21 cm? Normal babies är like 50 cm...Author's Response: Does it say CM's? It should be inches. I will change when I have time. Thanks for the call out :) Report Review
I feel for Draco because he still loves Hermione but i'm glad he has found someone else! The desk sex although not very detailed, was an interesting scenario haha, can't imagine Hermione doing such a spontaneous thing! :D I know Molly is strict, but she was a little harsh to Ange I think, Ange was just sticking to her beliefs, and nobody said she would never marry George.Author's Response: If you read the sequel you will find out if Ange ever does... I know it wasnt detailed, but this is a family friendly site :) Report Review
I was enjoying the heated moment between Ron and Hermione, but It was funny how Molly walked in on them XD Justice indeed. I agree, Brooks and Crannies is a very cute name for a shop, and I like the little injection from HP, about Hogsmeade :)Author's Response: Thanks. glad you are still enjoying it all. Report Review
I am so glad I've found this out after it's all posted, I could not bear having to wait a week for each new chapter! I'm hooked! Loved that she slapped some sense into Ron - She is obviously the fiery woman we all know XD And so glad he finally kissed her. About time, Ron! The Arthur and Molly part was awkward but hilarious!!Author's Response: I know. I can't help myself sometimes. I hate sappy fluff stuff, it makes me uncomfortable (what that says about me I dont know), so I had to break that up before I got sick on myself. What better way then with an Awkward A/M interaction? Report Review
I love how you included Captin Wentsworth from "Persuasion" in your FF, it was a little injection of reality into your piece :) Also loving the girl power type statement at the end - the women do always have to get things done, I completely agree with Hermione there! :)Author's Response: I know, right? I love Persuasion, it is probably one of my favorite JA books. Report Review
I'm warming to Linus now that it seems he may have a tragic past himself, which is what has caused him to become so distant perhaps..and I'm getting to like Mitzi more, but I hope Ron doesn't start to date her!Author's Response: you and so many others. Dont worry it will all work out in the end. Report Review
Some minor grammatical errors, but they can be forgotten. Forgot to make a review for the last chapter, but I liked how you included your FF title - "Regretfully yours" in Draco's letter to Hermione..It just ties your whole fanfiction together!Author's Response: thanks. I try to tie in the title in all of my stories. I am sure there are tons of errors. I am horrible with punctuation and certain grammatical things. My mom would be so ashamed. Report Review
If you had to separate Draco and Hermione, that was the best way to do it because Draco still loves her and has shown that he can be a better man and give her up.. Heartbreaking though! I'd rather they had stayed together..aw well. Hopefull Ron and Hermione will get together then and Draco will find someone else!Author's Response: LOL. Glad you are okay with it. Report Review
I'm a Romione fan, but I like that you made Hermione stick by her wedding vows, it's a Hermione thing to do :) I can really imagine this happening in their world after the real HP story ^-^Author's Response: Thank you so much for understanding that. I cannot tell you how many people have given me hell for making Hermione not run straight to Ron. It's like they cannot understand Hermione's character at all. Report Review
I'm in a way glad that Draco is innocent - I'm starting to like this new improved Draco who is still kind of cold, but does love Hermione :) I can't choose between them! I want her to be with Ron cause they're soo meant to be! But i like her being married to Draco too! decisions. Loved the small bit on ancient Egyptuans thrown in , very romantic!Author's Response: Thanks. I too had the same problem of choosing between those two. Report Review
Another riveting chapter, I'm dying to find out what Hermione has just realised about Ron's memories and if Draco really had anything to do with Ron's disappearance xD
Another thing - just curious - is Longford a place in England? Because it's also a county in Ireland :)Author's Response: I honestly dont remember. I am sure it is because I look up stuff like that usually when I am writing, but it has been so long that I am not sure. Report Review
It took me a while, but I could understand her accent haha. I think, that the man she was talking to may be Draco, and possibly he paid her and arranged for her to be at the club to pick up Ron - is she a prostitute? :o - so Ron would be distracted from his wife Hermione...Well, we shall see xDAuthor's Response: Yes you shall... Thanks again for reading and reviewing. Report Review
Getting real interesting now ;D I love the play on the famous scene, "It's LevIOSa, not, leviosA" xDAuthor's Response: LOL Thanks :) Report Review
Hi. I have only just started to read your wonderful story. YAY! That means that I can read the whole thing completely, no waiting for updates. :-) So... last night I got to read 20 chapters and am enjoying it very much. -I work a job that all I do is sit around and read al night long. Great, huh? Not really but...--
Anyway, I love it but then I knew that I would. I have read several of your stories and love them greatly also.
