Very sweet. Rolf's character is perfect, eh?
and they're pregnant! Yahoo!
Nice job, as ever. :D!Author's Response: Thank you so much. This was an experiment for me. I'm not usually one to dwell on the senses or emotions, so I was trying to do more of that here. As you can tell by now, Luna's my favourite character and I liked writing her here.
Glad you liked the little bit of Rolf we got to see. Report Review
you're good. and my mouth was hanging open when u wrote Pakistan. Thats where im originally from =D
ur 48/49 arent u?
^^ u were in high school 20 years from 2007.
just wondering lol.
ur quiet good at writing.
i Author's Response: This is one of my favourite pieces that I've written; not because I think it's the best thing I've written, but because I think it shows emotion better than I usually do.
Thanks so much for the compliments. Yeah, you probably don't see Pakistan mentioned much in fanfic, but that region fit with nagas quite well, as would have India.
I'm not quite that old, but I am over forty :P
I could SWEAR that I've read this before. In fact, before reviewing, I checked to see if I'd left an anonymous review for it, but I haven't. I'm absolutely positive I've read this before, though. Obviously I didn't review it. I do review most of what I read, but sometimes I let it slide.
Anyway. Your portrayal of Luna here was so lovely. Luna is lovely. Your descriptions of her wanting so badly to open that package made me want to rip it open too, and I'm not normally a package ripper! Zephira was a wonderful touch to the story as well.
Best of all, you included so many little things that make Luna Luna. With what other character could you include a talk to the Cryptozoological Society, or have them living in an African village studying the M'Kele M'Bembe (did I spell that correctly?). I loved the touch with Hagrid matchmaking, too, and the way Rolf was the son of a famous explorer. You definitely did Luna justice here.Author's Response: This was a bit of an experiment for me. I needed some practice writing first person and I'm comfortable writing Luna, so I thought this would be a good fit to write.
I'm so glad that you think I did her characterization justice. This story sat with 0 reviews for a long time and on the other site it's at, it didn't have many either, so I was very concerned about how I did with it. When I finally did get reviews, they were very positive, so I think I got it right.
I love cats (if you couldn't tell), and a kneazle isn't so much different. Zephira is based a lot on our cat, Gremlin and how she would play with a ripped piece of Christmas paper, especially one with an interesting smell.
I'm sure you could tell that this was a more recent story because I think the writing in this one is vastly improved over some of my earlier stories. Report Review
I like this!
See, this is why I love the review tag thing, because you can find some really amazing stories. (:
Luna's character is just like in the book, she's dreamy and quirky. The way you phrase things is really nice, it all flows really well.
I like the little bits you put in, like Crumple-Horned Snorkacks and such, that are from the book and stuff. If that makes sense?
But really, I did like this. A lot. I'm glad I got to read it. (:
-JasmineAuthor's Response: Thank you so much for the review. After I first posted this, it went months without a review, so I wondered if it had some fatal problem that I didn't know about.
I've written quite a bit of Luna and I think that I'm just now starting to get her characterization down.
I thought the story needed canon bits to tie it together, so I made sure to add those.
I truly appreciate the time it took you to read and review. Report Review
Hey, emerald_moons from the forums here!
Wow, this is really elegant and well written. I don't understand why anyone hasn't reviewed! I love Luna's characterization, and she is on spot. I cannot think of anything about her I don't like, or anything about this story. The flow was brilliant and this is overall a sweet little one shot. Cute and pleasing to read, I think you did this amazingly.
-EmmyAuthor's Response: Thanks for the validation. I've read and re-read it and wondered why not a single review.
I'm so glad to know that I got Luna right and that it rings true to you. I like the word 'elegant,' thank you for using it. With this and 'Ashes,' elegant and poetic was what I was going for.
I'm nreally glad that you enjoyed it and that there's not some big problem with it that I hadn't noticed. Report Review
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