You really made me cry which I find quite impressive for so few words. I've read so many stories about Fred's death including the actual book, but not even JKR made me realise that Fred is truly gone. But you did! Report Review
This was very good! I often wonder what George was like after Fred died and it's good to read about it.
It was really sad but really good!
10/10Author's Response: Thank you so much!
I am really glad that you enjoyed it.
I thought it was really sad too, I was on the verge of tears writing it. Report Review
omg so good but so sad!!Author's Response: Thank you. Report Review
That was absolutely perfect!! I love it. Keep the one shots coming, please.Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review.
I'll see what I can do about some more oneshots. :) Report Review
Awe, poor George.
It was a lovely one-shot...I would be in bits if I lost my twin, I can't imagine what poor George must be going through =[
There were a few typos in places, such as 'brusing' instead of 'brushing' and "some to replace", 'someone?'.
But it was still good.Author's Response: Ah, thanks for pointing those out. Spelling is not my strong point. I'll make sure to go and change those. Report Review
That was really sad, but well written... maybe a bit short though... you couldve had some flashbacks... it was fine the way it was thoughAuthor's Response: Thank you.
I thought about putting in some flashbacks, but I had a hard time coming up with ideas. Report Review
Interesting one-shot. The one item that I would say is that you may want to add detail. Like what George was feeling as he finally accepted Fred's death. What was the reason George started to feel differently? Maybe like, the sun came out, or he just stared at the grave site and thought some more.
Just a thought
Nicely writtenAuthor's Response: Thank you for the review and for you idea. I had thought I included something along those lines, but then again this was basically the first thing I've ever written and I'm not one for reading things over...
I'll make sure to keep that in mind for what I write next. Report Review
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