wow this chapter is so short and has no dialogue yet was still really interesting! The description/ detail is perfect, I especially liked the part where Lindsey is transforming her face to deal with her boredom. I really like your writing. Can't wait to see the next chapter. Don't worry too much about length, I think you're going great. When it's finished you could always merge some chapters ;)

10/10

-Ginnyfan4life

Author's Response: Thank you so much. I like your idea about merging chapters, I have already been thinking about it a little. I also promise to have a lot more dialogue in the next chapter.

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Really good story so far.
10/10
When can I expect the next update?


-matt

Author's Response: Thank you. The next chapter is in validation and should be up in the next day or so.

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Really good first chapter. Lindsey seems like a really interesting character. The memory at the end was my favorite part. My only complaint is that it is so short! Please update soon and make the next chapter longer lol
10/10

Thanks for the great read and Merry Christmas

~Ginnyfan4life

Author's Response: Thank you. I am sorry the length is really something that I have been trying to work on. My next chapter is almost done, I think that it will be a little longer (hopefully). If you have any suggestions about were I could add more detail I would really appreciate it.

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I like the story so far. = )
Your a talented writer. ( :

Author's Response: Thank you, I promise to update soon.

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