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Review #1, by Jene Chapter 1

19th August 2017:
Nice chapter really,keep writing

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Review #2, by *-*SweeTart*-* Chapter 1

15th November 2008:
I like your story. Even though there are a few errors, in the begining it says she was looking for something in her trunk then it cuts off and goes to her gasping that Draco's there. And then later blaise and hermione are talking about her make up in the bathroom- then it goes to her glaring at malfoy- to their walking out of them bathroom.

I laughed out loud when i read about the i hate potter and weasel club.
I loved that you explained what the commonroom looked like, i got a very good visual.

I think you should drag his out to chapters. It just seems like too much for one, and should probably be explained more, and it doesn't really flow right.
And i would of liked to read about the spin the bottle, and for her dream to be explained more like were they are and stuff.

I'm not trying to be rude or anything. I just wanted to give you some advice, i think this story could be really good if it wasn't so rushed and explained a little more.
It's still a good story, blaise and hermione all the way!

Author's Response: Thanks so much for your review! I've never tried a Hermione/Slytherin bofore, I like Blaise and Hermione too :)
Thanks for the tips,

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