This is most defiantly a little bit of fluff. But I liked it. You captured James and Lily perfectly. Report Review
This one is amazing too
I'm now a jealous person. Haha.
Seriously, though. It's so detailed and really fits her. Or how she's seen through out Harry Potter:) Report Review
This is really good! Some of the talking between the Marauders could have been more natural, but apart from that it was really good! Report Review
Oh this story was just so adorable. I love James' chareactar in this story. 10/10;)Author's Response: thank you so much!! :] Report Review
great story! I was getting butterflies too! the butterflies you get when you read a really good story! (cough)Author's Response: aw wow, thats great! thanks so much for the lovely review and for taking the time to read my fic! Report Review
I really loved this!
Your style is great, though the spelling mistakes were quite annoying - microsoft word or something similar should be able to catch that, or you could get someone to beta for you.
Apart from that, I thought the idea was great and it was written really well - I could feel the butterflies and her mood was conveyed perfectly.
A lovely read!Author's Response: yea ... spelling isn't quite my strongest attribute, sorry if it made the reading difficult!
thanks so much for taking the time to read and review! Report Review
Hahahaha this was so cute. I really liked it.
A couple of things though. James' hair was probably a mop rather than a mob. And just with your sentence structure, I just feel there has to be a way you can break it up a little better. For some reason at the moment they feel a little long and...drawn out?
I know that seems overly critical but this really is a very cute little one-shot. I enjoyed it =)
Oh and thanks for reviewing mine, that was much appreciated. More smiles for you =)Author's Response: yea it was sort of written on a whim ... so i can understand how you would feel that way. hopefully someday i'll go back and tidy it up, but at the mo im working on another (longer) fic to post here - so revisions might not come for a while!
thanks for reading and reviewing, anyway! Report Review
Subtle. Satisfying... What am I taking about?! Sounds like I'm reviewing a smoothie ot something!...What? Oh, yeah, review.It's was cool. A typical short-and-sweet.
--- --- --- --- --- --- --- --- --- --- --- --- --- --- ---"When you change the channel, we talk about you behind your back."
-Mandy, The Grim Adventures of Billy and MandyAuthor's Response: short-and-sweet, that describes it well.
thanks for reviewing! Report Review
this was good, it was short and enjoyable and it even made me laugh. i wouldn't say it was overflowing with fluff really, i mean at least they're not confessing their undying love :PAuthor's Response: haha exactly! it was fluff, i warned readers it would be fluff, and it was flufftastic! Report Review
i think this is really cute; now i really want to know what happens after.Author's Response: thank you for reviewing!
and ... em ... i think im just going to leave this as a one-shot, sorry!! i just think it works better that way! Report Review
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