I love it too much already. It is a sincere and complete relief that you have a James/Lily dynamic is not only believable, but sort of exactly what I have always agreed with - I never liked the idea of desperate!James and hateful!Lily. She is incredibly reasonable and the way she describes James seems pretty fair.
"James?" I gaped. "As in James Potter? Why in Merlin's name would I want to date James Potter? Why would he want to date me? What exactly do you think friendship means?"
Her reaction to the silly sixth years is too funny. I really love this line in particular. I think it may have hooked me good.
I'm willing to wait, but please, do continue...
Cheers.Author's Response: Aw, thank you. :) I find it really difficult to characterize James and Lily, and it means a lot that you like how I've done it. I just don't think that a smart girl like Lily would dislike James for no reason. I'm absolutely thrilled that you like where this story is going. I don't know when I'll update, but I'll definitely try to do so soon. ^_^ Report Review
woohoo i really like it!! especially your characterisation of lily. please update soonAuthor's Response: Thanks! :D It's great that you like it. Report Review
What a great first chapter! I really like it. You have found a very good line between dialogue and description which I find close to perfect! I loved the - I don't know, what was it? A prologue? Well, I loved it! It was so sweet, and definitely made me want more!
I like the whole scene in the library, even though I do not see someone interupting when others are talking. Gossip people would keep quiet till they'd heard something very juicy.
A really fantastic first chapter, I really loved it!
Oh, and I just realised as I made this a favourite of mine, that it's the third of your stories I've done so with. Haha.Author's Response: Thanks, Groundswell! :D Close to perfect? That makes me extremely happy. I'm always a little unsure about the line between dialogue and description, and therefore it's great that you think it was good. ^_^ Yeah, you're probably right about the interrupting part. The girl who did interrupt wasn't the gossip queen, though, she was just a little stupid. :P Thank you for this wonderful review. In fact, thank you for all of your wonderful reviews! :) It means the world to me that you read and review my stories. Report Review
this sounds great, I'm really looking forward to reading more chapters!
Lily sounds very awesome, and believable. I like the elements of hypocrisy and vanity that you introduced; it really rounded out the blurb thingo.
SO! Any time you want to update, you know... Any time.
xxAuthor's Response: Thanks! :D I'm glad Lily sounds believable, as that's what I think is most important when writing a character. Hypocricy and vanity are indeed vital elements to the story, and it's great that you like it. You just made me really happy! I don't know when I'll be able to udpate, as I'm trying to finish chapter seven of Echoes of light, but it'll hopefully be soon. Again, thank you for the great review! :) Report Review
i like this story!
but are you still writing echoes of light?
because im OBSESSED with that and you haven't updated in a while
well im excited to see what happens to lily so update soon please[[:Author's Response: Aw, thanks! :) Don't worry, I'm still writing Echoes of Light, which I'm thrilled that you like so much, by the way. Chapter seven is a little harder to write than I originally thought, but I'll try to have it up by the end of 2008. :) Report Review
It's so good so far!! Please update soon!Author's Response: I'm glad you think so. :) I'll try to update soon, but I can't promise anything, unfortunately. Report Review
this is a great first chapter! i love the cliffhanger ending - cant wait to see where that takes the story! i particularly liked the conversations between Lilyand Nellie - very true to life and amusing :]]
please update, soon xxxAuthor's Response: Thanks! I'm so thrilled that you like it. A cliffhanger's an author's best friend. ^_^ I'm glad you like Lily and Nellie's conversation, as I had a lot of fun writing it. Oh, and congrats on the first review. :) Report Review
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