes as i type this...
even through a single chapter, you have described the potter's perfectly...
the last sentence was the best...time on earth may be short lived, but not in vain...amazing...
i am at a loss for words...
i am not at all surprised that this was chosen as the best one-shot...Author's Response: Thank you so much! Report Review
Wow brilliant, I can see why it won a Dobby award.
10/10!Author's Response: Thank you so much! That means a lot :) Report Review
absolutely amazing piece of work tat brought tears to my evesAuthor's Response: thank you so much! Report Review
This is beautiful. It's incredible that in such a short story you can bring tears to my eyes.Author's Response: Thank you so much! Report Review
This is amazing. The last sentence made me want to cry!Author's Response: Aww (: Thank you! Report Review
You made me bawl like a baby.Author's Response: Wow! I'm sorry, I guess ^-^ And thank you! Report Review
this story has rendered me speechless. it was wonderful and moving. sometimes I wondered how you could put every single persons fears so clearly on paper. Wonderful and I'm favoring it!
breezieairAuthor's Response: Thank you so much, breezieair! Report Review
omg. i'm crying. that was so beautiful! Lily/James stuff always gets to me i tell you, and this story is exceptionally well written. I love it, you've done wonderful!
xoxoAuthor's Response: Thank you so much, Ava! I'm happy you liked it ^-^ Report Review
amazingly beautiful storyAuthor's Response: Thank you! Report Review
That was very impressive. You've brought out the characters amazingly (even the little mention of the Marauders), not sticking to the usual uptight Lily and immature James. I loved the way you bring out their feelings and thoughts. Though it's chiefly Lily's POV, you found subtle ways to bring James to notice. The little details that bring out the scene beautifully made it a very lovely read. Great work!
And, congratulations on winning the Dobby Award! Definitely well deserved! :)Author's Response: Thank you so much for the kind words, preena! Report Review
Wow, that was really gorgeous, and really well-written. It made me happy and nostalgic and all sort of things all at the same time. Your writing really has a great flow to it, all the ideas are well-connected. I don't really read a whole lot of one-shots, I'm more of a novel person, but I thought this one was really beautiful. Congratulations on winning a Dobby Award! You deserve it 100% :)Author's Response: Thank you so, so much! Report Review
That was just beautiful! I don't even know how else to describe it, you did a wonderful job!Author's Response: Thank you so much! Report Review
Wow, that was simply amazing! I read this before and I saw so pleased to see it won!!!
You really captured everything well, I love Marauder Era fics ( even wrote one myself XD) so this is really amazing in my eyes!
Well Done for winning, you deserved it!
100Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm so happy you liked this piece ^-^ Report Review
I saw this won one of the HPFF awards--and since it was Marauder's Era (my favorite)--I decided to check it out. No story deserves it more. This was beautiful, moving. I loved the way you showed so many different moments, but the flow was excellent. Congrats on the win!Author's Response: Wow, that means a lot to me. Thank you so much for reviewing, vintageoctober. Report Review
I don't know what else to say.
I hope it wins the Dobby '09.Author's Response: Wow - that means a lot to me. Thank you so much! Report Review
I love this, its one of the best Lily/James stories I've ever read, but its not really a one-shot. Most people would have written this as a story with 3 chapters.Author's Response: Yes, that is true. But I love one-shots that stretch over a span of years. I can never resist writing them - to me, they're much more effective and emotional if they come in one go, while others may think they're rushed. Anyway, I'm rambling. Thanks for reviewing - you made my day! Report Review
Hello! Hedwigeon from the fourms with your desired review! I must applaued you on your grammatical skills, there are no grammar or spelling mistakes in this entire piece. Your sentence structure is wonderfully done, as well as everything else in this piece.
I really love your variety of language in this piece. You used more creative words to express simple meanings; tuning this piece to perfection. It appears as though you have referred to a thesaurus, but you have done it well. Many people have a misconception of what a thesaurus is designed to do. A thesaurus is designed to help a writer express themselves in a proper manner; not to sound more intelligent. So very nicely done.
This piece was so well written, the way you have expressed everything gives the appearance it was done by a professional. I believe I am going to favorite your story because I enjoyed it so much. I apologize if you were seeking criticism in my review, but honestly, I have none. Wonderful job hon!
- pigwigeonAuthor's Response: I'm so sorry for this late reply - I haven't known what to say, and truth be told, I'm still not sure what to reply. But thank you - your words mean a lot to me. I have to say, since I did use a thesaurus when it came to a few words here and there, I'm so glad you think I did it well. And again, thank you - for reading, reviewing and favoriting. You have made my entire week with this lovely review (: Report Review
I have absolutely no idea what to say - but I will try! This was so amazingly sweet in a way I haven't read before. There are so many great parts in this. I loved the whole thing and I can't really find anything to put a finger on.
My favourite part is Part Two. It's so sweet and I really think you've captured the feeling of missing some other time. I think it's something most people (especially older people) can relate to. The carefree times where you were just children with no worries. The times where everything was all right and just so innocent. Wow, I'm sounding really sentimental here. But it's this story that brings it up in me. Haha.
In the very very beginnign you have one sentence written in presence tense, while the rest of the story is in past tense. That was the only thing I have to point out.
I really loved the way Lily asked James if they'd marry each otehr some day. It's so easy to slip, and even though James probably saw it as a kind of proposal, I totally see what Lily meant. Like, to know where he is. And also, I think, because she seems a little scared of what's to come, the idea of her and James gives her a feeling of safety. It's so sweet.
I really loved the last quote. It's so fitting here.
I was afraid because of the lenght, but it didn't even seem to be that long. It was all so well written that I actually wants it to have been longer.
I truly loved this, and find this one of the best one-shots I've read in a long time (and I read a lot). Well done, it's a 10!Author's Response: I don't know what to say either! Firstly, I will check out that sentence in the beginning. I have a feeling that I've come across it before... And yes, that's what I wanted her to mean when Lily asked him! I'm so happy you caught that! Because you're right, she's scared and she wants to know if he'll be a part of her unpredictable future. Anyways, I don't know what else to say before I start to sound lame. But thank you so much for this amazing review. It totally made my entire week! Report Review
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