This looks like it's going to be a fun story to read, I can't wait to see more chapters up. I don't usually give out grammar advice so you shouldn't ever see this again, but through this chapter I noticed about 6 or 7 times you accidentally changed it from 1st person to 3rd person. Nothing major but I though you should know. Rating: 10/10Author's Response: Sorry for the long wait on the reply. It was originally 3rd person, so when I finish all my assignments, I'll try and fix it. Thanks for the review Report Review
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