There isn't much that I can say that the others haven't so I will keep this short.
I am enjoying this story very much. The anger, the love, the hate, depression, happiness, fear... and that's mostly from me! :-)
You're such an excellent writer... but you know know that already. I love your dead on characterizations. You know them oh so well. Keeps the story flowing.
Gotta go.. On my way to work... to read!!! :-)
What is the name of the sequel you mentioned? I will NEED that after I finish this one. :-)
PatriciaAuthor's Response: Thank you so much. Really glad that you like this so much along with any of my other works that you have read. The next story is called 'Oh, The Tragedy of it All' It is more of a spin off than a sequel, but I hope you like it.
Thanks again. Report Review
I love your use of the word "owled" x) It puts a funny little modern twist on the HP world, as they have no mobile phones and such. They owl instead of tweet. All rather bird related hahah. Great work!Author's Response: Thank you :) Report Review
Could have described the venue a little more, to give us an image of what it looks like, and what the guests were wearing maybe? But still, I am stuck to this fanfic, it's riveting! Always wanting to know what's going to happen next! :]Author's Response: Thanks. I tend to forget a lot about description when writing. It is one of the things I try to work on, but I really like to stress the characters and dont want to focus on background noise too much. It is a fine line that I am still working on Report Review
Intriguing that you created a female elf, as they weren't mentioned to have existed at all in HP. :) I also like that you threw in the possible fling between this Blakely woman and Ron...shall be interesting to see xD Keep it up!Author's Response: :) Blakely is so much fun. I almost did a spin off of her, but never got it started. And I think that Crouch's old elf was a female. Anyway. Thanks so much for reading and taking the time to review. Report Review
You capture a broken marriage perfectly! although I feel sorry for poor Draco who obviously loves his wife and hermione just doesn't feel the sameAuthor's Response: Thanks. I have seen a lot of people go through this (thankfully not me). Report Review
Very well written, I really like your style! I'd put in more character development maybe :) More descriptions.Author's Response: Thanks. I appreciate the feedback. It is so hard to get character development in when there are so many characters :) Report Review
ROTFL I was taking a drink when I read:
“Well, I’d say we’re even. Wouldn’t you?” And with that she wanded the milk and shards of glass from the floor and disappeared back into the hall.
I almost choked laughing so hard! Awesome statement!Author's Response: lol Thanks. Glad i was able to make you laugh Report Review
This was a great story. keep up the great work.Author's Response: Thank you. Glad you enjoyed. Report Review
I really like this! Poor hermione... ):Author's Response: Thank you. Glad you are enjoying. Report Review
Hahahahahaha. awww. The way the.brothers all fanged up on hart is.so funny!!!Author's Response: Thanks, glad you enjoyed. Report Review
I finished already?! No! This was so magnificent! Absolutely wonderful! I feel like just rereading it all over!
Haha! Now I'm off to read more of your writing.
Great job!Author's Response: Wow... thanks again so much. I hope you enjoy my other stuff as well :) Report Review
Hii! Started reading this yesterday and i am hooked. I cannot stop! I'm to the point where I'm reading it on my cell phone! I'm one of those silent lurkers and your little note made me feel bad so I decided to leave a review. I might not do it again for a couple chapters due to the fact that I can't stop reading. Haha don't want this to end!Author's Response: LOL - thats okay, just glad you are reading and enjoying. Thanks so much for taking the time to leave a review though. I hope you continue to enjoy. Report Review
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